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Until They Shine

Wading through fragmented thoughts Searching for one last poetic line To slip around a shattered heart Then shaped into a perfect bow Pulsating softly like guitar strings As they begin to play real slow Replacing old queasy emotions With melodic breezes that flow Through the canyons of mind Once found in a bottle of whiskey That has now been left behind Gliding in Texas two-step rhymes To the Silver Bullet Band we bid goodnight Our last dance becomes A mellow tune that only Seger hums We dance between the verses of smoothed out lines That seem to roll endlessly through gifted minds To be left off the page, until they shine

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Gary Watkins

Date: 4/27/2014 12:51:00 AM

I haven't heard that song in a very long time. I think I'll have to queue it up again soon. I enjoyed the imagery in the poem. It makes me wonder what you'd do with Seger's "She's Got The Fire Down Below." Hee hee.

Karen Anglesey
Date: 4/27/2014 10:09:00 AM

Whew! I may have to tune in to more Seger tunes. Thanks for commenting :)

Kechi Odibi

Date: 11/12/2013 7:34:00 AM

Well written Karen. Inspite of busy schedule there is still time to reason logically...thanks for stopping by on my page.

Karen Anglesey
Date: 12/12/2013 12:44:00 PM

Thank you for commenting. Much appreciated !

Kelly Deschler

Date: 11/11/2013 4:04:00 PM

Just stopping by to read this amazing poem, once again. All of us can surely relate to this! Terrific work, Karen!...Many thanks for all of the kind congrats on my poems. I appreciate it very much! :)

Karen Anglesey
Date: 11/11/2013 4:23:00 PM

Kelly, thank you for commenting. Much appreciated!

Rachael Hood

Date: 10/14/2013 9:53:00 PM

Karen, as always...stunning

Karen Anglesey
Date: 10/14/2013 10:15:00 PM

I think I need to revise some lines...love ya girl :)

Ifeanyi Bob Ekechukwu

Date: 10/5/2013 8:44:00 AM

Wow I love your grand style you employed there,it was balm! Well penned my dearie. Keep it up and we will all shine as well€.

Karen Anglesey
Date: 10/13/2013 5:52:00 PM

Thank you for the lovely comment :)

Mustapha Mohammed

Date: 9/15/2013 1:53:00 PM

Your poem is really dreamy Karen. Winsome stuff from you indeed!

Karen Anglesey
Date: 9/15/2013 3:34:00 PM

Mustapha, thank you very much :)

Gerald Kithinji

Date: 9/12/2013 10:22:00 AM

...lulled into thoughts of the same kind...

Karen Anglesey
Date: 9/12/2013 4:59:00 PM

Gerald, thank you for visiting.

Sandra Adams

Date: 9/8/2013 3:00:00 PM

gorgeous poem...I just love this one from you....it flows perfectly :)

Karen Anglesey
Date: 9/8/2013 4:48:00 PM

Sandra... thank you so much for visiting and commenting :)

Wilma Neels

Date: 9/8/2013 11:29:00 AM

Until they shine like this gem does Karen. Really a beautiful piece you have here. So much to take away from this one. Loved it! Love Wilma

Karen Anglesey
Date: 9/8/2013 4:48:00 PM

Wilma, thank you for the lovely words.. :)

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 9/7/2013 6:53:00 PM

Very cool poem! I love the metaphors throughout and it flows so well, like a softly strummed guitar, I'd say. Beautiful work my friend. Always, Laura

Karen Anglesey
Date: 9/7/2013 7:04:00 PM

Laura, thank you for visiting and leaving such a nice comment :)

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 9/7/2013 6:22:00 PM

Wow, this is so impressive Karen. It kept getting better and better and I didn't want it to end. What I call "silver words"....they shimmer and shine as you ended your poem with that last line. Brilliant! This one is going straight into my fav's.

Karen Anglesey
Date: 9/7/2013 6:57:00 PM

Connie, somehow my comment to Becca jumped into your screen ... thank you so much for the lovely comments. I appreciate your inspiring words !

Karen Anglesey
Date: 9/7/2013 6:55:00 PM

Becca, thank you so much for the glowing words. You inspire me very much and I really like it that you just let your honesty shine... we both seem to worry about our imperfections a little :)

Donna Jones

Date: 9/6/2013 8:14:00 PM

Ah.many between the lines thoughts I gather here...like this very much..

