Andrea Dietrich Poet Tanka

Two-Voice Tanka, Thrice

bathed in such splendor
in front of us blue water -
verdancy behind
how very cold it is though
like ice, it cuts to the bone
 
this frigid beauty
I let my eyes feast on it
ignoring the cold
the scent of pine is wafting
I breathe in tranquility
 
breathing in fragrance
I let the iciness go
my love shall warm me
the fresh trees and ocean air
can’t compare to his sweet warmth

July 14, 2017 for the Contest of John Anderson

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Dean Wood July 30, 2017 at 5:37 PM This is truly beautiful Andrea. I was hoping for someone to show me how it is done. This got the job done well. - Dean

Susan Ashley July 30, 2017 at 7:50 AM Hi Andrea, beautiful introspection poetically said. Congratlations! :)

Connie Marcum Wong July 29, 2017 at 3:44 PM Congratulations on your wonderful second placement in this contest Andrea. I love your entry. ; )

Sara Kendrick July 29, 2017 at 12:09 PM Good work..Way to go with this winner..Thanks for dropping by..Sara

Kim Rodrigues July 28, 2017 at 8:04 PM Back for congrats!

Connie Marcum Wong July 25, 2017 at 3:25 AM Sun or lover who warms you Andrea? I am not sure? I enjoyed the superb imagery throughout! : ) Connie Marcum Wong July 29, 2017 at 3:43 PM Okay...that makes sense. I see it won big, so congrats on your second placement! Andrea Dietrich July 25, 2017 at 5:47 PM connie, it's a lover. At first, I had the final two lines as a separate person conversing with the other, but then I reread the rules of this contest and realized he wanted all the lines to come from the SAME person, so this person is kind of talking back and forth to herself (about the man she is with)

Jennifer Walker July 23, 2017 at 8:11 PM As always your imagery is superb.

Afzal Nusker July 21, 2017 at 10:54 PM Spectacular!!!

Winged Warrior July 19, 2017 at 10:52 PM Beautifully said, my friend...as only you can say it...best of nothing...you don't need luck lol...^WW^

Tim Smith July 19, 2017 at 5:06 PM this is so different but is so good...love it Andrea

Kudzai Mhangwa July 19, 2017 at 8:00 AM Well done Andrea. So skilfully and beautifully crafted!

Supraja Kannan July 18, 2017 at 11:07 PM Beautifully written Andrea.... Lovely scene... Good luck with the contest...

Ralph Sergi July 18, 2017 at 5:15 PM I loved your tanka, especially the second stanza. Best of luck in the contest, Andrea.

Harry Horsman July 18, 2017 at 3:43 PM Such fineness Andrea, love your tankas good luck in contest, been reading a poetry book called 'Cheshire Chuckles' written by a wonderful poet.

Joanna Daniel July 18, 2017 at 6:07 AM Beautiful, Andrea:)

Matthew Anish July 17, 2017 at 8:38 PM You certainly are a romantic. I find the last two lines to be very sweet. I am in the middle of a troublesome relationship. It is hard to figure out women sometimes - but I guess you think the same about men. Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Paul Callus July 17, 2017 at 5:21 PM I admire the buildup of these three Tanka, Andrea. Frigidness has a beauty of its own, but nothing beats love's warmth! Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen July 17, 2017 at 5:23 AM - A wonderful poem, Andrea - Luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Ravi Sathasivam July 17, 2017 at 1:23 AM Excellent. Beautifully said. Best wishes for the contest.

Kim Rodrigues July 16, 2017 at 3:01 PM You had me at "the scent of pine is wafting, I breathe in tranquility" So lovely, dear!

Jack Horne July 16, 2017 at 9:05 AM lovely - sure to be a win, my friend x

Joseph May July 16, 2017 at 6:26 AM Beautiful write Andrea...best wishes in the contest

Eileen Manassian July 16, 2017 at 5:42 AM AWWWWWWW....as always, you write with such finesse, Andrea. You are just....amazing. I loved the feelings this evoked in me. Good luck in the contest...though luck has nothing to do with it! ;)