Unknown Destiny and Deep Diving

Teal quacking loudly.
Swam by Teak growing by lake.
Headed who knows where.
An electric eel,
becomes light to a dark world,
No matter how deep!
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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Brown Avatar
November 5, 2009 at 11:44 AM
Wonderful writing Marty it was a joy to read thank you. I wish you a fun filled inspiring day. Love, Carol
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November 5, 2009 at 9:52 AM
I like the play on words, here good one. enjoyed.
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November 4, 2009 at 6:30 PM
Nicely written choka, although I have to say it is more like two separate Haiku to me, one titled, "Unknown destiny" and the other "Deep Diving". Enjoyed. Thanks for sharing and thank you for your comment on my latest poems. Keep writing, Caroline.
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November 4, 2009 at 3:38 PM
Excellent Choka, Marty! Great imagery! Peace, Audrey
Fraser Avatar
November 4, 2009 at 3:13 PM
Kool duck the Teal Marty, i must write a poem on ducks, they are beautiful birds >> James
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November 4, 2009 at 2:58 PM
i need that electrical eel in my dark world..send it to Europe pls,Marty:)
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November 4, 2009 at 2:51 PM
Interesting trip here. Real or fantasy? Keep writing. Sara
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