Using

There is a distinct fuzziness in her mind Her dendrite highway is drying up, cracked like broken concrete. Cloudy thinking keeps her off the path of clarity. She dares not let the others know. Wait! They are also using drugs; perhaps they already know? She breathes easier. Happily lapsing into her final coma.

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Kim Rodrigues

Date: 4/6/2021 7:21:00 PM

Such a sad ending...

Caren Krutsinger
Date: 4/6/2021 9:29:00 PM

I thought it needed to be sad, as the real ones are often really sad.

Judy Ball

Date: 4/6/2021 7:16:00 PM

A fine piece telling the dangers of using drugs. So many young people die from overdose. I was told once that drugs age you from the inside out. That's why a user always looks older than he/she should. God job here Caren. God Bless, JB

Caren Krutsinger
Date: 4/6/2021 9:29:00 PM

Thank you Judy.

L Milton Hankins

Date: 4/6/2021 8:59:00 AM

Yep...good writing, Caren. "distinct fuzziness in her mind...."

Caren Krutsinger
Date: 4/6/2021 9:30:00 PM

I mean truly, drugs have a pronounced effect on me and I am talking about the legal ones!

Silent One

Date: 4/6/2021 7:35:00 AM

A graphic way to describe it.. you did it so well..

Caren Krutsinger
Date: 4/6/2021 8:45:00 AM

Thank you Silent One.