Walking Through Time:

I hear

The footprints near

And feel their beating heart

Not knowing their distant remarks

Now past

26~May~2017

angstcinquain

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Paul Callus

June 3, 2017 at 9:55 AM

A lovely suspenseful Cinquain which leaves our mind free to interpretation, Rick. I can also see this as a metaphor...man and beast. Regards // paul

Alexis Y.

May 31, 2017 at 2:08 PM

Hi Rick This is a good take on the contest theme. Congratulations on your high placement: -) Alexis

Laura Leiser

May 31, 2017 at 11:26 AM

Great write, White Wolf! Congrats on your high placement win!! :)

Dean Wood

May 31, 2017 at 8:14 AM

Wow, very nice Wolf. I really like this one! Congrats. - Dean

White Wolf

May 31, 2017 at 8:17 AM

Thanks, Dean! It was my first attempt at this form so I'm stoked! /|\

Reason A. Poteet

May 31, 2017 at 6:41 AM

Wow, congratulations, only one suggestion, "now past" would add the element of flow, IMHO. Fine piece though and a beautiful pic to accompany. Congrats on your placement too.

White Wolf

May 31, 2017 at 6:53 AM

Interesting! I might take you up on that suggestion! Thanks /|\

James Inman

May 31, 2017 at 1:40 AM

Congrats WW

John Anderson

May 31, 2017 at 1:11 AM

Congratulations with your Third Place in the Cinquain contest. A delightful poem that exemplifies what the form is about, especially the first and last lines. Very nice. Cheers,