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Vampire Visits the Dentist

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Dracula had the most terrible toothache, so he booked to see his dentist Mr Payne. An evening appointment was requested; as Dracula only rose after the sun had set When Dracula walked through the door a blast of garlic breath hit him in the face; Dracula bit his lip as he had a huge fit Mr Payne had forgotten his patient’s allergy! The dentist put on his surgical mask, whilst he removed Dracula’s rotten fangs; Sadly for Dracula, he can no longer bite necks, now he’s being treated for severe anaemia! V form Sponsored by Broken Wings Word chosen – Vampire 09-24-17

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John Michaels

Date: 10/7/2017 12:43:00 PM

Heh, nice one Jan! Regards, John.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/7/2017 4:30:00 PM

Thanks so much John:-) hugs jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 10/5/2017 4:40:00 PM

Your poem made me smile, Jan! Loved it, especially the last line. Congrats on your win in the contest! Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 10/7/2017 4:29:00 PM

Thanks so much Sandra i do try and add humour if i can:-) hugs jan xx

James Inman

Date: 10/5/2017 12:47:00 PM

Clever Jan, you made me smile.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/7/2017 4:29:00 PM

Thanks so much James:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 10/5/2017 11:34:00 AM

Very entertaining, Jan, and the final line is definitely clever! Congrats & Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 10/7/2017 4:29:00 PM

Thanks so much Paul i found it quite a challenge as I much prefer to write in rhyme:-) hugs jan xx

Dale Gregory Cozart

Date: 10/5/2017 9:32:00 AM

Congrats, Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/7/2017 4:28:00 PM

Thanks so much Dale:-) hugs jan xx

Roy Pett

Date: 10/5/2017 6:38:00 AM

Congratulations on your well deserved win Jan, so funny and so clever absolutely brilliant. :)))

Jan Allison
Date: 10/7/2017 4:28:00 PM

aww thanks for the lovely comment Roy:-) hugs jan xx

Subimal Sinha-Roy

Date: 10/4/2017 11:25:00 PM

Congratulations, Jan on your great with such an enjoyable poem.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/7/2017 4:27:00 PM

Thanks so much Subimal:-) hugs jan xx

Janis Thompson

Date: 10/4/2017 9:23:00 PM

Congrats on your win. Those teeth needed to go.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/7/2017 4:27:00 PM

Thanks so much Janis I had fun with the theme:-) hugs jan xx

Constance La France

Date: 10/4/2017 6:19:00 PM

Jan, congratulations on your win in my contest with this fun poem !

Jan Allison
Date: 10/7/2017 4:26:00 PM

Thanks so much for a great contest Constance:-) hugs jan xx

Abdul Malik

Date: 9/25/2017 12:05:00 PM

Yep, only YOU can write with such a 'bloody' bite!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/7/2017 4:26:00 PM

lol Thanks so much Abdul:-) hugs jan xx

Ralph Sergi

Date: 9/25/2017 9:32:00 AM

Hi Jan: What a great challenger this poem! I wish you well in the contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/7/2017 4:25:00 PM

Thanks so much Ralph:-) hugs jan xx

Joanna Daniel

Date: 9/25/2017 6:07:00 AM

Ha ha, that's a funny thought and a matching picture too, Jan:)

Jan Allison
Date: 10/7/2017 4:25:00 PM

Thanks so much Jo I wrote the poem then found the picture:-) hugs jan xx

Russell Sivey

Date: 9/25/2017 5:49:00 AM

Ha! This is a hilarious write my friend! Poor Dracula, has to sip on blood from blood banks that might supply him some blood to live through his anemia! I surely loved this incredible poem this morning! What a fantastic piece, Great Work!!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/7/2017 4:24:00 PM

Thanks so much Russell:-) hugs jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 9/24/2017 9:28:00 PM

This is so cute, Jan, luck in the contest.... Hugs Eve ~`*

Jan Allison
Date: 10/7/2017 4:24:00 PM

Thanks so much Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/24/2017 6:44:00 PM

haha. Anemic now. He needs some artificial blood!! GREAT humor, as always, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/7/2017 4:23:00 PM

Thanks so much Andrea i am so behind in my comments:-) hugs jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 9/24/2017 5:32:00 PM

Haha...Poor Drac ...Nicely penned Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 10/7/2017 4:23:00 PM

Thanks so much Jospeh:-) hugs jan xx

Niall Fulham

Date: 9/24/2017 4:28:00 PM

Hi Jan , so funny you have a wonderful imagination :::::::)))))))) hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 9/24/2017 4:45:00 PM

Thanks Niall I think i will re-write this with rhyme as I feel i can do a much better job - I am not comfortable writing verse as rhyme comes to me so much easier:-) Just the thought of Dracula being anaemic could really be built on lol hugs Jan xx

Kevin Shaw

Date: 9/24/2017 4:23:00 PM

Hello Jan, How are you this evening, Nice entry for the Contest, It can be difficult to write in verse, when your natural writing style is to rhyme, regards, Kevin

Jan Allison
Date: 9/24/2017 4:27:00 PM

I'm fine thanks Kevin. yes i struggled to write verse as my preferred style is rhyme. i may re write this with rhyme at a later date I think I could do a much better job and make it much more humourous:-) hugs jan xx

Old Man Emu

Date: 9/24/2017 2:57:00 PM

Ha ha, Dr Payne! Great write Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/24/2017 3:01:00 PM

My fingers itched to write in rhyme so I found it really challenge to write in verse. i may re write it at a later date and make it more humourous:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/24/2017 2:49:00 PM

- He will die of anemia, Jan - No hospital has so much blood to sacrifice :) - Love it :) - Luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 9/24/2017 3:00:00 PM

Thanks Anne Lise:-) hugs jan xx