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Unraveling

(this actually a rondolet, a shortened form of rondeau)

Unraveling 
Stitches from our wedding quilt
Unraveling
Your so-called “business traveling"
Anniversary streamers of guilt
25 years - the life we built
Unraveling


12/1/11
Received 1st place

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Debbie Guzzi Date: 4/25/2012 11:18:00 AM nod, I hear YOU! Light & Love Login to Reply

Dinda Minardi Date: 12/8/2011 9:36:00 AM To the point yet poetic.. So sad though... I think that's what makes you win. Congrats!!! Login to Reply

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl Date: 12/8/2011 4:23:00 AM So sad. Congratulations on your win x Login to Reply

Joyce Johnson Date: 12/7/2011 7:22:00 PM Very, very sad. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 12/7/2011 5:27:00 PM LOVE it and that you WON big with it. Congrats, my friend. Login to Reply

Gwendolen Song Date: 12/7/2011 3:24:00 PM Dear Susan...I am giving you a great big hug....being in this club really stinks...I love the parallelism that couldn't be penned ANY STRONGER than with a wedding quilt...Love, Gwendolen Login to Reply

Bob Quigley Date: 12/7/2011 2:36:00 PM So much revealed in so few words. Nice write Susan. Congratulations Login to Reply

Kim Merryman Date: 12/7/2011 2:24:00 PM I like the way you worded this, Susan, although saddened by the theme. Congrats on your win and thank you for taking time to read and comment on my poems. It is greatly appreciated. Kim Login to Reply

Carol Sunshine Brown Date: 12/7/2011 12:44:00 PM Congratulations on your placement in Moses' "Beautiful" contest Susan. Love, Carol Login to Reply

David Williams Date: 12/7/2011 12:20:00 PM Susan congrats on your win, sad when relationships breakdown..David Login to Reply

Robert A. Dufresne Date: 12/5/2011 4:27:00 PM oooh ! hope this is just a fantasy poem, Susan/ It is well done to be sure.... I mean the poem Login to Reply

Goode Guy Date: 12/5/2011 3:44:00 PM S.B., this terse quilt of humanities knots says lots, in a mere 22 words. May mending retie the bonds. ;-) Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 12/5/2011 12:09:00 PM Enjoyed reading your work about life..A husband who is gone a lot is good and bad..One can get a lot of work done but then no one to snuggle ..Thanks for the kind review of my work..Sara..Haven't done much embroidery since Caleb was born 12 years ago but I think that I am going to start back..Sara Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 12/4/2011 6:32:00 PM I see why you are enjoying this new form for you, Susan. You stitch it together so well!!! Login to Reply

Bl Devnath Date: 12/3/2011 9:30:00 PM beautifully you penned. God bless us all, my friend.bl Login to Reply

Russell Sivey Date: 12/3/2011 6:12:00 PM Awesome write Susan! I enjoyed reading your poem tonight! I like how the poem unfolds as you read on! This sounds like true reality! I hope all is well now for you! Fantastic Work!! Login to Reply