Darren White | + Follow Poet |
Free verse | + Fav Poem | Comment | Email | Print |

Waiting In Agony

Inspired by and an interpretation of:  "El poeta pide a su amor que le escriba" (He begs his love to write) 
by Federico García Lorca

***

Waiting in Agony - revised

Silence in time halts
turns people to phantoms
futureless without past
     in twilight

Surprising how paper
comprises awareness
discredits 
     in bloodless ink

Your pen pierces surface
scratches dead stone
etches deep lines
     in absence

Poison in my veins
I beg you release me
save me
     kill me

***

June 4, 2017
Copyright © Darren White

Copyright © Darren White | Year Posted 2017

Please Login to post a comment

Kai Michael Neumann Date: 6/7/2017 4:02:00 AM Darren, have you published your poetry other than on poetry soup? Have you thought about it? I have just finished my first anthology. Publishing is a work of love and not for money and giving away (mostly) the hardcopy to friends and family feels amazing... Login to Reply Darren White Date: 6/7/2017 4:06:00 AM I am working on it. I have joined a forum to improve my writing, I get a load of immensely useful critique and I learn a lot there. I have sent in a number of poems for contests that award publication. Yes, I am working on it, but I feel I need to polish my skills a bit first :) Thanks!

Kai Michael Neumann Date: 6/7/2017 3:59:00 AM I did not read Lorca's poem, but yours is so heartfelt. It sums up writing for me. Great. Many wishes, Kai Login to Reply Darren White Date: 6/7/2017 4:04:00 AM Thank you my friend. Lorca was a great poet, so wild, such raw talent.

Chris Green Date: 6/6/2017 9:06:00 AM How you manage to pack so much emotion, so much need and longing into your work amazes me. You have such a unique way of saying things and in this case I believe interpreting things. It's like sitting there waiting for a phone to ring that never does. How many times can we pick it up and check that it is still on before we realize it doesn't matter, its not going to ring. Very cool my friend. Login to Reply Darren White Date: 6/6/2017 9:33:00 AM Yes, this was my interpretation of Lorca's poem. Lorca is one of my favourite poets. This one, I could feel it, and I am glad you could too :) Thanks my friend.

Freddie Robinson Jr. Date: 6/6/2017 8:58:00 AM Cool and commendable interpretation, Darren. You pulled it off w/class and existential intensity. Kudos my friend. Your poetic serrated chops just got sharpened by seventh power to the Nth dimensional notch. In other words, it was out of this world good poetry. Excellent write, my friend. Love and smiles. Login to Reply Darren White Date: 6/6/2017 9:35:00 AM Wow Freddie! Thank you so very much my friend :) I smile at you!

Maria Williams Date: 6/6/2017 3:33:00 AM Amazing as always Dear Darren..... Maria Login to Reply Darren White Date: 6/6/2017 3:57:00 AM Thank you so much, Maria.

Verlecia Fields Date: 6/5/2017 9:28:00 AM made me think of gossip - shame - lies mixed with a little of the truth - death of one's character - a wanting of the truth to be told |-:-| Login to Reply Darren White Date: 6/5/2017 9:54:00 AM He wants his love(r) to finally write him a letter, is completely a wreck, it's indeed a painful interpretation of a painful poem he wrote. Thank you :)

Eve Roper Date: 6/4/2017 11:42:00 PM Very heartfelt poem of heartache, Darren, well written. ~* Login to Reply Darren White Date: 6/4/2017 11:45:00 PM Thanks so very much Eve :)

Jeremy Smith Date: 6/4/2017 11:40:00 PM Yes, very disturbing Darren. I, will pray this is not the way you feel. Login to Reply Darren White Date: 6/4/2017 11:45:00 PM Jeremy, this is an interpretation of Lorca's poem. Thank you :)

Richard Lamoureux Date: 6/4/2017 8:51:00 PM Disturbing and thought provoking my friend! Login to Reply Darren White Date: 6/4/2017 11:26:00 PM Thank you! It is an interpretation of Lorca's original poem.

Sara Ella Date: 6/4/2017 2:27:00 PM Do you ever read a poem and don't know how to form a response - go away and come back to read another time? I do this. A lot. This is a passionate poem (my opinion) and all the feels are well said of longing and frustration from the silence. So well done! :) Login to Reply Darren White Date: 6/4/2017 2:35:00 PM This is indeed a passionate poem. And he wrote a poem out of pure frustration. This is my interpretation of that poem. Thank you Sara :) <3

Kim Rodrigues Date: 6/4/2017 11:35:00 AM Wonderful write! Login to Reply Darren White Date: 6/4/2017 2:36:00 PM Thank you, Kim!

Anne-Marie Coreggia Date: 6/4/2017 7:50:00 AM An amazing write my friend. Bravo! Amitiés Login to Reply Darren White Date: 6/4/2017 8:01:00 AM Thank you Anne-Marie :)

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 6/4/2017 6:20:00 AM Wow! I sever this blank page with a seven. Fine write my friend. xomo! Login to Reply Darren White Date: 6/4/2017 7:04:00 AM Thank you ma mo <3 Love that :)