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Walking Crooked Straight To Nowhere

He walks crooked like a cowboy Who has ridden many a mile Gritty fingers holding old pipe Wrinkled face and greying mustache Looking wisely to the night sky No smile passes over his lips His is the path of a loner A choice to walk life's road this way Head down one step follows the next Dim lit his eyes travel old paths Regrets he has carried with him Because of the choices he made You might think he's nothing special But that is far yes far from true He has many stories to tell Listen closely I will tell one It's true he once was young like you Kind of handsome in his own way Women had thought that he was cool Quiet playful with a fast smile There was just one that he wanted Hair of auburn pretty green eyes But she didn't give him a chance For he had no cash in his hands One day with her would be heaven Wanting her love consumed his soul Planning to rob a bank of cash Would prove to be a big mistake All he wanted was her sweet love Yes in the end he did get caught Off to prison for his mistake Him in shackles he seen her smile Many years passed his debt was paid Upon the bunk his sad heart sunk Within his mind that choice relived Her love not worth the years he lost Now much older wiser as well He is quiet and all alone Stories many you've heard one here A sad tale of a girl and gun! Form Iambic Tetrameter For Georgio's Structured Forms Contest. His story required more than 28 lines to tell it fully. Written: December 5th, 6th and 7th. My first attempt at this form, forgive me being long winded.

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Date: 12/26/2014 9:25:00 PM
RICHARD, CONGRATS on your win, in Giorgio A. V's contest... Take Care ~LINDA
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Date: 12/18/2014 8:40:00 AM
The things we do for love. The death trap of many. Great poem Richard. Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 12/17/2014 5:07:00 AM
Interesting story effectively told, congratulations on the win, Richard
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Date: 12/16/2014 7:57:00 PM
dropping back with my congrats:-) Hugs Jan xxx
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Date: 12/16/2014 1:57:00 PM
Dropping back to congratulate you Richard,no doubt, a good work that worths the honour...huggs
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Date: 12/8/2014 3:52:00 PM
I did read this earlier, but I see you've made changes to it. It reads very well, Richard. :) The things one does for love! Good luck in the contest. Hugs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/10/2014 8:21:00 AM
You seem underwhelmed by this one. Thanks for wishing me well I guess some luck could help.
Date: 12/8/2014 3:07:00 PM
A good one Richard,sad he discovered when it is already late,pity; good luck in the contest...huggs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/10/2014 8:22:00 AM
Thanks Kayode.
Date: 12/8/2014 8:23:00 AM
Captivating write Richard! Well that's the haul mark of ur poetry my friend! Sure to fly high in Giorgio's contest! Best wishes!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/8/2014 8:39:00 AM
Thankyou sweet Upma, I am always appreciative of good wishes.
Date: 12/8/2014 7:29:00 AM
Oh the things we do, the hoops we are willing to jump through to capture someone's love. You told a wonderful story with this form!
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Monterey Sirak
Date: 12/8/2014 7:55:00 AM
I am sooo excited and happy and a little scared. I will have no secrets when the book comes out.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/8/2014 7:38:00 AM
Thanks Monterey, you must be excited about your manuscript being accepted.
Date: 12/7/2014 6:41:00 PM
Well inside the humor, I was being very serious, you are a great story teller, when one reads your poems, its like a book you cant put down, to captivate the reader so , is high praise.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/7/2014 6:44:00 PM
I am pleased you feel that way Arthur!
Date: 12/7/2014 6:24:00 PM
I was born to disagree, an I will do so here, long winded? Are you kidding me? This was a perfect tale, a beautiful story, I confess at first again I said this is about me from the title, but the story, well, I challenge anyone to tell this one better. A7
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/7/2014 6:27:00 PM
As always I look forward to your inspiring and comedic responses. Thanks Arthur.
Date: 12/7/2014 6:18:00 PM
Wow Richard....you really captured here the power of love...great job...
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/7/2014 6:21:00 PM
Thanks for catching my boo boo! Hugs Rick.
Date: 12/7/2014 4:08:00 PM
What a deep way of loving that is..Its so sad that His love for her became his trap.So glad to be back home to read such wonderful poetry..Richard.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/7/2014 4:45:00 PM
Thanks Charmaine, have another look it is finished now.
Date: 12/7/2014 3:59:00 PM
Well done Richard...Sometimes one does irrational things for love.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/7/2014 4:46:00 PM
Thanks Tim, it is true that common sense can become uncommon when love is involved.
Date: 12/7/2014 3:41:00 PM
you have penned a brilliant story Richard I was hooked from start to finish - good luck:-) hugs jan xx
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Jan Allison
Date: 12/8/2014 1:00:00 AM
It is superb Richard - well done and good luck! Hugs jan xx
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/7/2014 6:25:00 PM
Indulge me one last time by having another look. Thanks Ahmed.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/7/2014 4:48:00 PM
Thanks Jan, I am now finished writing it. Have another look at it. Hugs Aback to you.

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