Victory of Fall

One unthinkably hostile debate
started in a colosseum :
a path to kill the clemency.
A comatose truth was listening to lies.

They were pointingly arguing about
the nukes option to bring about the peace
and prosperity on the strife torn earth.
Total anihilation will initiate a new world.

Troubled times; the failure of sacramental thread
to tie the god. The king presides over 
the sweaty palms which failed the swords.
Deprivation will breed the contempt for theater.

Horses were ready to disobey the order.
Shoes were thrown on altar.
The eyes were everywhere in the wounds, stained
with guilt, never to celebrate the victory.



SATISH VERMA

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009



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Date: 5/31/2009 8:06:00 AM
I like this poem butI'm not sure why. some of the words in it seem not to make sense and yet they fit well. I guess if I attach meaning then that is only going to create misunderstanding. I like the way that the narrative flows and that you inject a great deal of symbolism. The first two line of the last stanza are a good example. I think that you have shown a good deal of courage in presenting these images and trusting in the reader to 'get it'. it is certainly unique and a good poem.
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