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This poem was written following a prompt to use one of these lines from well known poems and poets as the opening line of a six line verse for Nette Onclaud's contest.  I made this attempt to weave all of them into a cohesive poetic offering.  Feel free to offer any comments - pro or con - on this endeavor.

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“The breeze at dawn has secrets to tell you.”--------------------Rumi
listen not to the vagrant zephyr
seeking only sustenance of its kind
idol thinkers lolling in innocence
swayed by every whispering sigh
unaware – that secrets lie.

“We put the urn aboard ship.”---------------------------------------Sappho
Single struggling sapling
scented with the longings of leaving,
kissed by the roots of a family’s tree
adrift on a sea of doubt
holding true to its native soil.

“Wherever I am, the world comes to me.”-----------------------Mary Oliver
An ocean lapping at the shores of time’s fleeting gusts
enticing us to come aboard, sail her winds
dance the song of the gentle rains
shelter in her wooded arms and cliffs
wait as her horizon’s greet my welcome.

“the moon is a curving flower of gold.”---------------------------Sara Teasdale
grinning in the pilfered beauty of sunlight
stolen from beyond earth’s curving crust
hanging its crescent hook for lover’s
to ponder in the midst of loving’s lust
petals falling in the path of daybreaks rush.

“I like my body when it is with your”…memory-------------------e.e. cummings
tingling with the cold salt spray of 
breakers overpowering the sand
softly kissing the edges ……frothily spent
bubbling beneath the screech of gulls
nestled into the arms of home



“the apparition of these faces in the crowd”-------------------------Ezra Pound
vague faces of unknown forebears
yellowing in time’s smoky rooms
stern faces seeking a future
young faces – now grown old
dancing on the branches of a tree.

“The tree is here, still, in pure stone” ----------------------------------Pablo Neruda
troubled roots strengthened by hardship
searching life’s invisible pathways
meeting pressure with practiced patience
offering shade, and presence
touching granite’s hardened heart.



John G. Lawless
7/24/2015







“Wherever I am, the world comes to me.”  Mary Oliver

“the apparition of these faces in the crowd.”   Ezra Pound

”I like my body when it is with your….”    e.e. cummings

“The tree is here, still, in pure stone,”     Pablo Neruda

“We put the urn aboard ship.”     Sappho

“the moon is a curving flower of gold.”     Sara Teasdale

“the breeze at dawn has secrets to tell you.”     Rumi

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Date: 7/24/2015 9:13:00 AM
John, with Rumi,this one is a full powerful verse! like the 3rd line a little alliteration on 3rd line.. the last line: great. :D! With sappho, like the 2nd line, it invites mystery 4th line: kissed by.... of family tree??? like the line sea of doubt....message nice! =') with Mary, breathtaking imagery.. I remember Rose and Jack.. 4th line: dance...of gentle rains???(maybe better?) last line: waiting??? with Sara, 2nd line: lovely, nice flow.. like the petals falling picture for sun rays.. :)
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Date: 7/24/2015 9:18:00 AM
Im still thinking of something but you came already with so much!!! :D!
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Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 7/24/2015 9:15:00 AM
With cummings, weeee the first line is a wow!!! :D this a romantic sweet picture.. :D! With Ezra, like the 2nd and 3rd line... the last line, intriguing... With PAblo, you painted a picturw well... :) I wish you didn't place periods on some of your first lines.. all in all i like best your 1-3rd set.. plus the 5th one.. :) superb!!! =')~Olive ELoisa
Date: 7/24/2015 8:20:00 AM
So ambitious John! : ) I'm in the same boat as jan, I haven't been able to come up with one yet! I love the "pedals falling in the path of day brakes rush" line. Great job! ~ lee
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Date: 7/24/2015 8:00:00 AM
WOW John I haven't even done one yet - quite an outstanding string of poems - so glad to see Nette inspired you so much:-) hugs Jan xx 7
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