Jack Horne Poet Monorhyme

Vicious Circle

He drank another pint of beer,
And saw the shadows disappear;
The answers to his problems clear,
He had no fear, he had no fear.

He felt so ill when morning came,
And stayed in bed, alone and lame,
He knew he had the beer to blame,
When no one came, when no one came.

For Kim’s Monotetra contest

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Poet Destroyer A July 14, 2013 at 12:32 AM Congratulations with your Featured Poem of the week. take care and good night :-) Hugs ~XOX~ LINDA

Karen Anglesey July 11, 2013 at 6:18 PM This sad story is a vivid reality to some. Very clear as to why no one came... I really like the way you wrapped this up in a great poetic form. Nicely done and congrats on your win :)

Poet Destroyer A July 9, 2013 at 9:42 PM Congrats In Kim's "Monotetra" contest....take care...LINDA

Joyce Johnson July 9, 2013 at 12:01 PM clever poem Jack. Glad to see it's a winner. Love, Joyce

Kim Merryman July 9, 2013 at 11:57 AM Well done, Jack! Congrats on your win! Love, Kim

Debbie Guzzi July 9, 2013 at 11:27 AM Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

Joe Maverick July 8, 2013 at 4:17 PM What a good piece Jack, wishing you well in the coming contest; I should hope this scores high..'

Andrea Dietrich July 1, 2013 at 7:52 AM Revisiting this one. I think you did a great job with monotetra. Thanks for seeing many of my latest posts. I know you stay away for a bit and then you have so much to catch up on when you come here. So I appreciate the time you take to see my poetry. Luv, Andrea

Poet Destroyer A June 26, 2013 at 5:19 PM your poem and form is great Jack, much enjoyed thank you for always being blunt and straight forward in your poems... luv~ PD

Monterey Sirak June 25, 2013 at 7:47 AM Great description of how choices come back to haunt you. This poem will do very well in the contest.

Audrey Haick June 24, 2013 at 9:32 PM Yeah, that pint of beer will always come back to "bite"! LOL ! I love this, Jack...Great job as always. All the best for the contest! x Annalise

Terry O'Leary June 24, 2013 at 2:08 PM Great rhyming, Jack! And a funny story... Terry (& thanks for your kind comments)

Phyllis Babcock June 23, 2013 at 12:53 PM That hardy pint of beer ha ha. Never will solve those problems only add to them. I like this poem because it is so true. I have been feeling better and have my fingers crossed that I am on the mend. thanks. love phyl

Daver Austin June 22, 2013 at 11:08 AM As Hardy said - :"No one does come." Thanks for reading my stuff and offering your wishes. As a recovered alcoholic I champion your poem. Love, daver

Andrea Dietrich June 21, 2013 at 7:31 PM hahaha, VERY clever. I dub thee: Clever Boy Jack!! (home from seeing the Great Gatsby, wow that movie rocked)

Russell Sivey June 21, 2013 at 6:49 PM Wow, this write says so much within the confines of this short poem! I really loved this short verse which is your mastery my friend! I enjoyed reading this amazing piece this evening! What a powerful poem, Great Work!!

Sara Kendrick June 21, 2013 at 5:12 PM Cute one..Enjoyed reading this one today..Thanks for the visits..Reads like winning material..Good luck in the contest..Sara

Skat A June 21, 2013 at 4:25 PM Jack, it is always lovely to hear from you. and wow... what beer can do to one... drinking till it fades away, but you are right the cure will only last for a short while. then comes the hang over, and notions, why one sunk so low... a good poem for the contest. sending many hugs your way. .......... Luv~ SKAT

Connie Gildersleeve June 21, 2013 at 1:52 PM This is excellent Monorhyme. The meter is right on. Warm Smiles, Connie