Valentine Current

valentine current—
rose petals on sail away 
pasties on her deck

2/3/2021
A Valentine’s Senryu
Sponsor: Tania Kitchin
Copyright © | Year Posted 2021

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Krutsinger Avatar
February 4, 2021 at 6:55 PM
That last line truly floored me. Great job!
Rodrigues Avatar
February 4, 2021 at 7:36 PM
Thank you :)
Fowler Avatar
February 4, 2021 at 4:45 PM
Great senryu Kim - GL in the contest! Linda
Rodrigues Avatar
February 4, 2021 at 7:36 PM
Thank you, Linda!
Dietrich Avatar
February 4, 2021 at 1:59 PM
hmmm, maybe you have a different definition for pasties than I know. I just had to check out a valentine senryu. Love the imagery of the rose petals on the current.
Rodrigues Avatar
February 4, 2021 at 2:21 PM
Rose petal pasties covering her buds basically. ;)
Logan Avatar
February 4, 2021 at 3:18 AM
I'm thinking about the implications of your lines, Kim. lol
Rodrigues Avatar
February 4, 2021 at 4:51 AM
LOL! Right?! Must be morning: “red in the morning, Sailor take warning” ;)
Buhagiar Avatar
February 4, 2021 at 3:02 AM
Not a valentine for me. I am forgotten. ~~
Logan Avatar
February 4, 2021 at 3:17 AM
Victor, you are not forgotten. You can be my valentine, for I have none to claim. I hope that made you smile.
Andresen Avatar
February 4, 2021 at 1:36 AM
- A great one, Kim :) - Luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Rodrigues Avatar
February 4, 2021 at 4:46 AM
Thank you, Anne-Lise! <3
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