Unsettled Night

Unsettling the evening brings with it cold
As the night holds the last of the warmth
Burrows of her brow lives likely to unfold
And her heart leaves with it dire and soft

The night holds mysteries from her heart
Unsettling the evening brings with it cold
Where she buries her feelings to impart
Burrows of her brow lives likely to unfold

She freezes where men bring her flowers
The night holds mysteries from her heart
The time is elongated by the night towers
Where she buries her feelings to impart

No other person can understand her eyes
She freezes where men bring her flowers
It’s one of a many distinguished disguise
The time is elongated by the night towers

She forces herself to embellish the night
No other person can understand her eyes
Softly she extinguishes nearly gone sight
It’s one of a many distinguished disguise

As the night holds the last of the warmth
She forces herself to embellish the night
And her heart leaves with it dire and soft
Softly she extinguishes nearly gone sight

Russell Sivey

Anyone know if this is a form? It's not a true Pantoum! A reverse Pantoum maybe?

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Copyright © | Year Posted 2017



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Date: 9/8/2017 10:14:00 AM
It is beautiful and mysterious. I love it because it is a Sivey!
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Date: 9/8/2017 7:34:00 AM
WOW! Lovely poem no matter what form it is--so delicate and touching, Russell!
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Patricia Cresswell
Date: 9/8/2017 10:13:00 AM
Date: 9/8/2017 6:54:00 AM
Hi Russell, no its not a true Pantoum although quite wonderful, perhaps a Sivey Pantoum, I LOVE it. Thanks for visiting my poem this morning, and spotting those typos, like the woman in your poem my sight is nearly gone too, I fixed them now thank you. Hope you are doing well and recovering.
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Date: 9/8/2017 4:26:00 AM
- All I know ... that's a beautiful poem, Russell - I wish you and Emma a wonderful weekend - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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