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Unbearable Thirst

At sunrise newlyweds wandered from camp hiking into unfamiliar terrain. And now they have to spend the night in the desert despite their unbearable thirst. The sweltering heat of the day lingers as the sun sets just behind the mountains. And darkness merges with inky shadows pooling deep within the cooler crevices. They dosed off to the mumbled whisperings of windblown sands rippling across the dunes. And though their canteen was nearly empty there had to be water somewhere out there. Her husband asleep she filled his canteen and took the empty one to find water. And although she swore no tears, they still came not for her but for the man left behind. Wakened by the searing kiss of the sun he realized the selfless thing she’d done. And though he looked for her she was long gone so he followed her tenuous footsteps. He found her collapsed, exhausted and near death and they shared the few drops of water left. Yet in the midst of death's dusty embrace angels in helicopters rescued them.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 5/26/2018 9:03:00 PM
A honeymoon never to be forgotten, Emile.
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Date: 5/27/2018 7:35:00 AM
Thanks Line, I appreciate your support my friend, Emile.
Date: 4/5/2015 12:31:00 AM
Emile, congrats for this fine win. Mohan
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Emile Pinet
Date: 4/5/2015 9:36:00 AM
Thanks Mohan, I appreciate it. Emile.
Date: 4/4/2015 4:14:00 PM
Such a tragic but well-written poem of love, Emile. My heart-felt congratulations to your for your nice win! Sandra
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Date: 4/4/2015 4:33:00 PM
Thanks Sandra, I appreciate your support. Emile.
Date: 4/4/2015 2:47:00 PM
Congrats on the win Emile, well done.
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Emile Pinet
Date: 4/4/2015 3:41:00 PM
Thanks John, I appreciate the support. Emile.
Date: 4/4/2015 2:27:00 PM
Emile, strong tragedy portrayed in this poem, good use of strong details. Congratulations on your placement. Thanks for entering this very popular contest, we had very many wonderful contributions. Read more at: http://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/out_of_water_bataan_641273 Read more at: http://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/out_of_water_642576
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Emile Pinet
Date: 4/4/2015 3:40:00 PM
Thanks so much Sheri, I appreciate the opportunity to participate in you contest. Emile.
Date: 2/17/2015 11:43:00 PM
wow,this is really great writing. If it is for Out of Water contest, i think it should get one of the highest ratings! a fave.
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Emile Pinet
Date: 2/18/2015 8:13:00 AM
Thanks Andrea, it was written for that contest. I appreciate your input. Emile.
Date: 2/17/2015 9:29:00 PM
Excellent, Emile! Such a tragic love story...reminds of a modern Romeo and Juliet...Is this for the Out of Water contest? If not, you could enter it...your story fits the theme well...hugs, Rhonda
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Emile Pinet
Date: 2/18/2015 8:14:00 AM
Thanks Rhonda, it was written for that contest. I appreciate your input and support. Emile.
Date: 2/17/2015 5:24:00 PM
Beautiful pen Emile! Well deserving tribute to true love, very powerful and dramatic ending, my dear friend. Continue writing and sharing! A 7 + from me! I enjoyed your piece! I wish you a very lovely day! In his light! God bless you!:) Love n' hugs! xxx D"
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Emile Pinet
Date: 2/17/2015 8:48:00 PM
Thanks Dorian, I'm always happy to see you read my poems. Emile.
Date: 2/17/2015 11:36:00 AM
What a beautiful tribute to true love, Emile...This is beautiful...very beautiful, indeed.
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Emile Pinet
Date: 2/17/2015 2:21:00 PM
Thanks Eileen, I appreciate your warm words of encouragement. Emile.
Date: 2/17/2015 10:53:00 AM
A great love story with sad end...truly, love is the ocean of water. Great write Emile...
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Emile Pinet
Date: 2/17/2015 2:22:00 PM
Than you Rajat, I appreciate your input. Emile.
Date: 2/17/2015 10:31:00 AM
such a sorry romantic write Emile.. a great love story with a sad fate... nice pen, nad!
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Emile Pinet
Date: 2/17/2015 2:23:00 PM
Thanks Poesy, your friendly words have warmed my heart. Emile.

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