Walking Crooked Straight To Nowhere

He walks crooked like a cowboy
Who has ridden many a mile
Gritty fingers holding old pipe
Wrinkled face and greying mustache

Looking wisely to the night sky 
No smile passes over his lips
His is the path of a loner
A choice to walk life's road this way

Head down one step follows the next
Dim lit his eyes travel old paths
Regrets he has carried with him
Because of the choices he made

You might think he's nothing special
But that is far yes far from true
He has many stories to tell
Listen closely I will tell one

It's true he once was young like you
Kind of handsome in his own way
Women had thought that he was cool
Quiet playful with a fast smile

There was just one that he wanted
Hair of auburn pretty green eyes
But she didn't give him a chance
For he had no cash in his hands

One day with her would be heaven
Wanting her love consumed his soul
Planning to rob a bank of cash
Would prove to be a big mistake

All he wanted was her sweet love
Yes in the end he did get caught
Off to prison for his mistake
Him in shackles he seen her smile

Many years passed his debt was paid
Upon the bunk his sad heart sunk
Within his mind that choice relived
Her love not worth the years he lost

Now much older wiser as well
He is quiet and all alone
Stories many you've heard one here
A sad tale of a girl and gun!

Form Iambic Tetrameter
For Georgio's Structured Forms Contest.

His story required more than 28 lines to tell it fully.
Written: December 5th, 6th and 7th.
My first attempt at this form, forgive me being long winded.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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December 26, 2014 at 9:25 PM
RICHARD, CONGRATS on your win, in Giorgio A. V's contest... Take Care ~LINDA
Meier-Hans Avatar
December 18, 2014 at 8:40 AM
The things we do for love. The death trap of many. Great poem Richard. Congratulations on your win.
Mehta Avatar
December 17, 2014 at 5:07 AM
Interesting story effectively told, congratulations on the win, Richard
Allison Avatar
December 16, 2014 at 7:57 PM
dropping back with my congrats:-) Hugs Jan xxx
Kayode Avatar
December 16, 2014 at 1:57 PM
Dropping back to congratulate you Richard,no doubt, a good work that worths the honour...huggs
Manassian Avatar
December 8, 2014 at 3:52 PM
I did read this earlier, but I see you've made changes to it. It reads very well, Richard. :) The things one does for love! Good luck in the contest. Hugs
Lamoureux Avatar
December 10, 2014 at 8:21 AM
You seem underwhelmed by this one. Thanks for wishing me well I guess some luck could help.
Kayode Avatar
December 8, 2014 at 3:07 PM
A good one Richard,sad he discovered when it is already late,pity; good luck in the contest...huggs
Lamoureux Avatar
December 10, 2014 at 8:22 AM
Thanks Kayode.
A. Sharma Avatar
December 8, 2014 at 8:23 AM
Captivating write Richard! Well that's the haul mark of ur poetry my friend! Sure to fly high in Giorgio's contest! Best wishes!
Lamoureux Avatar
December 8, 2014 at 8:39 AM
Thankyou sweet Upma, I am always appreciative of good wishes.
Sirak Avatar
December 8, 2014 at 7:29 AM
Oh the things we do, the hoops we are willing to jump through to capture someone's love. You told a wonderful story with this form!
Sirak Avatar
December 8, 2014 at 7:55 AM
I am sooo excited and happy and a little scared. I will have no secrets when the book comes out.
Lamoureux Avatar
December 8, 2014 at 7:38 AM
Thanks Monterey, you must be excited about your manuscript being accepted.
Vaso Avatar
December 7, 2014 at 6:41 PM
Well inside the humor, I was being very serious, you are a great story teller, when one reads your poems, its like a book you cant put down, to captivate the reader so , is high praise.
Lamoureux Avatar
December 7, 2014 at 6:44 PM
I am pleased you feel that way Arthur!
Vaso Avatar
December 7, 2014 at 6:24 PM
I was born to disagree, an I will do so here, long winded? Are you kidding me? This was a perfect tale, a beautiful story, I confess at first again I said this is about me from the title, but the story, well, I challenge anyone to tell this one better. A7
Lamoureux Avatar
December 7, 2014 at 6:27 PM
As always I look forward to your inspiring and comedic responses. Thanks Arthur.
Jones Avatar
December 7, 2014 at 6:18 PM
Wow Richard....you really captured here the power of love...great job...
Lamoureux Avatar
December 7, 2014 at 6:21 PM
Thanks for catching my boo boo! Hugs Rick.
Chircop Avatar
December 7, 2014 at 4:08 PM
What a deep way of loving that is..Its so sad that His love for her became his trap.So glad to be back home to read such wonderful poetry..Richard.
Lamoureux Avatar
December 7, 2014 at 4:45 PM
Thanks Charmaine, have another look it is finished now.
Smith Avatar
December 7, 2014 at 3:59 PM
Well done Richard...Sometimes one does irrational things for love.
Lamoureux Avatar
December 7, 2014 at 4:46 PM
Thanks Tim, it is true that common sense can become uncommon when love is involved.
Allison Avatar
December 7, 2014 at 3:41 PM
you have penned a brilliant story Richard I was hooked from start to finish - good luck:-) hugs jan xx
Allison Avatar
December 8, 2014 at 1:00 AM
It is superb Richard - well done and good luck! Hugs jan xx
Lamoureux Avatar
December 7, 2014 at 6:25 PM
Indulge me one last time by having another look. Thanks Ahmed.
Lamoureux Avatar
December 7, 2014 at 4:48 PM
Thanks Jan, I am now finished writing it. Have another look at it. Hugs Aback to you.
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