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Poetic Form: Rhyme

Inspired: 2023 December 09

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"We are the wandering wonders forever readying ourselves until our next show and we will be even more spectacular than any of our previous performances where we shall not only marvel at ourselves, but we shall dazzle you our world audience with our refreshing and mesmerizing brand new us." ... by Poet “we woke up early one morn, ego shorn it felt as though we were in form nodes within stirred, boundaries blurred our head and heart, with love, concurred” Do I anticipate, be I forethought, plan, cautious, store-bought, or am I free thought, or should I turn and be an afterthought? Flipflop, reverse or have a second thought. Mayhaps I be the one in the mirror, behind the glass or in front, be clearer. Tell me true, tell me blue, or who's nearer. Where does consciousness stand; bring your shearer. Former victims serving others in need. Lost times we wonder who does a good deed, deep in prayer, our sins washed, we succeed. Reclaim, recover, get back, now we're freed. When we crossed the lines, didn't think it would count, after all, 'tis a concocted account. No rhyme or reason, or scheme to surmount. Pique cross fallacy or clarity fount. Reincarnation, its majority tether nature's beast and humanity. Genesis claims Eden and Ark, singly. Man and beast aren't one, Christianity. Pews be filled, constant prayers forgiving. Pews be emptied, constant those be sinning. Our measured worth is primed for exampling. Pews new souls earn Heaven's Gate opening. Our eyes were opened, filled with empathy. And see what's meant to be, and not to be. We're led astray, but here we stay, Glory! We had learned all about Jesus's story. They'll be messengers, one true, and one naught. They'll be harvesters, most rot, others fought. They'll be winged handlers, who'll descend when caught. They'll be winged handlers, who'll ascend those brought.

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Date: 12/11/2023 5:18:00 AM
What a quote the poem is amazing!!
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Hilo Poet
Date: 12/11/2023 5:40:00 AM
Thank you, Harsha, I appreciate it. Aloha, William
Date: 12/9/2023 2:27:00 PM
William, I derived profound wisdom from your initial quotation. It served as an excellent prelude to your composition, which was profoundly mystical, and stimulating, that made me speechless and astounded. With just a few beautifully artful words, you evoked thoughts regarding rebirth, awareness personality, and the nature of spirituality. Kudos my friend
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Hilo Poet
Date: 12/11/2023 5:39:00 AM
I was literally guided by this one. Answers was spilling all around and I just typed come what may--easy. It's as if 'twas already experienced. Aloha, William
Date: 12/9/2023 10:53:00 AM
What a profound write this is dear hilo. I really love your quote and so true and so wise how you’ve highlighted so much with exquisite rhymes in an eloquent flow. I especially loved the lines “ Former victims serving others in need. Lost times we wonder who does a good deed,“ that hit home for me. So deep and i think many can resonate. You’ve done an excellent job on this theme. Im sure this will score high. Goodluck
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Hilo Poet
Date: 12/9/2023 11:06:00 AM
Appreciate it, Ink Empress. A bit of a fly-by quote that just spilt in the shortest period, guessing the ease was possibly generated through probable experience. Thanks again, for those highlights and encouraging words. Aloha, William
Date: 12/9/2023 7:10:00 AM
You followed on from the prompts so well.. nice belly middle to your poem lol.. dont know if that was planned... you have this remarkable way with words that connect to the reader.. this one looks like a winner to me dear Hilo...
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Date: 12/9/2023 7:47:00 AM
Lol, the unwavering, Silent One. Well, I did before, Ok, I'll take it, thanks, Mr. Optimistastic. 'Twas unplanned, in my write and me--thanksgiving leftovers trailed a bit. You're a Blessed One, I appreciate your defining terms. Aloha, William
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