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Probably not a paradigm of Brenda’s contest but I go where the muse takes me! 

Blind and harassed, the doorbell rings, I grasp the knob and hold it tight, afraid to see. The buzz of bell, annoying me. I gasp, as my first date, unmasked, I’d rate a D. Shoot ‘em up movie clashed, as did our snacks. Drinks spilled and popcorn thrashed, before the end. Romance-unskilled — a drip like candle wax. He tried to make a move — his arm he’d bend, but smacked me hard, instead, in my pained chest. I took a break - the powder room, with sigh, returned to him, agreed to make the best out of this grievous situation, then die! A kiss, eyes closed, might end this nightmare date! Tongue slides inside my mouth like bad worm bait.
1/23/2018 Brenda Chiri’s: A First Date Sonnet (Pure Fiction)

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Date: 3/11/2019 4:31:00 PM
A humorous, well written sonnet describing an inexperienced couple date. Congrats on your win.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/11/2019 5:15:00 PM
Thank you, Dennis!
Date: 2/14/2018 8:04:00 PM
I enjoyed reading this, Kim! So wonderfully descriptive of a bad date experience! Congratulations on your win! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 2/14/2018 7:55:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Kim, sorry for a bad date !.. Happy Valentine's Day Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 2/14/2018 2:00:00 PM
Congratulations again Kim. You've done brilliantly tonight ( might be day where you are lol) Regards Tom
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/14/2018 7:47:00 PM
Thank you, Tom! :)
Date: 2/14/2018 7:54:00 AM
Congratulations Kim. That last line yuck lol regards Tom
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/14/2018 8:05:00 AM
LOL, Tom! ;)
Date: 2/14/2018 6:41:00 AM
O Kim, that was indeed a very bad first, and last(?), date. Well done.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/14/2018 6:51:00 AM
Thanks, Line!
Date: 1/30/2018 8:59:00 PM
"Slides inside my mouth like a bad worm bait." LOL
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/30/2018 9:47:00 PM
Glad you enjoyed that...lol
Date: 1/24/2018 12:31:00 PM
This is hilarious! What an awful date!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/24/2018 4:12:00 PM
Glad you enjoyed, my friend!
Date: 1/24/2018 6:08:00 AM
That final couplet, yuk! Another without super piece of poetry! Hugs... Mick
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/24/2018 7:18:00 AM
LOL! Thanks, Mick!
Date: 1/23/2018 5:36:00 PM
ha ha ha Kim this is hilarious and that final couplet made me squirm and giggle at the same time lol:-) hugs jan xx
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/23/2018 5:39:00 PM
LOL...Jan! Thanks!

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