Valentine Current

valentine current— rose petals on sail away pasties on her deck 2/3/2021 A Valentine’s Senryu Sponsor: Tania Kitchin

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Caren Krutsinger

Date: 2/4/2021 6:55:00 PM

That last line truly floored me. Great job!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/4/2021 7:36:00 PM

Thank you :)

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 2/4/2021 4:45:00 PM

Great senryu Kim - GL in the contest! Linda

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/4/2021 7:36:00 PM

Thank you, Linda!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/4/2021 1:59:00 PM

hmmm, maybe you have a different definition for pasties than I know. I just had to check out a valentine senryu. Love the imagery of the rose petals on the current.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/4/2021 2:21:00 PM

Rose petal pasties covering her buds basically. ;)

Jenna Logan

Date: 2/4/2021 3:18:00 AM

I'm thinking about the implications of your lines, Kim. lol

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/4/2021 4:51:00 AM

LOL! Right?! Must be morning: “red in the morning, Sailor take warning” ;)

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 2/4/2021 3:02:00 AM

Not a valentine for me. I am forgotten. ~~

Jenna Logan
Date: 2/4/2021 3:17:00 AM

Victor, you are not forgotten. You can be my valentine, for I have none to claim. I hope that made you smile.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/4/2021 1:36:00 AM

- A great one, Kim :) - Luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/4/2021 4:46:00 AM

Thank you, Anne-Lise! <3