Vapors On My Window

Vapors On My Window
Peeking out a window through blinds that never close Seeing what you see not knowing what you know Everyday they are out there and their numbers seem to grow Peeking out a window through eyes that never close Panic breathes unevenly as the vapors splash the glass Momentarily obstructing things but the vapor never lasts The mist lifts again clearing the windows of the past Then a breath covers it watching it fade away too fast Three days without moving an inch, planted in permanent ache No need to ever sleep when you always wanna stay awake No need to even eat when the plastic fruit isn't fake Paranoia meets suffering in a much needed coffee break
bmdavey@05/11/16
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016


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Date: 5/25/2016 9:27:00 PM
This is a great write Brian. I don't know whether or not you are in pain! If you are , I'm sorry.... brilliant
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 6/5/2016 1:58:00 AM
You are absolutely right......I know I am
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Brian Davey
Date: 5/26/2016 6:08:00 PM
Thank you so much Pashang and are we not all in pain in one form or another? I appreciate your concern very much
Date: 5/17/2016 3:21:00 PM
this is very enjoyable reading for me, Brian. A bit mysterious but sounds like someone at a job or something. and can have a deeper meaning as well. I really liked this one.
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Brian Davey
Date: 5/18/2016 6:07:00 PM
Thank you Andrea I am glad you enjoyed this write
Date: 5/13/2016 8:45:00 PM
This is really marvelous, Brian. Totally excellent thoughts and particularly enjoyed the plastic fruit that isn't fake. Memorable.
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Brian Davey
Date: 5/14/2016 1:23:00 AM
Thanks again for all your positive comments on my work I am happy that you enjoy reading them
Date: 5/12/2016 5:23:00 AM
Brian, Very deep write. A nice piece. Enjoyed.........//:) hugs
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Brian Davey
Date: 5/14/2016 1:24:00 AM
Thank you Manmath
Date: 5/11/2016 12:32:00 PM
Thoughtful and compelling. Great write.
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Brian Davey
Date: 5/12/2016 2:47:00 AM
Thanks Tom
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