Victim of Love

Your projectile language,
Has shattered my porcelain soul.
The ballistics of your words,
Trace back to your beautiful performance.

An arsenal of lethal…language,
Spoken from the chamber of your heart.
Targeting my virgin emotions,
…Piercing my self-esteem,
……Ricocheting your madness in my life.
“I love you”…dissipates in your smoke of lies.

I can still taste the gunpowder residue,
Off the barrel of your moist perpetrating lips.
The evidence still remains at the scene of the crime.
Stained sheets keep…dirty hotel secrets,
My wounded spirit collapsed to the floor of my body,
As the echoes linger within my shattered soul.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009



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Date: 9/21/2013 7:09:00 PM
This is a very powerful, deep, truthful, and thought provoking poem. Makes the reader think how words can be more harmful than good. nice job
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Date: 9/10/2009 12:04:00 PM
I love that you showed how wounding and hurtful words can be. I think that people still don't know how powerful their words her. The phrase of, "Sticks and stones...," is a dangerous myth to hold onto. That's why I'm glad this website makes sure that our comments are to be both encouraging and constructive.
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Date: 9/9/2009 2:39:00 PM
too sad and true
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Date: 9/7/2009 1:08:00 PM
Love the line stained sheets keep..dirty hotel secrets. Love the image of this write its got a certin kinda grit to it. keep writting
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Date: 9/5/2009 5:13:00 AM
I must have missed this! Raul! wow! such trembling emotion! every line packs a wallop!...jim
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Date: 9/5/2009 1:29:00 AM
Wow!!! I so enjoyed this poem....and I can so relate....The Southen Belle
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Date: 9/2/2009 5:12:00 PM
Well, not for nothing it did give you a powerful verse!! wowser! and made me real happy to see you useing another form SEE how everyone LOVED it!!! W O N D E R F U L! Light & Love
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Date: 8/29/2009 1:20:00 AM
Loved the inner poem of L1 thru 3 Raul.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments
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Date: 8/28/2009 5:15:00 PM
Incredible write Raul, words like daggers>>James
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Date: 8/28/2009 12:26:00 PM
I truly enjoyed reading your splendid poetry today Raul. Thank you for sharing. Love, Carol
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Date: 8/28/2009 11:53:00 AM
The vivid imagery conveys your message in a powerful way in this poem. Yes, words do hurt. Really like the strong ending. Thank you for sharing your talent with us and for your kind comment. Have a wonderful weekend. Karen
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Date: 8/28/2009 10:51:00 AM
This breaks the heart of anyone who has felt that shattered soul.....it will hit that soft core inside of broken hearts. Great writing, Raul!! ~ Carrie
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Date: 8/28/2009 6:42:00 AM
Awesome writing again from you my brother..the last stanza is just amazing..good work.
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Date: 8/27/2009 11:42:00 PM
tihs is so different,im used to your excellent Haikus,but you shine in free verse too.you re in love Raul---well penned-charma:)
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Date: 8/27/2009 10:06:00 PM
Raul this poem breaks it on down bro - simply amazing poetry that is so well penned - I wish to say if this is factual based that I'm sorry this happened to you - I have wore these shoes and know how uncomfortable they fit - My prayers are with you - God Bless, MJ
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Date: 8/27/2009 8:17:00 PM
Love the first stanza, Raul! This is a great piece of work. Hugs, Donna
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Date: 8/27/2009 7:50:00 PM
we should chat sometime go on now if you want to talk. :)
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Date: 8/27/2009 7:48:00 PM
Wow this is a great poem and thanks for the comment on mine but that is just a little one you should read the other ones they are better but I am not too good at it but you are amazing!! espically on this one!! keep writing!
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Date: 8/27/2009 7:48:00 PM
abusive language can be very damaging in a relationship. another stroke of genius with this write.
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