Jack Horne Poet Monorhyme

Vamp

I had a date by candlelight,
She was the perfect date that night,
I thought I’d met my own Miss Right,
Until outside – oh, what a fright,
She kissed my neck and took a bite! 

Jack Horne for Russell's Candlelight contest

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Paul Callus October 5, 2020 at 2:45 PM A superb monorhyme with most entertaining content, Jack. I wasn't on Soup when you wrote this, but I am sure you won't mind my very belated Congratulations! Regards // paul

Carol Sunshine Brown March 12, 2012 at 7:55 AM Congratulations on your placement in Russell's "By Candlelight" contest Jack. Love,Carol

Cecilia Macfarlane March 12, 2012 at 5:30 AM Awesome twist....made me smile. Congrats on your win!

Kim Merryman March 11, 2012 at 5:18 PM Congrats on your 1st place win with this funny piece, Jack. Love, Kim

Jon Arno March 10, 2012 at 6:05 PM Congratulations on your awesome win! Jon

Joyce Johnson March 10, 2012 at 11:44 AM You and I think alike only they liked yours better. Congratulations. Love, Joyce

Kash Poet March 10, 2012 at 10:28 AM This one is different from the others Jack.Enjoyed the twist here.Congrats on your win.

Gautami Phookan March 10, 2012 at 10:22 AM This was so thrilling!!! Vampires are very much in after 'Twilight' and all, quite enchanting and romantic... Congrats Jack, a lovely weekend...

Carrie Richards March 9, 2012 at 7:14 PM Oh, I am so happy to see a twist in this contest!! You have made me laugh! Thank you Jack!! And Congratulations!!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart March 9, 2012 at 6:12 PM back again Jack wishing u big congrats on a super write luv..

Linda-Marie Sweetheart March 9, 2012 at 6:06 PM I know I read this one before but luv the title had to revisit luv.. happy weekend..

Ralph Taylor March 9, 2012 at 6:01 PM Congrats, Jack. Excellent write. Well deserved win, my friend. Great job. Nice going. You and yours have a great weekend, don't forget to Spring Ahead! Be well and God bless. Ralph

Andrea Dietrich March 7, 2012 at 11:10 PM ps thanks for all your comments tonight, my friend.

Andrea Dietrich March 7, 2012 at 11:10 PM hahaha, you did a FUNNY one for the contest, Jack. That's different and so it BETTER SCORE> I got a big kick out of that big bite!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart March 7, 2012 at 9:50 PM Jack u are ultra witty and so incredible with thoughts and ideas for lines of poetry luv.. good luck in contest.. luv the visual.. Dracula is a fav of mine ..oh...

M.I.A . March 7, 2012 at 7:10 PM LoL! Just saw 'castle' on the vampire episode and gotta say, watch out for those fangs! surprisingly witty jack. good luck on the contest.

Sara Kendrick March 7, 2012 at 5:39 PM Clever idea for this Candlelight contest..Reads like winning material..Good luck..Thanks for stopping by..I appreciate the time spent at my work..I am glad that I did not date anyone like that..That would be fright night ...Sara

Kim Merryman March 7, 2012 at 5:23 PM I like this, Jack. Made me laugh. Best wishes in the contest. Love, Kim

Ilene Bauer March 7, 2012 at 4:55 PM very cute and clever! good luck in the contest!