Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Poet Rhyme

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Waiting Sings Along With Torment

WAITING SINGS ALONG WITH TORMENT

Each night aroma of jonquils arrive to tickle me
yet no console as I am a slave to your absence
as bright full moon slowly slit the dormant sea
in the field of black, hours, I crave for your essence.

The cold breeze of December can send the shivers
running intermittent into my back but  weak  for  within
I am frozen waiting for the warmth you alone can deliver.
Today, later morning or a day after, I want to begin

shedding suffering, choosing long patience in between.
You imprisoned my heart since the day we declared love,
our love silenced jazzy heartbeats, we feel so green,
the hundred memories we shared white as dove.

I am to wait even if waiting sings along with torment
for I believe the promise we said is pure of intent
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==CONTEST NAME: WAITING==
=Contest Sponsor: Craig Cornish=
~~2nd Place~~
6:43 PM, September 10, 2015

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Robert Lindley September 27, 2015 at 12:01 AM I see this gem won in a contest and can easily see why! "Each night aroma of jonquils arrive to tickle me yet no console as I am a slave to your absence as bright full moon slowly slit the dormant sea in the field of black, hours, I crave for your essence." ^^ Pure gold. A7

James Fraser September 23, 2015 at 1:50 PM Souper douper congrats on your win little one :-) hugs always//James xxx

Skat A September 22, 2015 at 7:07 PM Olive, congratulations on your win. SKAT

Dr. Upma A. Sharma September 22, 2015 at 1:06 AM Wonderful expressions Olive! Congrats on big win!

Kp Nunez September 21, 2015 at 11:54 AM Ang ganda! Awesome last two lines... sincerity in every sinew. Congrats, Olive! hugs!

Alexis Y. September 20, 2015 at 4:06 PM Olive ,congratulations your win:-) Alexis

Jan Allison September 20, 2015 at 1:14 PM Dropping back with my congrats Olive:-) hugs jan xx

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen September 19, 2015 at 7:03 AM Love is like that! Your poetry is beautiful.

Bl Devnath September 15, 2015 at 4:03 PM Beautiful poem on love, done well. 7 too. Loved always,bl Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser November 10, 2015 at 1:19 AM thanks much BL.. =`)

Anne-Lise Andresen September 13, 2015 at 5:02 AM - Olive, so beautiful and lovely to read your warm thoughts - (a 7) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 24, 2015 at 5:49 AM Thanks much Anne Lise.. =`) I feel good when I wrote this one.. =`)

Jerry T Curtis September 12, 2015 at 6:28 AM This is a beautiful piece Olive, gets a seven from me too Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 23, 2015 at 8:05 AM thanks Jerry.. =`)

Etienne Lariviere September 11, 2015 at 2:46 PM tres belle! Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 23, 2015 at 8:03 AM thanks much Etienne.. =`)

Michael Tor September 11, 2015 at 5:48 AM This is so beautiful and touching. Commitment till the end. Great affection and love shown here. Nice work Olive. A seven for sure. Congrats. Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 21, 2015 at 3:53 AM Thank you so much Michael.. I am pleased that you like this one.. =`)

Afolabi Muideen September 11, 2015 at 2:52 AM A lovely write......A.M. Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 20, 2015 at 2:34 AM Afolabi thank you so much.. =`)

Andrea Dietrich September 10, 2015 at 9:12 PM It must be love. An emotive poem of passion, Olive. Well done. Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 15, 2015 at 4:39 AM Thank you so much Andie... =`) yes it must be love.. =`)

Afolabi Muideen September 10, 2015 at 6:10 PM I love how this was constructed dear poet.... I flows smoothly within the readers mind and sense...........A.M. Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 14, 2015 at 2:57 AM thanks much Afolabi.. =`) glad you like it.. `)

James Fraser September 10, 2015 at 2:29 PM Beautiful words gliding on the thermals of love little one. Soon distance shall be of metre's, inches or feet, for ideas, words we'll greet, onto the paper our quills shall meet. The more one reads this, the more one absorbs this gem~hugs~your Huge One//James tmf's xxxx Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 13, 2015 at 3:23 AM Huge James, Yes so soon... excited and praying fervently ... warm tight hugsxxx~Olive ELoisa your little one .. =`)

Darlene Gifford September 10, 2015 at 11:25 AM The love you write about is heart warming and endearing. May God bless and strengthen this relationship. And thanks for reading one of my poems. <3 Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 13, 2015 at 3:20 AM Darlene, thank you so much for dropping by and leaving a most wonderful comment and wish..~Olive ELoisa =`)

Tim Smith September 10, 2015 at 11:19 AM Absence makes the heart beat stronger Olive. The waiting will be worth it. good luck Tim Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 13, 2015 at 3:17 AM waiting is all worth and each side is committed and true.. Thanks Tim ~Olive Eloisa =`)

Paul Callus September 10, 2015 at 11:09 AM There is no mistaking that love is in the air, connecting two hearts across the miles. Waiting can be a torment, but the promise of declared love is worth the sacrifice:) Hugs // paul Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 11, 2015 at 3:53 AM ~~It's hard to deny or hide it no more when it is too obvious.. Yes, all worth the wait Paul,,hugs~~Olive Eloisa

Scott Thirtyseven September 10, 2015 at 8:08 AM Ah the joys of love. You have captured them well. Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 10, 2015 at 8:16 PM Scott, thank you so much... yes the joys of love overcomes all sufferings... ~Olive Eloisa =`)

Jan Allison September 10, 2015 at 6:47 AM Such beautiful romantic imagery Olive - the waiting will be over soon my friend and you will be together forever:-) hugs jan xx 7 Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 10, 2015 at 8:15 PM Weeee, In a way the theme is true to me that somehow the lines just spoke of my heart.... thanks much Jan.. ~Olive Eloisa =`)