Vulnerability

—Seeking Still— The stars have lost the tremor of their fire, the aspens, wind-wed, scarcely stir a leaf; the sea keeps blue, yet azure's old attire seems banish'd from the deep, past all belief. The butterflies still skim the lucent air, yet some lost eidolon of flight is gone; the hummingbirds, once liquid choirs, blare like brazen bells beneath a witless dawn. I touch the rain—it glimmers, yet is dry; the lilies breathe a wan, funereal sweet; and honey, once the sun's own gold, turns awry, lies rotting 'neath the noontide's brazen heat. What if the world hath not grown strange at all— but I became the stranger at thy fall? I muse if mine own wits have wander'd wide, or some eldritch derangement veils my sight; for thou hast vanish'd, leaving naught beside but all the world bereft of inward light. The moon still climbs above the chimneys' smoke, and weary men bar fast their doors at night; yet every common thing seems somehow broke, as though each thing had outliv'd its ancient right. Perhaps thy presence was the secret art by which the visible became benign; and now the world still beats, yet lacks the heart that taught its mute immensities to shine. And shouldst thou never turn thy face to mine, I'll call this ruined universe—divine.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2026

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Smith nee Howarth Avatar
September 7, 2026 at 4:03 AM
A haunting, beautifully sustained double-sonnet meditation on absence. The tightly controlled rhyme and elevated diction give the poem a classical, almost metaphysical gravity, while its imagery makes grief feel physically perceptible: rain that “glimmers, yet is dry,” honey turned corrupt, familiar things made alien. The turning thought—perhaps the world is unchanged and the speaker has become the stranger—is especially powerful. By the final couplet, longing has transformed devastation into a paradoxical, reverent vision: a “ruined universe” still called divine.
MITRA Avatar
September 7, 2026 at 8:35 AM
Cherished Alison, 🌸 Forgive mine tardy reply, for I was somewhat delayed in answering thee—my poor quill, methinks, hath taken umbrage at me of late, and seemeth strangely loath to obey its master. ✍️ Yet how could I let thy gracious words pass unanswer’d? Thou hast not merely read my poor verses, but hast look’d beneath their painted veil and discern’d the trembling heart within. Thy sincere concern for my humble strains is a benison I shall treasure, long after the words themselves have faded. ✨ Thy gaze hath pierced the eidolon of night, And found where wounded syllables confess; Such benison shall keep my spirit bright, A poet’s meed for all thy gentleness. May Heaven pour its orisons where’er thou stray, And strew thy path with joy, this day and aye. ✨ May happiness be thine, Cherished Alison, and may no sorrow long abide where thy gentle spirit dwells. 🙌
Gibbons Avatar
September 6, 2026 at 12:37 PM
Lovely powerful sonnet Mohit so Majestic and romantically inspired start to finish. Can till it's from depth of your heart n soul. Ending is dramatically powerful. " and shouldst thou never turn thy face to thine , I'll call this ruined universe ~devine " a pleasure reading n deserves a fav from me . Have a blessed week 🙏 ✨️
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September 6, 2026 at 6:49 PM
Dainty Dorothy, 🌸 Thou hast turn’d thine "Icy-Blue Gaze” upon mine poor verses, and somehow their brine doth seem transform’d to balm beneath thy gracious regard. I confess, I somewhat fail to fetch the grammar fit to thank thee as aptly as my heart would have me; words themselves seem poor coin before such kindness. ❤️‍🩹 May His tenderest Grace abide upon thee, and enfold thee in all its boundless immensities. 🙌 ✨And if these briny strains, by Fortune’s leave, Have found one harbour in thy crystal sight, Then Heaven, that taught the wounded heart to grieve, Make of thy kindness an eternal light.✨
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