Paul Callus Poet Tetractys

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Unchained Melody

A gentle murmur from receding waves
the tender sound
of your voice
rippling 
words.
Sand
trickles
through my toes
as time goes by
I think of you and hunger for your touch.


*Words in italics from "Unchained Melody"
as sung by The Righteous Brothers
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Contest: Double Tetractys 2
Sponsor: Eve Roper
        Placed 2nd
© 5th September 2020

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Jack Horne January 2, 2021 at 7:12 AM really love this clever write, my friend. Wishing you a great 2021 Paul Callus January 2, 2021 at 1:11 PM Thank you, Jack. I hope that the joy and blessings of Christmas will be with you all through 2021. Regards // paul

Sara Kendrick November 14, 2020 at 2:16 PM Wow!! I like this one. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara Paul Callus November 15, 2020 at 11:00 AM My pleasure to read your poems and to have you visit, Sara:) Take care & regards // paul

Anisha Dutta October 2, 2020 at 9:38 AM Congrats to your TOP win. I am charmed. Regards. Paul Callus October 3, 2020 at 8:11 AM Thank you, Anisha! Hope you have a lovely weekend. Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich September 27, 2020 at 9:57 AM Hey, I am just now seeing you either wrote this or placed with it on my bday. . A big belated congrats to you! Paul Callus September 27, 2020 at 12:39 PM Thank you for revisiting with congrats, Andrea. The poem was written and posted on your birthday ~ 5th Sept:) Regards // paul

Susan Ashley September 19, 2020 at 7:25 PM Dear Paul, the depth of emotion your talented pen conveys with so few words never fails to amaze me. The last line is a stroke of genius and packs a poignant punch! Love Unchained Melody.. I was just listening to version of it the other day by Patti LaBelle and the Bluebelles recorded in 1966 - a beautiful rendition! Warmest wishes and hugs always, my wonderful friend.. ~Susan Susan Ashley September 22, 2020 at 4:08 PM You’re so very clever, Paul, as it occurs to me that this could be a sensual personification of the sands longing for the tides return.. (a topic I’ve written about recently but I’ve not yet posted the poem..) You are ever enchanting, my friend!! Congratulations on your wonderful! :)) Paul Callus September 22, 2020 at 2:44 PM Thank you Susan; it's always a pleasure reading your lovely comments. I have no doubt that Unchained Melody appeals to you and your romantic soul, my friend. ~ Warm regards & hugs // paul

Nette Onclaud September 18, 2020 at 3:18 PM poignant in every way...beautifully rendered, paul, and fine congrats on your high placement...huggs Paul Callus September 22, 2020 at 2:15 PM Thank you on all counts, Nette. Hope you're keeping well. Hugs // paul

Jeanne Mcgee September 18, 2020 at 9:37 AM Well done! This is so tender and full of yearning. Congrats. Paul Callus September 18, 2020 at 12:14 PM Thank you, Jeanne. I loved your winning entry, too. Regards // paul

Eve Roper September 17, 2020 at 7:07 PM Lovely write,Paul .. Congrats on your wonderful win :) <3 Hugs Eve.. Paul Callus September 18, 2020 at 1:31 AM Thank you, Eve:) It was my pleasure taking part. Hugs // paul

Michael Tor September 10, 2020 at 6:33 PM Paul heartfelt song, a wonderful choice to enrich this longing for that special love... Your words bring surreal feelings and emotion to the reader... Paul Callus September 16, 2020 at 6:41 AM Your insightful feedback is much appreciated, Michael...thank you & regards // paul

Lindsay Laurie September 9, 2020 at 9:24 PM Hello Paul … the waiting appears to be never ending - thank you Paul - Lindsay Paul Callus September 16, 2020 at 6:40 AM Thank you, Lindsay. The waiting game makes up a big percentage of our life! Regards // paul

Panagiota Romios September 9, 2020 at 7:01 PM Fabulous poem and love your choice of song ..Paul. Best wishes, Panagiota xx Paul Callus September 16, 2020 at 6:38 AM Thank you on both counts, Pangie. Hope you're keeping well, my friend. Regards // paul

