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wave winds up coils tight
over tops to crash in foam
energy expunged

oceanseawaterwindhaiku

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Susan Gentry

Date: 4/18/2018 10:58:00 PM

Congratulations on your win.

Roy Pett

Date: 4/18/2018 5:33:00 AM

Congratulations on your well deserved win John, creates wonderful images and the power of the sea, well written. :))

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

Date: 4/17/2018 11:44:00 AM

Energy captured perfectly in this piece, wonderful Haiku. Congratulations on your win! xomo

Mick Talbot

Date: 4/17/2018 11:10:00 AM

Not sure you used the correct word unless you are inferring that waves are evil. Waves to all seas, lakes and streams to rivers, are supporters of life, they help re-oxygenate the water. As for all its other idiosyncrasies? Humans tend to ignore them as they do most aspects of nature then sadly suffer the consequences. When the truth is, sadly, we have only our selves to blame Now, where was I? Your haiku, brilliant had you used expired it would have got gold, as is a silver medal congrats. Mick

John Anderson
Date: 4/17/2018 1:05:00 PM

To me 'expunge' was the perfect word both for sound and meaning'. Expunge' is an evocative word that echoes 'sponge', 'plunge', etc, and it is a 'cutting word that resonates'. The meaning is also more powerful than 'expire' and does not imply evil. Expunge: to destroy all trace of; obliterate, blot out, abolish, eradicate, cancel, delete, eliminate, extinguish. Cheers and thanks for the placement!