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Water View

when tears fill my ultramarine view ~ your silhouette swims in its depths


Susan Ashley
December 30, 2017


~ Second Place ~
Contest: Monoku 3: fire, earth, water and air
Sponsor: Silent One

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Darlene De Beaulieu

September 1, 2018 at 7:02 PM

Hello Susan, I enjoyed your monoku. Have a nice evening my friend.

Susan Ashley

September 1, 2018 at 8:24 PM

Hello Darlene, thank you for the kindness of your visit and for your lovely comments. Enjoy the rest of the weekend my dear friend.. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Joseph P. DiMino

February 22, 2018 at 10:16 AM

Beautiful imagery! Sad to lose someone we love so much. It has happened to me tragically--I know the deep pain. Water is spirit. For me, the term silhouette, in the context of this work, also means, the perfect image(life) that we all have at the core of our being, excluding the often less desirable surface. A joy when I can see beyond myself, allowed to glimpse for an instant as our creator sees truth. Oh could I do it more often! Thank you for reminding me where to look and to whom.

Susan Ashley

February 22, 2018 at 3:54 PM

Joe, thank you for your profound comments. I'm sorry for the depth of pain your tragic loss brought to you - I can empathize with you.. Your keen insight into my poem is heartwarming and beautiful, as you feel my words. Thank you for sharing your precious thoughts with me, my friend.. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Harshita Chaudhary

February 12, 2018 at 1:21 AM

Lovely poem. Beautiful words used :)

Susan Ashley

February 12, 2018 at 3:05 PM

Harshita, your visit delights me and I remember that you love poems about water.. Thank you for your lovely comments. I'm happy you enjoyed my poem :)) Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Bernard Chan

January 6, 2018 at 1:03 AM

Achingly beautiful and poignant. Brilliant!

Susan Ashley

January 6, 2018 at 7:27 PM

Bernard, I cherish your heartfelt and lovely comments.You inspire me to reach higher with your uplifting and encouraging words and I thank you truly for your wonderful friendship. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan

Gregory Richard Barden

January 4, 2018 at 10:38 PM

Wonderful Monoku, Susan - Happy New Year and congratulations on your win, my friend - well-deserved! :-)

Susan Ashley

January 4, 2018 at 10:47 PM

Thank you so much Gregory for your lovely comments and for the delight of your visit. I'm so glad you enjoyed my poem and your heartwarming congrats are truly appreciated. Happy New Year to you as well, my friend.. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Eve Roper

January 3, 2018 at 12:35 AM

Congratulations on your win, Susan, great monoku. Hugs Eve ~`*

Susan Ashley

January 3, 2018 at 5:04 PM

I relish your lovely comments and warm congrats, Eve. Thank you.. Warmest wishes ~Susan

Line Gauthier

January 2, 2018 at 10:03 AM

Wow - lovely monoku. Beautiful, Susan.

Susan Ashley

January 2, 2018 at 5:04 PM

Line, your kindness delights me. Thank you for your wonderful appreciation.. ~Susan

Probir Gupta

January 2, 2018 at 5:30 AM

Let silhouettes swim such beautifully ... Congratulations on your excellent win ...

Susan Ashley

January 2, 2018 at 5:03 PM

You are delightful Probir. Thank you for your lovely appreciation and kindhearted congrats.. ~Susan

Subimal Sinha-Roy

January 1, 2018 at 11:37 PM

Congratulations,Susan on your with a beautiful Monoku.

Susan Ashley

January 2, 2018 at 5:02 PM

Your visit and wonderful comments delight me Subimal. Thank you for your kind words of warmhearted congrats.. ~Susan

Jack Webster

January 1, 2018 at 6:58 PM

Very strong image, Susan. Beautiful! Congratulations!

Susan Ashley

January 1, 2018 at 8:43 PM

Jack, thank you so much for your beautiful comments and warm congrats. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Riley Hood

January 1, 2018 at 5:37 PM

Congrats, Susan! Beautiful!

Susan Ashley

January 1, 2018 at 8:42 PM

Thank you Riley for your wonderful comment and warm congrats.. ~Susan

Judith S

January 1, 2018 at 5:20 PM

Gosh Susan!! You just have an amaaaaazing way with words ... even in one line!!! Congrats! ~ Judy

Susan Ashley

January 1, 2018 at 8:41 PM

Thank you Judy for your lovely comments, and may I say that your are pretty amazing with words yourself..:) Your wonderful words of warm congrats delight me my friend.. Warmest wishes ~Susan

Rhoda Tripp

January 1, 2018 at 4:54 PM

Stopping in to congratulate you as well. Well done, my Dear!

