Watching a Spider Web

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The risen sun invisible
Covered by clouds of gray
A spider web made visible
By wet particles this day

Its delicate intricate shape
Coated by tiny drops
Flowing on variable breeze
Like summer's rotation crops

First the droplets of fog flow east
Then they flow from the west
Then they fall downward to the ground
Or upon the porch's guest 

Then the spider web gently flutters
Like a flag upon a pole
Stretched taunt to a near breaking point
Seemingly filled with holes

Breezes in opposing ripples
Push the web to the brink
Upon those breezes light moisture
Caught, the web doesn't sink

A human touches the web and sticks
Pulls away, the web folds
Waterdroplets lined up like beads
Upon a necklace of gold__

God's design is perfect unflawed
Mankind can choose his part
Which way will his choices lead
Will man use head or heart

The poem could stand with leaving the last stanza off but I am leaving it
even if it means disqualification..Three lines too many..

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Mockingbird Stevenson

Date: 3/22/2018 7:09:00 PM

Wow! Thankyou for this piece - I love the journey you took me on :)

Sara Kendrick
Date: 3/23/2018 8:04:00 AM

Thanks for the visit to my page. Your comments were uplifting. I am glad that you loved the journey. Sara

Funom Makama

Date: 7/12/2017 10:31:00 AM

Excellent and profound. You have that unique skill of beating the peak. This is a wonderful stuff, always beating our expectation. Can wait to jump to your next page.

Eve Roper

Date: 6/19/2017 8:53:00 PM

Well done, Sara, a gift well granted now choosing the correct path, like you said, is our gift.

Debbie Duncan

Date: 6/17/2017 9:21:00 PM

Poetry in motion with your words :)

The Situation

Date: 6/17/2017 1:50:00 PM

Gods design is poetry in motion. I'll just sat the picture you chose to go with it gave the words meaning.

Charlie Smith

Date: 6/15/2017 9:40:00 PM

Flawless intricate beauty in a web, a beautiful way to go...

Sara Kendrick
Date: 6/16/2017 3:27:00 PM

Charlie, It is wonderful how the lowly spider can do such an intricate web that is so sticky and dangerous..Thanks for the visit to my page and taking time to honor me with a comment of praise..Sara

Daniel Turner

Date: 6/15/2017 5:38:00 PM

Right now, I'd say neither! Beautiful poem Mrs Sara. Some things never get old, those little things that bring out the child inside:)

Sara Kendrick
Date: 6/16/2017 3:25:00 PM

Daniel, Yes, my writing this poem was like a child observing the work of art and trying to figure out how the spider did that..Your presence and review is encouraging..Thanks for dropping by..Sara

Jack Horne

Date: 6/15/2017 3:30:00 PM

love this thoughtful piece, my friend

Sara Kendrick
Date: 6/16/2017 3:24:00 PM

Jack, It did time some time observing a spider's web in fog so low that the rain within the low cloud was blowing upon me..Your presence wasn't foggy though..Thanks for dropping by..Sara