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Unbearable Beauty In White

Feather-like snowflakes were gently falling 
They glistened like diamonds sparkling under my feet
I walked slowly on my crutches and crept into the church 
Sweet scented gardenias perfumed the air
I drank in their fragrance as I made my way to the empty seat at the back

The organist started to play and there you stood silhouetted in the doorway
Two tiny bridesmaids held the train of your white fur lined cape
Which covered your figure hugging lace bridal gown

Everyone gasped as you walked down the aisle
I had never ever seen you looking more beautiful
Our eyes met and for a second you hesitated …
Then you walked past me and stood next to my ex best friend
Seeing you at the front of the church was like a dagger ripping out my heart
I couldn’t bear to look at you for a minute longer

You’d been the love of my life…
He’d promised he’d take care of you when I had to serve in Afghanistan…
I’d got injured and spent months in hospital and suffered from amnesia
When I finally came home I was a changed man… and he'd filled my shoes
I turned and limped away knowing I'd lost absolutely everything

Unbearable beauty in White Contest
Sponsored by Frank Herrera

11~07~16

Copyright © Jan Allison | Year Posted 2016

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Sunita U.D Palawon Date: 1/21/2017 4:54:00 AM Its so painful going through the lines...unfortunately very often a third person is hurt when love chooses to sing for two lovebirds...alas! Well penned. Congrats. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/21/2017 7:10:00 AM oh so true Sunita:-( thanks for the lovely comment:-) hugs Jan xx

Claudia Polydoro Date: 1/20/2017 7:09:00 PM Oh my... such a heartbreak in an amazingly beautiful poem, Jan!!!! Congrats on the win - I loved it! <3 :* Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/20/2017 7:12:00 PM Thanks Claudia I am so glad I was able to showcase this poem again I'm more known for my humour so its lovely for one of my more serious poems to get re read:-) hugs jan xx

Joseph May Date: 1/20/2017 2:12:00 PM Congrats on a fine win Jan...a very moving piece Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/20/2017 2:15:00 PM Thanks Joseph this was the perfect time for it to get a second chance of being read and I'm delighted it placed in LuLoo's contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Beautiful Scars Date: 1/20/2017 12:14:00 PM wow did this touch my heart lovely Jan! Once again, a beautiful poem from a lovely lady :) congrats and thank you :)-luloo Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/20/2017 12:35:00 PM Thanks so much LuLoo the poem got an n/a in the original contest so I'm delighted it placed in your love contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Charmaine Chircop Date: 11/8/2016 1:30:00 PM Heartwrenchingly beautiful...A favourite. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 11/8/2016 2:10:00 PM Thanks Charma:-) It didn't place in the contest but I'm so pleased I wrote it the comments have been wonderful:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 11/8/2016 3:22:00 AM - Jan, this is beautiful ... but, you made me shed tears an early beautiful and cold morning - Many emotions in this write - It's a winning poem ... I'm sure - Best wishes for a beautiful day :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 11/8/2016 6:21:00 AM Thanks Anne Lise - it is getting cold here so I thought of the white of winter and the rest of the poem followed :-) hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel Date: 11/8/2016 2:35:00 AM Oh my, this is indeed unbearable suffering, Jan, this is a winner for me:) a 10:) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 11/8/2016 3:02:00 AM Thanks so much Jo:-) hugs Jan xx

Darren White Date: 11/8/2016 2:13:00 AM THAT is beautiful Jan, your muse did a great job :) Login to Reply Claudia Polydoro Date: 1/20/2017 7:08:00 PM hehehehe I love your wedding poem - ;) :D Darren White Date: 11/8/2016 3:09:00 AM They agreed to being bridesmaids, I can't imagine them objecting ;) Jan Allison Date: 11/8/2016 3:03:00 AM No LOL I'm just worried what my hubby and your boyfriend will say lol:-) hugs jan xx Darren White Date: 11/8/2016 2:42:00 AM YES Jan, are you ashamed of me???? LOLOLOL Hugs, Darren. Jan Allison Date: 11/8/2016 2:15:00 AM :-):-) glad you liked it Darren:-) I need to post our wedding poem lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Judy Ball Date: 11/8/2016 1:18:00 AM Oh what a touching piece this is. It really brought a lump to my throat and a tear to my eye. Beautifully written and well expressed. Love the pic. A winner for sure. God Bless and a 777 from me. JB Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 11/8/2016 1:57:00 AM Thanks so much Judy it took quite a while to get the ending right but I am pleased with the overall poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Heidi Sands Date: 11/7/2016 5:55:00 PM Wow Jan...this is a WINNER. a 7. Just so beautiful and yet deeply heartbreaking! This really hit me hard and made me feel it. Good luck in the contest. Very well done.!! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 11/7/2016 5:57:00 PM Thanks Heidi:-) I don't know if it is what Frank is after I just go with the flow of my muse:-) hugs jan xx

Chris Green Date: 11/7/2016 5:18:00 PM Wow, that just broke my heart. Talk about totally and completely empty inside. Jan, your poem started off with such beauty, it was incredibly enchanting. I did not expect this ending and though it was extremely sad, it was written just as beautifully as the first parts. Good luck in the contest. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 11/7/2016 5:21:00 PM Thanks Chris for the lovely comment:-) we are coming up to Remembrance Day here in the UK and I guess it is pretty much on my mind at the moment:-( hugs Jan xx