Susan Ashley

January 1, 2018 at 8:38 PM

Thank you dear Rhonda for your lovely comment and warm congrats.. ~Susan

Paul Callus

January 1, 2018 at 4:18 PM

Pleased to be keeping my promise, Susan:) I had unwavering faith in your entry! Congratulations!! I hope the new year introduced itself to you with a smile ~ Warm regards // paul

Susan Ashley

January 1, 2018 at 8:37 PM

I'm delighted that my entry did not disappoint you my dear friend. Thank you Paul, for your beautiful comments and your heartwarming congrats. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich

January 1, 2018 at 3:45 PM

Congrats on your win. Happy new year 2018, Susan.

Susan Ashley

January 1, 2018 at 8:35 PM

Thank you for the heartwarming congrats Andrea. My warmest wishes for you to have a happy, healthy and inspired new year! ~Susan

Anne-Lise Andresen

January 1, 2018 at 12:48 PM

- Congratulations on your great 2nd place in the contest, Susan :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Susan Ashley

January 1, 2018 at 1:46 PM

Thank you Anne-Lise for your wonderful comments and the warm congrats.. ~Susan

Silent One

January 1, 2018 at 12:20 PM

Great one liner Susan..Congratulations on your placement in the contest..

Susan Ashley

January 1, 2018 at 1:45 PM

Silent One, thank you for your kind words and for the wonderful placement in your contest.. ~Susan

Paul Callus

December 31, 2017 at 2:24 PM

Wow! I love the view from up here, Susan! Honestly, I prefer your entry to mine. You even managed to use the maximum 17 syllables. I will be reading this again on the winners' list:) (it's already on mine):) ~ Warm regards // paul

Susan Ashley

December 31, 2017 at 7:53 PM

Aw, your wonderful words warm my heart Paul, being on your winner's list is a most lovely honor and a privilege :)) I'm delighted that you enjoyed my monoku. Thank you for your uplifting comments and for the 'wow' :) I like 'wows'.. Warmest wishes.. it's about 3 hrs till New Year's here and I will also toast our friendship.. cheers!

Roy Pett

December 31, 2017 at 8:10 AM

Absolutely brilliant Susan, a wonderful piece of poetry, GL in contest. :))

Susan Ashley

December 31, 2017 at 9:47 AM

Thank you Roy for your beautiful and uplifting comments. Your visits always delight, my friend.. Warmest wishes ~Susan

Arturo Michael

December 31, 2017 at 4:49 AM

Bonjour Susan...This is lovely... sad, meaningful, consoling, even happy...All the best, this be the last day, for tomorrow we're given another year to make our dreams come true...All the best to you and yours

Susan Ashley

December 31, 2017 at 9:45 AM

Bonjour mon ami! I relish your wonderful sentiments and hold them close to my heart. Thank you for your beautiful and optimistic comments that always brighten my day. You're a joy my friend! I hope all your lovely dreams come true in the upcoming year and warmest wishes to you always.. Lotsa hugs.. ~Susan

Probir Gupta

December 30, 2017 at 10:56 PM

Beauty in depth, depth in beauty ... Tears with silhouette in superb poetry ... Great, Susan ...

Susan Ashley

December 31, 2017 at 9:32 AM

Probir, these lovely sentiments, from a talented poet I so admire, truly are a compliment. Thank you for your generous and beautiful comments. I relish your dear words and hold them close to my heart. My warmest wishes to you for a happy, healthy and inspired new year! ~Susan

CayCay Godwin

December 30, 2017 at 9:43 PM

This is excellent, so deep. Clapping over it! Poetry hugs ... CayCay

Susan Ashley

December 30, 2017 at 9:47 PM

CayCay, I am so delighted you enjoyed it! Thank you for your supportive and encouraging comments. Your words I truly appreciate and hold dear to my heart. Poetry hugs, smiles and lotsa love to you my lovely friend.. ~Susan

Cheryl Hoffman

December 30, 2017 at 8:26 PM

A very poignant heart touching monoku Susan; Best wishes for a win!~Che :)

Susan Ashley

December 30, 2017 at 9:49 PM

Thank you for your beautiful comments and warm wishes Cheryl. Your wonderful word are appreciated always.. ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich

December 30, 2017 at 5:30 PM

This is REALLY nice. So romantic it is.

Susan Ashley

December 30, 2017 at 6:49 PM

Thank you Andrea for your delightful comments. I'm glad you enjoyed.. ~Susan

Akkina Downing

December 30, 2017 at 3:24 PM

My oh my, my lady poetess friend Susan, I really really like this one :) one line of fantabulous poetry! It should do well in the contest but I'm still wishing you a best of luck anyways :) And a very healthy happy new year...Hugs and smiles and love always your number one fan, ME ;) LOL! xoxo, Kina

Susan Ashley

December 30, 2017 at 6:56 PM

Hi lovely lady, thank you so much Kina for your supportive and encouraging comments. You always light up my page and my day :) Your beautiful words are appreciated and held in my heart, dear one. A wish to you for a new year full of love and laughter. Hugs, smiles and lotsa love always lovely friend.. ~Susan

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