Sara Kendrick Poet Haiku

Water Flows Freely

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                                              Eleven P.M.
                                Now twelve midnight, two A.M.
                                         Water flows freely

                                       Sleep eludes my eyes
                              Three A.M., four-thirty, augh, sigh
                                          Water flows freely

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John Loving Iii December 16, 2010 at 8:36 AM i wouldnt call it water flowing freely. rather i'd call it drip drip drip. john

Katie Telling December 15, 2010 at 1:50 PM I love this, Sara. Your comparison is creative and sounds a lot like me at night actually. It's a very bad feeling, and in just 6 short lines, you manage to capture that entirely. You are extremely talented :) I look forward to reading more of your work! I hope the holidays bring you joy this year, even through the struggles and heartache. Keep writing. -Katie :)

Suresh Iyer December 15, 2010 at 9:01 AM Loved your poem Thanks for your generous support during the year 2010 Looking forward to 2011 My Best Wishes to you Suresh Iyer, India

Linda-Marie Sweetheart December 15, 2010 at 7:43 AM Thankxxx Sara for your wonderful comments on my poetry today.. appreciate with luv.. and hoping the prayers are working well for u and entire family my friend... have a pleasant day with luv..

Daver Austin December 15, 2010 at 7:21 AM I hope you don't have a leaky water heater, Sara, or a leaky roof. Either one would keep you awake until at least 5:A.M. Love, Dave

Stephen Parker December 15, 2010 at 5:59 AM Water works! Good comparison! Enjoyed your creative verse!

Andrea Dietrich December 14, 2010 at 10:29 PM quite an interesting way to play on flowing water, sara! Good luck in the contest. LUv, Andreafcxb

Iolanda Scripca December 14, 2010 at 5:31 PM A very original double haiku here. Good luck in the contest and thank you for your comment. Love, Iolanda

Joe Maverick December 14, 2010 at 1:50 PM SORRY to call you by the wrong name Sarah yours sincerley, Joe and thanks for your comments on hard cell britan.

Joe Maverick December 14, 2010 at 1:33 PM yes well..certaintly a fluid style you are cultivating here Catie, and must say those time calls are making me sleepy, oh! and well done enjoyed.

Carolyn Devonshire December 14, 2010 at 12:03 PM Outstanding, Sara! The flowing tears sure have a way of keeping us awake. Best wishes in Rick's contest! Love, Carolyn

Linda-Marie Sweetheart December 14, 2010 at 12:01 PM Hope u are doing well Sara .. luv this piece and appreciate your encouraging words on my contest entry too.. frigid and bitter cold .. in the teens today with 60 mph winds... brutal weather ... hope your pain has eased a bit ... with luv..

Kabuteng P.Ink K. December 14, 2010 at 10:41 AM reading this again makes me understand this more...replied to soupmail--

Fabiyas M V December 14, 2010 at 8:57 AM Beautifully depicted the flow of time,Sara.Great work

Kabuteng P.Ink K. December 14, 2010 at 8:42 AM A different approach on the challenge that one can also relate with-- time is indeed like water flowing-- praying for Tommy for Dec. 20-- and for Tommy Jr. as well-- I hope you are feeling good this week, Sara :) -- nikko

Michael J. Falotico December 14, 2010 at 6:19 AM Nice peacefull images...and a nice entry for contest...love it,,,,,Michael

Kash Poet December 13, 2010 at 9:21 PM This one is very interesting!One may interpret it as time is flowing away like water.It happens to me when a new poem creeps into my mind at midnight!-kashinath

Wilma Neels December 13, 2010 at 7:47 PM A unique piece on water flowing which can be seen in different ways.. Enjoyed your haiku Sara.. How have you been?

Charles Henderson December 13, 2010 at 6:41 PM oooohh Sara. You have the personification of me. More and more at seventy four, I have to ---!

Doris Culverhouse December 13, 2010 at 5:38 PM Water???

Dr.Ram Mehta December 13, 2010 at 4:31 PM Nice haiku on the flowing water very unique write

Linda-Marie Sweetheart December 13, 2010 at 4:23 PM Unique one Sara.. enjoyed the times slots in your lines my friend.. good luck in Rick's contest.. my entry is "Holy H 2 O" ... good luck ....with luv..

Richard Pickett December 13, 2010 at 4:17 PM I am afraid to ask what water...Nice write...Good job Sara...God Bless and Merry Christmas...Taz

Laura Mckay December 13, 2010 at 2:34 PM Hello, you commented on my poem "Allie", thank you, it is not my life but was inspired by someone I know. They are in a safe place now, thank goodness, and he is in jail. =)