waiting for a fly

sun-touched lilies so much green grown voices from the pond

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Marikate Kingston

Date: 3/29/2024 9:11:00 PM

After reading your poem, it is fun to imagine whose voices were nearbye. A chipmunk chewing, a bird cooing. This is a pretty poem and I thought it was clever. I loved to ponder your last line.

Gary Radice

Date: 1/2/2024 7:20:00 AM

Charlie, the last line conjures so much imagery for me that it deserves an expanded poem all of its own. Here's to a great '24. Cheers - Gary

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 12/28/2023 4:27:00 PM

lovely imagery in your Haiku...loved the last line...made me pause. Have a great evening, Sara

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 12/28/2023 12:33:00 PM

A wonderful Haiku write. "Happy New Year 2024".................

Silent One

Date: 12/28/2023 5:52:00 AM

nice imagery my friend..

Tom Cunningham

Date: 12/28/2023 1:23:00 AM

Love the image Charlie. The frogs are well camouflaged green on green. Happy New year to you. Tom

Ink Empress

Date: 12/28/2023 12:51:00 AM

Beautiful haiku, i love how you’ve written this in such a descriptive manner dear charles. Especially “ sun touched lilies” wow! And also “ voices from the pond” how evocative. And soulful, pleasure reading this, sending you light always