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For Dilly Dally's Vanishing point contest

09/10/2024

Feeling a little cross I gave out to god For piling different shapes upon my hod To think, we never had any future plan So made one up with the home insurance man Anyway, I'm covered for a sudden leak But excess is high and outlook pretty bleak With water damage undermining my eyes Canopies atop fail to keep me baptised In a world slowly spinning time arcs from view I lose my line of sight as payment's accrue My policy reneges states I'm in arrears Offers me (a one off fix) then disappears Like most chancers in life I accept the lump My hod full of shapes forming a concave hump Light recedes slower through an inverted mind Come take a look I'm not the one praying blind Still, I could sit with Jesus and chat all day Til our questions compel each other away Faster than light speed (dark energy) recedes To voids so distant god awful truth precedes Vanishing points converge as minds can't make sense Mine's light years away nailed to a cosmic fence Insurance man tries to sell me empty space He's the devil I bought it all just in case!

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Paula Goldsmith

Date: 9/26/2024 12:29:00 PM

Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful "Vanishing Point" write. Watch out for the devil, he will get you every time... Enjoy your win as you write away............

David Kavanagh
Date: 10/7/2024 10:54:00 AM

I think the devil has got me on many occasions Paula, but equally in balance so has another unknown entity, thank you for congrats cheers David

thriveni c mysore

Date: 9/23/2024 7:37:00 AM

profound write. congratulations dear poet on your win. Be blessed.

David Kavanagh
Date: 10/7/2024 10:52:00 AM

Thank you Thriveni, I feel blessed and cursed on most days, such is life and trying to make sense of it all, cheers David

Beata Agustin

Date: 9/22/2024 11:56:00 PM

Wow! Congrats! thanks for sharing this insightful muse of yours, so wisdom-filled. God bless you.

David Kavanagh
Date: 10/7/2024 10:50:00 AM

Heya Beata I’ve been away on holiday for a while, sorry for the late reply, glad you read this one, and found something if anything in it, cheers David

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 9/13/2024 2:23:00 AM

We live in a world where belief is vast and not easy to understand. You argue about life. Yet you made a choice. Is it wise?

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/13/2024 2:44:00 AM

Not always the wisest decisions are the best ones, I play the hand that was dealt to me, I’m not a martyr for any idealistic life, sometimes the expedient choice is all we have, cheers David

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 9/12/2024 5:30:00 AM

Hello David, You ask many great existential questions about life and what the answers are. Your well inked poem shows us grappling with life's uncertainties, the inadequacy of both spiritual and material safeguards, and the existential angst that comes from trying to find meaning in a vast, often incomprehensible universe. Our brain is so finite and limited. Good Luck on the Contest. - Blessings, My Friend, Daniel

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/12/2024 5:54:00 AM

We really do have finite brains Daniel, but they offer infinite abstract concepts and possibilities, I’m certainly no Einstein, but he did once say, (The most incomprehensible thing about the universe is that it is comprehensible)? I often wonder if he knew everything, but only as a thought experiment, or did he mean it will be understood at some stage in the future, strange thing his (cosmological constant) which he said was the greatest mistake of his life, could well be the first ever hint of what scientists now call (Dark energy), thanks so much for kind comments, cheers David

Tom Cunningham

Date: 9/11/2024 5:23:00 AM

Seems like you have all bases covered David, hope they pay put if you have to make a claim lol. Tom

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/11/2024 5:32:00 AM

I don’t think I ever covered anything completely in my life Tom, I tend to improvise as I go along, I’ve seen many people thinking they had every angle covered, but never lived long enough to realise, thanks so much for commenting for what on the the face of it appears a difficult piece, but once we look past the metaphor used another picture emerges, cheers David

Paul Willason

Date: 9/11/2024 4:22:00 AM

Wow...quite a brilliant piece of mindful game play...had me trying to hold onto the threads and even now I am sure if I dropped one or two. Your poetry always draws the reader in...well done David....evaluating my cosmic insurance plan though dark energy is uninsurable at the moment. No-one can nail it in the policy definitions.

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/11/2024 5:24:00 AM

Wow! right back at you Paul, for seeing through the religious metaphor and concentrating on the insurance plot, I believe the universe has it’s own built in insurance policy, (Dark energy) being at the very heart of it, I like my poems to feel edgy by incorporating extra layers, and hope the end justifies the means, thanks so much for braving this one out with a wonderful comment, cheers David