Unraveling

(this actually a rondolet, a shortened form of rondeau)

Unraveling 
Stitches from our wedding quilt
Unraveling
Your so-called “business traveling"
Anniversary streamers of guilt
25 years - the life we built
Unraveling


12/1/11
Received 1st place
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Guzzi Avatar
April 25, 2012 at 11:18 AM
nod, I hear YOU! Light & Love
Minardi Avatar
December 8, 2011 at 9:36 AM
To the point yet poetic.. So sad though... I think that's what makes you win. Congrats!!!
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
December 8, 2011 at 4:23 AM
So sad. Congratulations on your win x
Johnson Avatar
December 7, 2011 at 7:22 PM
Very, very sad. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce
Dietrich Avatar
December 7, 2011 at 5:27 PM
LOVE it and that you WON big with it. Congrats, my friend.
Song Avatar
December 7, 2011 at 3:24 PM
Dear Susan...I am giving you a great big hug....being in this club really stinks...I love the parallelism that couldn't be penned ANY STRONGER than with a wedding quilt...Love, Gwendolen
Quigley Avatar
December 7, 2011 at 2:36 PM
So much revealed in so few words. Nice write Susan. Congratulations
Merryman Avatar
December 7, 2011 at 2:24 PM
I like the way you worded this, Susan, although saddened by the theme. Congrats on your win and thank you for taking time to read and comment on my poems. It is greatly appreciated. Kim
Brown Avatar
December 7, 2011 at 12:44 PM
Congratulations on your placement in Moses' "Beautiful" contest Susan. Love, Carol
Williams Avatar
December 7, 2011 at 12:20 PM
Susan congrats on your win, sad when relationships breakdown..David
Dufresne Avatar
December 5, 2011 at 4:27 PM
oooh ! hope this is just a fantasy poem, Susan/ It is well done to be sure.... I mean the poem
Guy Avatar
December 5, 2011 at 3:44 PM
S.B., this terse quilt of humanities knots says lots, in a mere 22 words. May mending retie the bonds. ;-)
Kendrick Avatar
December 5, 2011 at 12:09 PM
Enjoyed reading your work about life..A husband who is gone a lot is good and bad..One can get a lot of work done but then no one to snuggle ..Thanks for the kind review of my work..Sara..Haven't done much embroidery since Caleb was born 12 years ago but I think that I am going to start back..Sara
Dietrich Avatar
December 4, 2011 at 6:32 PM
I see why you are enjoying this new form for you, Susan. You stitch it together so well!!!
Devnath  Avatar
December 3, 2011 at 9:30 PM
beautifully you penned. God bless us all, my friend.bl
Sivey Avatar
December 3, 2011 at 6:12 PM
Awesome write Susan! I enjoyed reading your poem tonight! I like how the poem unfolds as you read on! This sounds like true reality! I hope all is well now for you! Fantastic Work!!
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