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Closing the lamp as another year shuts off
I am between solitude and scream --
when dusk’s music aches like a groan
as brother's demise wraps veiled nights
in a requiem knighted by heaven.

It is so… I mean,

How unbearable the rake of longing
while the agony from riding this carriage
stalls to meet the unknown...
a finality abrupt, robbed by the coma
of time when  his laughter suddenly breaks:

I offer my tears to a dimming moon
and hum myself to sleep.

Pre-written   3/2/2019
Applicable Not Applicable Contest
Sponsor: Richard Lamoureux  Re-post 5/17/2019
This poem expresses something terribly real
without being mundane. The subtlety of its tone
dramatizes the pain of death, hence, the reader 
totally connects with the artist's deep emotions
in a gentle yet aching way.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019

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Date: 3/29/2019 8:37:00 PM
Hello Nette, Wonderful!I found myself drawn in to this poem as i read it. have a nice evening my friend.
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Date: 3/28/2019 6:04:00 PM
Wow!!! to mine faves as Reuben would say! which line my fave? Oh..."requiem knighted by heaven" fer sure! Splendiferous Nette!
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Date: 3/26/2019 11:18:00 AM
This is a special write Nette, one of your best I think.
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Date: 3/5/2019 5:21:00 AM
Wow, this is quite stunning, Nette! A FAV...
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Date: 3/5/2019 4:43:00 AM
This one is shouting "winner's circle" no matter what contest you choose to enter, Nette. Makes me want to cry, and I am not a crier.
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Date: 3/5/2019 1:05:00 AM
Beautiful Nette. Your poem just... aches.
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Date: 3/3/2019 7:13:00 PM
Beautifully penned Nette. I always enjoy your inspiring poetry my friend. Best for a win! : ) xxoo
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Date: 3/3/2019 2:55:00 PM
Loved the poem and hope you hummed yourself to sleep and forget the sadness of life. Hugs.
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Date: 3/3/2019 1:47:00 PM
Your poetry oft rivals that of the golden age poets! This is a true gem and if not, then none have ever existed.. A fav... awe inspiring verse...
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Date: 3/3/2019 8:12:00 AM
Sad longing, well defined, Nette:)
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Date: 3/3/2019 7:29:00 AM
Melancholy write..apt for the theme..well delivered, as always.
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Date: 3/3/2019 5:14:00 AM
"That certain sadness" brilliantly written! Death is a life-changing moment for us.
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Date: 3/3/2019 1:25:00 AM
An excellent piece, start to end, as always... but the last two lines are so beautifully delivered.
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Date: 3/2/2019 10:23:00 PM
As is always the case, this is marvellous, but this one reaches another level of 'sublime'. 'Closing the lamp as another year shuts off' -- what inventive use of language! And it reaches down into the feelings and makes us KNOW something, something terrible, something unbearable. O! Bravo!
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Date: 3/2/2019 5:56:00 PM
touched by the inner solitude of this poem where sadness is a burden to be carried alone
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