Wanted That First Kiss

Wanted that first kiss submerging my lips.
Snow White’s open carriage embracing life.
Underscore of green eyes, seized by the sea.
At the lap of waves, over my deck, a song.

Snow White’s open carriage embracing life.
The death of innocence engulfed in Him.
At the lap of waves, over my deck, a song
springs forth like a fountain, mellifluous.

The death of innocence engulfed in Him,
Carried in ebb and flow, and rhythm of rapture.
Springs forth like a fountain, mellifluous,
The impending peak of a soulful harmony.

Carried in ebb and flow, and rhythm of rapture.
Colors explode, like bubbles, as mood crests -
The impending peak of a soulful harmony.
The softness of liquid smoothing out a pebble.

Colors explode, like bubbles, as mood crests.
Underscore of green eyes, seized by the sea.
Gentleness of liquid smoothing out a pebble.
Wanted that first kiss submerging my lips.
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Spilchuk Avatar
May 13, 2024 at 6:40 AM
Lovely pantoum to read. Enchanting.
Rodrigues Avatar
May 13, 2024 at 7:09 AM
Thank you, Dennis!
Hind Avatar
April 30, 2024 at 9:57 AM
This is amazing- "At the lap of waves, over my deck, a song.".... how beautiful is that, Kim?? That line is so original and breathtaking, enjoyed reading this
Rodrigues Avatar
April 30, 2024 at 10:50 AM
Thank you! Glad you liked that line! :)
Jones Avatar
April 29, 2024 at 5:46 PM
Wow this is a wonderful idea! Was it for contest? I do not know how to write this form and I am studying your poem for clues yet I am still clueless! Bravo
Rodrigues Avatar
April 29, 2024 at 8:12 PM
Not for a contest. The first line is also the last line. The 3rd line is the 2nd line in final verse. The number of verses is up to you. Line 2 and 4 of each verse are the first and 3rd line in the next verse. Good Luck! Hope you try one! They are fun! Thank you, Karen!
M  Avatar
April 29, 2024 at 1:06 PM
Hi Kim….enjoyed this poem of ones first kiss ….the excitement and nervousness! Everyone remembers their first kiss l read….Well somethings wrong with me as “ I don't” it must of been pretty special!! Haha…..Debx
Rodrigues Avatar
April 29, 2024 at 2:52 PM
Perhaps you remember the special one! Thank you, Deb!
Goldsmith Avatar
April 29, 2024 at 9:15 AM
I enjoyed reading your creative write. We always remember our first kiss..... Have a fun day writing away.....................
Rodrigues Avatar
April 29, 2024 at 2:52 PM
Yes! Thank you! :)
Cunningham Avatar
April 29, 2024 at 8:01 AM
And that first kiss we never forget Kim. Tom
Rodrigues Avatar
April 29, 2024 at 2:53 PM
I bet you didn’t?! Hugs ~ Kim
Rodgers Avatar
April 29, 2024 at 7:30 AM
Dear Kim, This is a wonderful, mesmerizing journey through longing and desire, evoking imagery of snow-white carriages and the embrace of the sea. I loved how each stanza builds upon the next, building emotions that crescendo toward the longing for that first kiss. Your words are like waves, carrying the reader along with their rhythmic beauty. A magical enchanting exploration of love and innocence. - Blessings, Daniel
Rodrigues Avatar
April 29, 2024 at 2:54 PM
Thank you, Daniel! Glad you enjoyed the journey along with the sea-embrace! Hugs ~ Kim
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