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Under the Stars - the Compound Word Verse

Under the Stars

The cobalt sky has many eyes;
they're brightest just before sunrise
as starlight.

Sprinkled amidst the indigo
we stop to let the sandman sow
his stardust.

Glittering `cross the peaceful night
we view a shooting star take flight;
we're starstruck.

The sky becomes a starlit show
as sea reflects its silver glow,
so starbright.

In awe we kiss and say goodnight.
I watch as you walk from my sight,
soft . . . starlit.

3-14-19


This lovely form was invented by my talented friend Margaret R. Smith
http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/compound.html 

Copyright © Connie Marcum Wong | Year Posted 2015

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Edlynn Nau Date: 5/15/2016 3:47:00 PM Absolutely a Favorite and done with such skill. Loving the cadence in the rhyme and the snapshots in words are just beautiful. I adore all thing physics and astronmy. Have you other astronomical reads? Are you a Skywatcher? If you are, please suggest others of yours I should read! In my line try: ARCTURUS TREASUURE, NEW MOON RISING, and TOO CLOSE for COMFORT FOR STARTERS. This poem is a 7 indeed. Following you! Login to Reply Connie Marcum Wong Date: 5/15/2016 11:37:00 PM Contd. Here are several:Starbright, Sister World, Luna's Eclipse, Nature's Way (Constanza), The Heavens Are Open, Suddenly...so nice to have found a poetic kindred spirit Edlynn. Thank you so much for your kind words and the fave. I will check out your poems. Aloha, Connie ; ) Connie Marcum Wong Date: 5/15/2016 11:35:00 PM Yes, I love stargazing and trying to find the different constellations during different seasons. We have very clear skies here, unless the wind changes and we get the Kona wind coming from the south of us. We call the volcano smog, "Vog." I have several moon poems and others etc. Contd.

Kelly Deschler Date: 3/6/2015 8:57:00 PM Your poetic talent shines as brightly as the stars in this wonderful poem. Absolutely brilliant, Connie! This is a favorite for me! Login to Reply Connie Marcum Wong Date: 3/7/2015 1:33:00 AM Oh thank you so much Kelly. I really appreciate you fav'ing this one. Cheers, Connie

Cona Adams Date: 3/5/2015 7:39:00 AM Lovely poem, lovely photos. Thanks for a delightful read, Connie. An easy seven. Login to Reply Connie Marcum Wong Date: 3/5/2015 2:14:00 PM Oh thank you Cona. These are harder than they look to write. Cheers, Connie

Sara Kendrick Date: 2/28/2015 5:12:00 PM Enjoyed reading your work..It has an interesting quality to it..Thanks for stopping by..Sara Login to Reply Connie Marcum Wong Date: 3/5/2015 2:44:00 AM It is the last lines...I really like this form. It is more difficult to come up with the compound words than you can imagine Sara. Thanks a lot. Cheers, Connie

M. L. Kiser Date: 2/25/2015 4:04:00 PM A beautifully penned poem. Login to Reply Connie Marcum Wong Date: 3/5/2015 2:46:00 AM Thank you very much M.L. I appreciate your comment. Cheers, Connie

Andrea Dietrich Date: 2/23/2015 6:24:00 PM guess what, Connie, I did mine using word STar too but it's very different sounding from yours. I was inspired by the phrase "hush the stars" I am trying to get my current poem read better before posting more contest entries, of which I have three. How is YOUR muse treating you?? Login to Reply Andrea Dietrich Date: 2/25/2015 6:20:00 PM connie, I need to leave work now, but I told you I would kill two birds with one stone and I did it with that compound verse. What do you think If I do a contest on this form? do you think it would be a good idea? sorry about taxes. I need to do them too. Connie Marcum Wong Date: 2/23/2015 11:53:00 PM Right now my muse is taking a back seat to income taxes. It a time of year I dread. I look forward to reading your poem. I don't have time to join as many contests as you do. Even if I had the time, I need to feel inspired to write Andrea. I have to go check ot your blog now.

Andrea Dietrich Date: 2/21/2015 9:31:00 PM I don't know if I will be able to use this form or not but I am wanting to use it for one of the contests. Hopefully tomorrow I will see if it works or not!! Login to Reply

Harry Horsman Date: 2/21/2015 10:38:00 AM Oh so poetic and beautiful... Login to Reply Connie Marcum Wong Date: 2/21/2015 6:48:00 PM Thank you very much Harry. I was just going to check out to see if you had some new poems posted and then I saw your post on this poem. I hope you are well my friend. Cheers, Connie

Daver Austin Date: 2/21/2015 10:22:00 AM The pictures are fabulous, also the poem which enhances them like words to music. Love, daver Login to Reply Connie Marcum Wong Date: 2/21/2015 6:47:00 PM What a lovely comment Daver. Thank you very much. I love star gazing. Love, Connie

Carolyn Devonshire Date: 2/21/2015 8:41:00 AM Dear Connie, What a lovely poem! I like the way you had a "star" word in each verse's last line. I'm not familiar with the contest, but I know what I like to read. This is terrific, dear. I hope your husband is doing alright. I struggle through good days and bad ones. Hope you had a happy Valentine's Day too! Love, Carolyn Login to Reply

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty Date: 2/20/2015 8:07:00 AM work of finest quality Connie...Love Login to Reply Connie Marcum Wong Date: 2/20/2015 10:47:00 AM Thank you very much Rajat. I appreciate your lovely comment. Blessings, Connie

