David Kavanagh Poet Rhyme

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For Dilly Dally's Vanishing point contest 

09/10/2024 

Vanishing point

Feeling a little cross
I gave out to god
For piling different shapes 
upon my hod
To think, we never had 
any future plan 
So made one up
with the home insurance man 

Anyway, I'm covered 
for a sudden leak
But excess is high
and outlook pretty bleak 
With water damage 
undermining my eyes
Canopies atop
fail to keep me baptised 

In a world slowly spinning
time arcs from view
I lose my line of sight
as payment's accrue
My policy reneges
states I'm in arrears 
Offers me (a one off fix) 
then disappears 

Like most chancers in life
I accept the lump
My hod full of shapes
forming a concave hump
Light recedes slower 
through an inverted mind
Come take a look
I'm not the one praying blind 

Still, I could sit with Jesus 
and chat all day 
Til our questions 
compel each other away 
Faster than light speed
(dark energy) recedes
To voids so distant
god awful truth precedes

Vanishing points converge
as minds can't make sense 
Mine's light years away
nailed to a cosmic fence 
Insurance man tries 
to sell me empty space 
He's the devil
I bought it all just in case!

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Paula Goldsmith September 26, 2024 at 12:29 PM Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful "Vanishing Point" write.   Watch out for the devil, he will get you every time... Enjoy your win as you write away............ David Kavanagh October 7, 2024 at 10:54 AM I think the devil has got me on many occasions Paula, but equally in balance so has another unknown entity, thank you for congrats cheers David

thriveni c mysore September 23, 2024 at 7:37 AM profound write. congratulations dear poet on your win. Be blessed. David Kavanagh October 7, 2024 at 10:52 AM Thank you Thriveni, I feel blessed and cursed on most days, such is life and trying to make sense of it all, cheers David

Beata Agustin September 22, 2024 at 11:56 PM Wow! Congrats! thanks for sharing this insightful muse of yours, so wisdom-filled. God bless you. David Kavanagh October 7, 2024 at 10:50 AM Heya Beata I’ve been away on holiday for a while, sorry for the late reply, glad you read this one, and found something if anything in it, cheers David

Victor Buhagiar September 13, 2024 at 2:23 AM We live in a world where belief is vast and not easy to understand. You argue about life. Yet you made a choice. Is it wise? David Kavanagh September 13, 2024 at 2:44 AM Not always the wisest decisions are the best ones, I play the hand that was dealt to me, I’m not a martyr for any idealistic life, sometimes the expedient choice is all we have, cheers David

Daniel Henry Rodgers September 12, 2024 at 5:30 AM Hello David, You ask many great existential questions about life and what the answers are. Your well inked poem shows us grappling with life's uncertainties, the inadequacy of both spiritual and material safeguards, and the existential angst that comes from trying to find meaning in a vast, often incomprehensible universe. Our brain is so finite and limited. Good Luck on the Contest. - Blessings, My Friend, Daniel David Kavanagh September 12, 2024 at 5:54 AM We really do have finite brains Daniel, but they offer infinite abstract concepts and possibilities, I’m certainly no Einstein, but he did once say, (The most incomprehensible thing about the universe is that it is comprehensible)? I often wonder if he knew everything, but only as a thought experiment, or did he mean it will be understood at some stage in the future, strange thing his (cosmological constant) which he said was the greatest mistake of his life, could well be the first ever hint of what scientists now call (Dark energy), thanks so much for kind comments, cheers David

Tom Cunningham September 11, 2024 at 5:23 AM Seems like you have all bases covered David, hope they pay put if you have to make a claim lol. Tom David Kavanagh September 11, 2024 at 5:32 AM I don’t think I ever covered anything completely in my life Tom, I tend to improvise as I go along, I’ve seen many people thinking they had every angle covered, but never lived long enough to realise, thanks so much for commenting for what on the the face of it appears a difficult piece, but once we look past the metaphor used another picture emerges, cheers David

Paul Willason September 11, 2024 at 4:22 AM Wow...quite a brilliant piece of mindful game play...had me trying to hold onto the threads and even now I am sure if I dropped one or two. Your poetry always draws the reader in...well done David....evaluating my cosmic insurance plan though dark energy is uninsurable at the moment. No-one can nail it in the policy definitions. David Kavanagh September 11, 2024 at 5:24 AM Wow! right back at you Paul, for seeing through the religious metaphor and concentrating on the insurance plot, I believe the universe has it’s own built in insurance policy, (Dark energy) being at the very heart of it, I like my poems to feel edgy by incorporating extra layers, and hope the end justifies the means, thanks so much for braving this one out with a wonderful comment, cheers David