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I decided to make a haibun using my comment on my previous poem, "While Brushing My Teeth."  My muse likes to recycle.

Untie the Knot

When I was very young, I learned how to tie my shoes in a tight double knot, but I couldn't untie them. I tried and tried but to no avail. I was stubborn and didn't want to ask for help, but eventually, I had to ask Mom or Dad to help me. And they did. It makes you wonder, who will untie the hard knots that humanity's responsible for?

who will rescue us
creation or creator ...
what of our children?





2/26/2023
It Means A Lot To Me Poetry Contest
Sponsor: Regina McIntosh
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Puddifoot Avatar
February 12, 2023 at 3:14 PM
i still have problems with shoe laces, just today in fact! lol joking aside, you pose a serious question..haibun is one of my fave forms, and this one does the form justice..thanks for my placement in your recent contest, and your kind comment.:)
Toney Avatar
February 12, 2023 at 8:55 PM
Charlotte, thank you for your cool, encouraging comment :) I also appreciate your support of my 2022 Poetry Marathon Contest with your soulful poem “Facets of Loneliness.” Take care!
Mcintosh Avatar
February 1, 2023 at 2:37 PM
Wonderful thoughts... I hadn't thought about how difficult it is to learn to tie your shoes when you're little in a long, long time... maybe never. Such a thought provoking write. Love it. God bless you. Love, Gina
Toney Avatar
February 1, 2023 at 9:41 PM
Gina, such a thoughtful comment to brighten my day. I’m glad you liked it. ~Mark
Dietrich Avatar
January 29, 2023 at 9:29 AM
My muse likes recycling too!!! I LOVE this one, Mark. A FAVE
Toney Avatar
January 29, 2023 at 9:52 AM
Thank you for the boost, Andrea!
Ligon Avatar
January 19, 2023 at 11:41 AM
Great illustration, and your Haiku poses a profound eternal question that will have an affect on generations to come.
Toney Avatar
January 22, 2023 at 7:47 AM
Juliet, your thought-provoking comment is much appreciated.
George Avatar
January 7, 2023 at 11:31 PM
You have left a deep question for us to ponder, illustrating your childhood experience. You had your Dad and Mom to help and answer you then, but who is there now to answer the question you have hurled. A powerful Haibun dear Mark .
Toney Avatar
January 9, 2023 at 6:50 AM
Valsa, thank you for your encouraging comment. You made my day!
Daniel Avatar
January 6, 2023 at 3:07 AM
A brilliant question, Mark:) thank you for my placement in your Marathon contest:)
Toney Avatar
January 6, 2023 at 8:11 AM
You are very welcome, Jo. Thank you for supporting my 2022 Poetry Marathon contest.
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