Andrea Dietrich Date: 2/19/2015 9:22:00 PM I sure remember that poetess, Connie. The whole clan is SO talented. I really love how you did her form. it's beautiful. Login to Reply Connie Marcum Wong Date: 2/20/2015 10:46:00 AM Thanks a lot Andrea. It is a challlenge to find enough compound words for all the stanzas. Hugs, Connie

Justin Bordner Date: 2/19/2015 8:59:00 PM To love in starlight, and kiss within the hushing night...oh that's a sight, two hearts in flight...the way you express wonder for evening love amidst the burning jewels of night is very lovely Connie...J.A.B. Login to Reply Connie Marcum Wong Date: 2/20/2015 10:44:00 AM Your comment is beautifully poetic Justin. Thank you very much. I appreciate it. Hugs, Connie

Kp Nunez Date: 2/19/2015 6:09:00 PM Belatedly read this beautiful poem. A 7 for your compound word verse. Smiles from the land of glorious sunshine. :D Kim Login to Reply Connie Marcum Wong Date: 2/20/2015 4:17:00 AM How kind of you Kim. Very nice to meet you. Thank you very much. Aloha, Connie

Emile Pinet Date: 2/19/2015 10:34:00 AM Your words drift onto the page and the reader feels a compulsion to relax and enjoy the sensation. Emile. #7 Login to Reply Connie Marcum Wong Date: 2/20/2015 4:15:00 AM I feel honored by your sweet comment Emile. Thank you very much. Cheers, Connie

Tim Ryerson Date: 2/19/2015 10:31:00 AM I'm 'starstruck' by this verse my friend! 'The cobalt sky has many eyes'...WOW, what a line. Gonna copy/paste and study this form. You have honored it with grace and elegance as is your usual - Tim Login to Reply Connie Marcum Wong Date: 2/20/2015 4:14:00 AM Thank you very much Tim. The link you provided didn't work. Are you speaking of Blue Velvet? That was one ofhis popular songs. This form is challenging but wonderful. Glad you liked it. I appreciate your lovely comment. Hugs, Connie Tim Ryerson Date: 2/19/2015 10:45:00 AM As per my comment on your first line, you may or may not remember this song by Bobby Vee... https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ssCLB6Y8zjA

Demetrios Trifiatis Date: 2/18/2015 1:29:00 AM A phantasmagoria of verses depicting natural and inner beauty, dear Connie! Login to Reply Connie Marcum Wong Date: 2/19/2015 4:37:00 AM What a lovely comment Demetrios. Thank you very much. I am very fond of the form. Blessings, Connie

Debra Squyres Date: 2/16/2015 3:55:00 PM Remembering nights under the stars with that man of mine... this is beautiful and I love the form. Login to Reply Connie Marcum Wong Date: 2/19/2015 4:35:00 AM Thank you much Debra. This is a real pretty form. Margaret and her sister Jan, and their mother Emily have all created some wonderful poetry forms. They are talented poets too. Cheers, Connie

Shane Cooper Date: 2/16/2015 2:55:00 PM Back again. Sorry i forgot to tick the rating box. Login to Reply

Shane Cooper Date: 2/16/2015 2:54:00 PM Hi connie, the poem is beautifully penned and flows so peacefully so softly from start to finish. I am an admirer of the night sky, so much beauty shrouded in darkness. A 7 from me and a favourite. Take care love Shane xxx Login to Reply Connie Marcum Wong Date: 2/19/2015 4:31:00 AM Oh thank you very much Shane. I really appreciate it when someone likes a poem of mine enough to make it a favorite. Thank you for your wonderful comments on it too. Blessings, Connie

Monterey Sirak Date: 2/16/2015 9:07:00 AM I have never seen this form before. It is great and your version is beautiful. Login to Reply Connie Marcum Wong Date: 2/19/2015 4:28:00 AM Thank you very much Monterey. The most difficult part is finding enough compound words to complete the required five stanzas. Hugs, Connie

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders Date: 2/15/2015 6:44:00 PM A beautiful write, Connie, and I love the form...maybe I'll try one. Thanks for sharing...hugs, Rhonda Login to Reply Connie Marcum Wong Date: 2/19/2015 4:24:00 AM Wow, you have to write one. It is a challenge but worth it. Thanks for your lovely comment. Hugs, Connie Rhonda Johnson-Saunders Date: 2/15/2015 6:45:00 PM I should definitely try one. My grandma's name was Margaret Smith. :)

Richard Lamoureux Date: 2/14/2015 8:49:00 PM To you as well Connie. Excellent poem to get us all in the spirit! Login to Reply Connie Marcum Wong Date: 2/19/2015 4:06:00 AM Thank you Richard. Hugs, Connie

John Fleming Date: 2/14/2015 5:49:00 PM A very beautifully constructed poem. Not easy to do what you have done here. It looks simplicity itself, however, it is anything but! You have obviously put a deal of thought into it. Very good, Connie! :-) john. Login to Reply Connie Marcum Wong Date: 2/18/2015 4:16:00 PM You are correct John. Finding enough compound words is a challenge. I love the form though. Thank you for your nice comment. It is much appreciated. Cheers, Connie

Paul Callus Date: 2/14/2015 5:06:00 PM I love this form which you have used for this lovely and romantic poem, Connie. If I am not mistaken there was something similar in Nette's contest not very long ago. #7 Hope you've enjoyed your day with your Valentine!:) // paul Login to Reply Connie Marcum Wong Date: 2/15/2015 7:38:00 PM Thank you Paul. I will look it up. I hate when that happens. I like this form too. Cheers, Connie Paul Callus Date: 2/14/2015 5:10:00 PM Oh...just remembered...my entry was "Wind-Kissed"; it did not place because it disappeared from the entry list!! // paul

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