Karen Anglesey
Date: 9/6/2013 10:27:00 PM

Hi Donna, thank you for the thoughtful comment :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/5/2013 6:26:00 PM

this is really poetic and flowing, Karen. Very nice poetry.

Karen Anglesey
Date: 9/5/2013 8:18:00 PM

Andrea, It's allways nice to read your comments, thank you :)

Justin Bordner

Date: 9/5/2013 3:08:00 PM

Romantic ritual Karen - I dance alot, creatively, physically, figuratively and therfore your mysterious metaphor is pleasent to me - I love dancing - J.A.B. %

Karen Anglesey
Date: 9/5/2013 8:17:00 PM

Justin, I am pleased you see you splash those romantic comments on my page :)

Just That Archaic Poet

Date: 9/5/2013 9:41:00 AM

Good morning, Karen. Did you mean for this to be categorized as "free-verse"? I thought you had some lovely rhymes throughout. I also enjoyed the modern feel of it; as you know, I am trapped in centuries past, so I liked the present-day mood. Very well executed poem, my talented friend :)

Karen Anglesey
Date: 9/5/2013 9:50:00 AM

I felt a little more into Free Verse mood than Rhyme when I wrote it ; but thank you for noticing the rhyme patterns and thank you for your grand comments :)

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 9/5/2013 9:43:00 AM

I also agree with Yanny: the last line is perfect and beautifully anchors the piece :)

Painted Hunter

Date: 9/5/2013 9:25:00 AM

You have some great lines here, Karen. A musical poem and it sounds great!

Karen Anglesey
Date: 9/5/2013 9:50:00 AM

Thank you Caleb... I appreciate your musical relationship with the poem.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 9/5/2013 9:02:00 AM

I really enjoyed this piece, there was plenty of new imagery for me. You slip from Free Verse into Rhyme at the middle to the end so labeling this Verse would be best. You certainly have a way with words! As to what 'inspired' [The Sowing] I've simply known and know too many woman who have been victimized by men.

Karen Anglesey
Date: 9/5/2013 9:57:00 AM

WOW ... Debbie thank you for the enlightening comments. The pattern in much of my writing is to slip from Free Verse into Rhyme and I had not thought about why until your comment... Thank you so much :) The poem loosely is based on a song by Bob Seger and was listening to it when I wrote this... I sort of see it as an attempt to bring peace to a chaotic and anxious mind... Thank you so much !

Debbie Guzzi
Date: 9/5/2013 9:02:00 AM

The universal culture is SO used to this behavior they seem immune to our contributions as well as our pain. [only war & warriors can claim heroism or bravery in their minds & this is SO wrong] Light & Love

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 9/5/2013 8:25:00 AM

You transported me to songwriter heaven. I love the mood you have created. Pour me a shot and lets have a dance.

Karen Anglesey
Date: 9/5/2013 9:59:00 AM

Richard, I am so delighted by your thoughtful comments. I might even think about a shot of whiskey to loosen me up for a Texas two-step ...ha

Yanny Widjanarko

Date: 9/5/2013 12:15:00 AM

Last line is really a hit line Karen, it closed the entire verses beautifuly and perfect :) enjoyable read that i have today :) hug, yanny

Karen Anglesey
Date: 9/5/2013 6:27:00 AM

Yanny, thank you for commenting. I appreciate your thoughts :)

Ken Carroll

Date: 9/4/2013 9:49:00 PM

Hi Karen, I enjoyed this write from you depicting the creative process and influences... Ken

Karen Anglesey
Date: 9/4/2013 9:55:00 PM

Ken, thank you for the visit. I appreciate the detailed comments:)

Kelly Deschler

Date: 9/3/2013 9:02:00 PM

Awesome poem about poetry!.... I think every struggling, perfectionist poet here can relate to this feeling! Myself included! Loved it immensely!....Thank you for the encouraging comments on my poem "Mystic Moon". It is truly appreciated very much!

Karen Anglesey
Date: 9/4/2013 6:26:00 AM

Kelly, your perception is perfect. It is definitely a search that goes on until we can smooth out our lines. thank you :)