Andrea Dietrich Poet Rhyme

Walking On An La Boulevard

(To the tune of Winter Wonderland)

See the streets how they glisten.
 Neon lights show what you're missin'
Don't you dare to stop at those ***** shops- 
Walking on an L.A. boulevard.
See the girls that are a passin'.
  Lots of thigh they be flashin';
Don't you dare reply when they catch your eye-
Walking on an L.A. boulevard.

Soon you'll be accosted by some strangers-
stranger than the creatures in a barn-
druggies, gangstas, beggars and transvestites.
Just show them your revolver and keep calm.

When you've reached your destination, 
hope you're in another nation.
It won't be too long until we are ALL
walking on an L.A. boulevard.


For Debbie Guzzi's "Déjà vu Christmas Poetry Contest"

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Harry Horsman November 9, 2012 at 4:18 AM first time here, wow, this is really good...just the flow of it all,

Keith Bickerstaffe July 5, 2012 at 10:26 AM I forgot to mention the TUNE! Brilliant!!

Keith Bickerstaffe July 5, 2012 at 10:24 AM This has LOTS to comment on... great rhyming and flow, ('glisten...missin', 'passin'...flashin',) then, '...just show them your revolver and keep calm,' perfect! The scene you set is so vivid and memorable. BRAVO Andie!! Best wishes, Keith

Black Eyed Susan December 21, 2011 at 5:41 PM I really like this! i don't know why anyone wouldn't like it. it's a great parody and full of imagery - maybe its the subject of the imagery they couldn't handle? well shame on them! not every poem should be about fairies and roses~! i find it very clever myself!

Robert Johnson November 30, 2011 at 11:08 AM In the evening you can feel the cold man. 68 degrees and you'll be cold man. The winters aren't white, and it's quite a site. Walking on an L.A. boulevard.

Gwendolen Song November 30, 2011 at 2:15 AM W I N N E R !!!!!!! Ok,,,,I won't even write now! ha ha ha ha. J.k. You are the queen of zany tonite! Wonderful lyricist, wow. Gwendolen

Kabuteng P.Ink K. November 29, 2011 at 10:06 PM Haha-- wow now I am going to be singing this version of yours in my head all day-- very zany indeed and I am enjoying it-- thanks for making me smile with this-- and haha I chose this avatar Precisely so you can recognize me ;) how am I? Hmm doing ok-- email you soon shucks sorry I am behind on emails.... hugs to you sweetie - I think I should be outta here...I hope you're doing better! :D

Phyllis Babcock November 29, 2011 at 9:20 AM So that is what happens in LA well sounds like you need to keep you head on right and walk fast lol. Now you have me hummin' for the rest of the day. love phyl

Hgarvey Daniel Esquire November 28, 2011 at 11:55 PM Andrea "Birth" Slap!! WHAAA, Waaa The Sounds of LIFE's Beginning, A Picture of the Future Spinning The Fragrants of the First One, a Son : Newborn; a part You, part of Lenore; Forevermore What do Your baby blue eyes see? Can You see the flowers bloom in the summer rain? When next YOU see this acorn; an oak sapling it will be soon a tire swing:all that remains This is what Hg wrote to Sharon Weimer I don't know how to fix this Hg lines are equal, Respectfully Kenny Hgarvey Daniel Esquire November 28, 2011 at 11:57 PM wow this looks better here than it did on the send page kenny

Nette Onclaud November 28, 2011 at 10:46 PM you got me siging here, andie.. very creative!.. how are you?.. best wishes, heartie!..:) huggs!

Don Johnson November 28, 2011 at 9:36 PM great entertainment here, walked the streets of LA, drank some bud beer, in 1991 one time... great poem babe...

Poet Destroyer A November 28, 2011 at 7:40 PM Andrea, hi how are you? Are you mad at me...lol.. kidding... I'm just stopping by to enjoy a few of your poems... I like the thought of walking on the LA B~/... how about that...the wind here really is zany... good luck in the contest... and did you know my granddaughters middle name is... ( ZANE ) wow..i love it... Ezzelle Zane <--- my grandaughter... take care..xoxoox...p.d.

George Aul November 28, 2011 at 4:29 PM Sounds like you've been there quite often, wonder why? ha ha............George

Daver Austin November 28, 2011 at 12:40 PM Sorry, dear Andrea, I'm way behind - too much going on. I was in L. A. just once, but didn't get to the porn shops. I have been to the red light district, though, in Amsterdam. I behaved myself, but what a porno mile. Very clever your use of Winter Wonderland and the modern day slam. LUck in the contest. Love, daver

Jack Horne November 28, 2011 at 8:54 AM LOL, love it - this song will never be the same again : )

Kash Poet November 28, 2011 at 8:04 AM Very creative write here Andrea.Nice way to do the contest.Best wishes.

Tony Lane November 28, 2011 at 4:49 AM I've walked there and it is zany.

Nathan D. November 27, 2011 at 11:06 PM good luck with your delighted poem'

Russell Sivey November 27, 2011 at 9:57 PM Fantastic write Andrea! I can see all that being on an L.A. boulevard! I had fun singing to that tune in my head! It went along great, I was able to follow the tune perfectly with the lyrics! Good rhyme and meter! I do see how though what we are singing is a Christmas song...pleasant with happy memories...but this poem is about all the bad crime in L.A. the terror and evil there! Great correlation!!

Kim Merryman November 27, 2011 at 9:29 PM Andrea, this is fantastic! Oh my gosh! It is so funny. Excellent! Kim