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Upon Further Reflection

If only not so lonely, Perhaps then I might see: How two are one, but when we're we That I am you and you are me. *Rhyme Battle 2 Contest Entry

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Debbie Guzzi

Date: 3/22/2014 3:09:00 PM

I'm reading Chan. Light & Love

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 1/2/2014 1:22:00 AM

This is a nice, pensive write. Simple, but very nice. Always, Laura

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 1/3/2014 1:37:00 PM

I appreciate the compliment, Laura :)

Robin Davis

Date: 10/25/2013 5:05:00 PM

Chan This is a deep and thought provoking write. Makes the reader reflect on life and whats important. Nice job my friend My Puppet Master poem is not really happening. So you don't have to whoop any butt. LOL but I appreciate the offer. Hugs

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 10/26/2013 6:49:00 AM

Many thanks and much love to you, my sweet friend :)

Kelly Deschler

Date: 9/11/2013 5:17:00 PM

I loved this poem! Wonderful work! Adding it to my favorites! I have struggled with loneliness and self identity for awhile. How people see me on the outside, does not reflect who I am on the inside. That is what my poem "Dark Angel", is all about...Thank you for reading and commenting kindly on my poem. I really appreciate it!

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 9/11/2013 5:23:00 PM

I sincerely appreciate that, Kelly. Your poem was really cool. I love it when the imagery is so strong, I feel like I am right there, in the poem itself :)

Karen Anglesey

Date: 9/11/2013 6:23:00 AM

Comments to the comments....Reason A Poteet...her comments are finally the voice of Reason (pun intended). I have read some of her work and I think she teaches literature. Her work is impeccable, like yours. Danesh and John, Oh my, they haven't a clue but thank you for trying to give them one :)

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 9/11/2013 9:32:00 AM

Check your SoupMail, my dear; my heart is bursting with happiness! :D

Danesh Morgan

Date: 8/29/2013 8:15:00 AM

greetings thou you have done quite well i do believe the mistake the last poet mention about is on the third line , but when we're we . . . is not correct nor does it sound so but that's not meant to be but who are we? are two example i think adding a we ending is very hard but maybe you can think a better phase. .

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 8/29/2013 8:52:00 AM

The contraction is supposed to mean, "but when we are we"; eliminating the contraction and using "when we are we" throws off the rhythm. I see why it's problematic, but if you read "we're" and understand it means "we are", then perhaps that will help it make more sense. Hope that clarifies. Thanks for the review! :)

John Loving Iii

Date: 8/23/2013 9:03:00 PM

Only a small part of a much larger work. It takes time not just lines. Gramaticles errors included.

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 8/24/2013 10:32:00 AM

should say *drone on :)

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 8/24/2013 10:31:00 AM

Hi, John. If there are grammar errors in the piece, I am unaware of any, and as far as it being a small part of a larger work, I am inclined to disagree. I am a staunch believer in poetic brevity and to say what I need to say in as few lines as possible, because I do not like to let a poem ramble or drone one needlessly.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/19/2013 7:39:00 AM

You will find the people here very nice, it is an excellent community. At times there will be drama, sometimes people's spirits can be riled after all poets tend to feel emotions with intensity. However if you offer others grace they will respond in kind. No one is expected to be perfect. I hope you enjoy. Welcome to the soup.

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 8/19/2013 8:01:00 AM

Thus far, everyone has been wonderful and welcoming and I'm glad to have found a place like this :)

Skat A

Date: 8/17/2013 11:05:00 PM

CONGRATS on having your poem featured this week........ Love ~ SKAT ~

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/17/2013 10:08:00 PM

Hi JTPA, . Congratulations!!! It's nice to see your poem Featured on the soups Home Page, this past week :-) goodnight~ Luv* LINDA *

Just That Archaic Poet

Date: 8/5/2013 1:13:00 PM

Thanks again for the read and responses; I appreciate the positive feedback. I've had a lot of bad experiences on other poetry sharing sites; I hope this place is different.

Skat A

Date: 8/3/2013 9:18:00 PM

awesome...SKAT

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/2/2013 9:43:00 PM

Just The A.Poet, , -A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. Dropping by to invite you to my latest contest. You will find the contest page on the top left hand side* -Looking forward in following and reading your poetry. Hope to hear from you soon. You will enjoy the community, we are one big happy family. (Drama & Love. LOL) ~ Take Care!! From: your new poet friend @-> LINDA <-@ ....

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 8/19/2013 6:35:00 PM

Much <3 to you, Linda (and everyone else, also). Thank you all for the warm welcome :)

John Posey

Date: 8/2/2013 12:57:00 PM

Very warm..... when figured out.... Nice writing.... Jake

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/2/2013 8:33:00 AM

Hello new member: J.T.A.P.- Welcome to P-Soup. - Thank you for choosing to share your poems here with us. - I look forward to reading more in the future. - Have a good time and I wish you luck. - (Give and receive comments) - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)