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Unwanted


There was just one time- I was left wondering,
     It was after my big sister was killed;
I can still hear my mother's screaming,
          Poor father with his weeping that chilled.

Chilled, any heart with its raw emotion,
     Father could be found in a bar drinking;
Mother took to her bed with depression,
          I was confused and just stopped speaking.

Speaking, softly one day grandma took me,
     I liked the farm with grandma and grandpa;
But, I really wanted my parents to see,
          I was broken and only wanted to withdraw.

Withdraw, to the attic where I found peace,
     It was grandma who encouraged me to write;
I wrote my sorrow and it will never cease,
         I would dream of my former life at night.

Night, was full of little girl tears falling,
     Then one day mother came for a visit;
She told me that father had stopped drinking,
          I went to my room and hid in the closet.

Closet, was so warm, dark, quiet and safe,
     Grandpa said that I was going to a new house;
Father came with open arms for his little waif,
         All I said, "Daddy can I bring my pet mouse?"


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May 20, 2016 (re-write from Nov. 2015)


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For the contest, Weepy Quatrain
sponsor, Laura Loo

Third Place
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Lamoureux Avatar
May 24, 2016 at 7:51 AM
I can see why Laura chose this one. Congratulations Constance.
Misra Avatar
May 23, 2016 at 10:25 AM
Congratulations on your win, Broken Wings. Sad poem, indeed. ~karam~
Roper Avatar
May 22, 2016 at 8:50 PM
Wonderful write, Broken Wings, congratulations on your win. Hugs
Dietrich Avatar
May 22, 2016 at 8:31 PM
wow, Congrats on a GREAT placement, Constance. Very well done.
Devnath  Avatar
May 22, 2016 at 7:57 PM
Beautiful sad poem my lovely friend. Congrats on your placement. Loved always, bl
Scars Avatar
May 22, 2016 at 7:16 PM
Broken Wings, :(:(:( very emotive and sad when I put myself in your teary-eyed shoes..Exactly what I was looking for in this contest. I can't imagine about my big sister. Thank you for being a part of my contest and congrats on your 3rd placement. Be blessed dear lady :)-luloo
Dietrich Avatar
May 22, 2016 at 4:15 PM
Sad and yet the ending is very sweet and cheerful almost with the question about the mouse. It's always wise to go autobiographical for more impact, Constance. VERY NICELY done!! SEVEN
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