Get Your Premium Membership

UNBEARABLE THIS LONGING





Closing the lamp as another year shuts off
I am between solitude and scream --
when dusk’s music aches like a groan
as brother's demise wraps veiled nights
in a requiem knighted by heaven.


It is so… I mean,

How unbearable the rake of longing
while the agony from riding this carriage
stalls to meet the unknown...
a finality abrupt, robbed by the coma
of time when  his laughter suddenly breaks:

I offer my tears to a dimming moon
and hum myself to sleep.




Pre-written   3/2/2019
Applicable Not Applicable Contest
Sponsor: Richard Lamoureux  Re-post 5/17/2019
-----------------
This poem expresses something terribly real
without being mundane. The subtlety of its tone
dramatizes the pain of death, hence, the reader 
totally connects with the artist's deep emotions
in a gentle yet aching way.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019




Post Comments
Please Login to post a comment
Date: 3/29/2019 8:37:00 PM
Hello Nette, Wonderful!I found myself drawn in to this poem as i read it. have a nice evening my friend.
Login to Reply
Date: 3/28/2019 6:04:00 PM
Wow!!! to mine faves as Reuben would say! which line my fave? Oh..."requiem knighted by heaven" fer sure! Splendiferous Nette!
Login to Reply
Date: 3/26/2019 11:18:00 AM
This is a special write Nette, one of your best I think.
Login to Reply
Date: 3/5/2019 5:21:00 AM
Wow, this is quite stunning, Nette! A FAV...
Login to Reply
Date: 3/5/2019 4:43:00 AM
This one is shouting "winner's circle" no matter what contest you choose to enter, Nette. Makes me want to cry, and I am not a crier.
Login to Reply
Date: 3/5/2019 1:05:00 AM
Beautiful Nette. Your poem just... aches.
Login to Reply
Date: 3/3/2019 7:13:00 PM
Beautifully penned Nette. I always enjoy your inspiring poetry my friend. Best for a win! : ) xxoo
Login to Reply
Date: 3/3/2019 2:55:00 PM
Loved the poem and hope you hummed yourself to sleep and forget the sadness of life. Hugs.
Login to Reply
Date: 3/3/2019 1:47:00 PM
Your poetry oft rivals that of the golden age poets! This is a true gem and if not, then none have ever existed.. A fav... awe inspiring verse...
Login to Reply
Date: 3/3/2019 8:12:00 AM
Sad longing, well defined, Nette:)
Login to Reply
Date: 3/3/2019 7:29:00 AM
Melancholy write..apt for the theme..well delivered, as always.
Login to Reply
Date: 3/3/2019 5:14:00 AM
"That certain sadness" brilliantly written! Death is a life-changing moment for us.
Login to Reply
Date: 3/3/2019 1:25:00 AM
An excellent piece, start to end, as always... but the last two lines are so beautifully delivered.
Login to Reply
Date: 3/2/2019 10:23:00 PM
As is always the case, this is marvellous, but this one reaches another level of 'sublime'. 'Closing the lamp as another year shuts off' -- what inventive use of language! And it reaches down into the feelings and makes us KNOW something, something terrible, something unbearable. O! Bravo!
Login to Reply
Date: 3/2/2019 5:56:00 PM
touched by the inner solitude of this poem where sadness is a burden to be carried alone
Login to Reply