Using

There is a distinct fuzziness in her mind
Her dendrite highway is drying up, cracked like broken concrete.
Cloudy thinking keeps her off the path of clarity.
She dares not let the others know.
Wait!
They are also using drugs; perhaps they already know?
She breathes easier.
Happily lapsing into her final coma.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2021

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Rodrigues Avatar
April 6, 2021 at 7:21 PM
Such a sad ending...
Krutsinger Avatar
April 6, 2021 at 9:29 PM
I thought it needed to be sad, as the real ones are often really sad.
Ball Avatar
April 6, 2021 at 7:16 PM
A fine piece telling the dangers of using drugs. So many young people die from overdose. I was told once that drugs age you from the inside out. That's why a user always looks older than he/she should. God job here Caren. God Bless, JB
Krutsinger Avatar
April 6, 2021 at 9:29 PM
Thank you Judy.
Hankins Avatar
April 6, 2021 at 8:59 AM
Yep...good writing, Caren. "distinct fuzziness in her mind...."
Krutsinger Avatar
April 6, 2021 at 9:30 PM
I mean truly, drugs have a pronounced effect on me and I am talking about the legal ones!
One Avatar
April 6, 2021 at 7:35 AM
A graphic way to describe it.. you did it so well..
Krutsinger Avatar
April 6, 2021 at 8:45 AM
Thank you Silent One.
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