Jennifer Proxenos September 8, 2020 at 11:22 AM Unchained Melody brings back memories - a sad film but so beautifully portrayed - Dimi Moore was superb in her acting and you have paid great tribute to this song by the Righteous Brothers - your poem is the cherry on the top -Sand tickles through my toes - love love this Tetractys - best of luck i the contest my friend. Warm regards and hugs, Jenny. Paul Callus September 9, 2020 at 3:04 PM Thank you for the pleasant feedback, Jenny. You might find this video of interest https://youtu.be/JWOiTEpnxac?t=239 Warm regards & Hugs // paul

Carolyn Devonshire September 8, 2020 at 9:28 AM What a lovely tetractys, Paul! Thank you for sharing this day at the beach and best wishes in Eve's contest. "Unchained Melody" was used in the movie "Ghost," and it was the most romantic scene I can remember in any movie. Hugs, Carolyn Paul Callus September 9, 2020 at 1:52 PM Thank you for sharing your comments and thoughts, Carolyn. I never saw "Ghost", so missed the romantic scene! Hugs // paul

Paula Goldsmith September 7, 2020 at 1:28 PM A great song pick for your poem. Love your write. Sure wish I was at the beach with feet in the sand and hearing your song. Enjoy your day................ Paul Callus September 9, 2020 at 12:12 AM Thank you, Paula. Soon I'll be off to the beach (luckily I live very close to it) and I already prepared a packed lunch:) Regards // paul

Judy Ball September 7, 2020 at 11:47 AM Beautifully worded Paul. Love the pic. God Bless, JB Paul Callus September 9, 2020 at 12:00 AM Glad you enjoyed, Judy. Have a lovely day! Blessings // paul

Andrea Dietrich September 6, 2020 at 3:28 PM wow, you took it so romantic. I just focused on the sand and the feet. heehee (not posted yet) LOVE this. Paul Callus September 8, 2020 at 11:59 PM Thank you, Andrea. Looking forward to read your entry! Regards // paul

Silent One September 6, 2020 at 1:53 PM This is brilliant and clever use of song title. Paul Callus September 8, 2020 at 11:55 PM Thank you, S-1. Best regards // paul

Gershon Wolf September 6, 2020 at 11:50 AM Ooh. 'hunger for your touch' -- That was my favorite song at the time. Take me back, Paul! Thanks, Gershon Paul Callus September 8, 2020 at 11:55 PM That was definitely a golden age, Gershon! Somehow I keep retracing my footsteps! Thank you for stopping by. Regards // paul

Ilene Bauer September 5, 2020 at 1:40 PM beautifully written, paul! best of luck in the contest... Paul Callus September 5, 2020 at 4:01 PM Glad you like it, Ilene; thank you. Regards // paul

Nette Onclaud September 5, 2020 at 12:31 PM sheer poetic display of summer wonders, paul... huggs Paul Callus September 5, 2020 at 4:02 PM Thank you, Nette. So pleased to see you back in action:) Hugs // paul

Sharon Keely September 5, 2020 at 11:42 AM You've beautifully captured the lovely memories that beaches hold - thank you! Paul Callus September 5, 2020 at 4:07 PM Thank you Sharon. Pleased to gave you visiting. Regards // paul

Sam Kauffman September 5, 2020 at 10:20 AM Oh, Paul, your title and final words brought me right into the spirit of the Righteous Brothers song - one of my very favorites. I can just feel the sand "trickling" through my toes. Tender longing beautifully expressed! Best of luck in the contest!

Anne-Lise Andresen September 5, 2020 at 9:12 AM - Oh ... love the last line of this beautiful poem, Paul :) - Best wishes in the contest:) - Have a wonderful weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison September 5, 2020 at 7:14 AM OH Paul this is a fabulous interpretation of the image and i love the song that inspired you:-) hugs Jan xx Paul Callus September 5, 2020 at 7:25 AM Thank you, Jan. To be honest the title and song came to mind exactly when I came to the final line; couldn't resist inserting that phrase! Hugs // paul

Arturo Michael September 5, 2020 at 7:13 AM Sweet memories...Nice one Paul Callus September 5, 2020 at 7:18 AM Thank you for stopping by, Arturo. I guess the song gives away my age:) (or just about...) Regards // paul

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