Andrea Dietrich Poet Rhyme

Two Dark Eyes

Two dark eyes are watching me,
keeping me in sight;
watching, ever watching me
mornings and at night.

Two dark eyes are following
every move I make
even with night swallowing
light before I wake.

Two dark eyes keep looking on,
and I’m sure to see
those two eyes when comes the dawn
peeking in on me.

Two dark eyes no matter where
in my house I go.
I don’t mind when those eyes stare,
for they let me know. . . . 

Unconditional is the
kind of love I see
in the two dark eyes of a
dog much loved by me!

For the Big Brother - who's watching you and why?
poetry contest of Black Eyed Susan

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James Inman May 30, 2021 at 10:07 AM I love the change as you gradually make it clear who owns those dark eyes. Very well written Andrea.

Richard D Seal April 22, 2013 at 7:08 PM When I saw the 'Two Dark Eyes', title I thought it was going to be a self portrait poem lol, I know only too well what you mean though, they is the best eyes. Thanks for dropping in on my addiction poem and the comment was greatly appreciated. Take care, Richard

Timothy Hicks March 23, 2013 at 9:45 AM Haha you really surprised me with that ending! And the whole time I thought someone was stocking you! My little dog follows me like a shadow as well (what's worst is that he's the blackest dog you will probably ever)... thanks for sharing this lovely poem. I love animal inspired pieces :)

Nette Onclaud July 11, 2012 at 12:20 PM thumbs up on your win, andie... nothing can compare to a doggie's love... can;t still comment on blogs .. read briefly you new contest.. will try my best!... argggh, missed you.. computer hanged for days!... :) hugggs!

David Williams July 11, 2012 at 2:00 AM Andrea congrats on your great win, I woofed it up..David

Gail Debole July 10, 2012 at 4:33 PM Congratulations on your win! Seemed scarey until the end, and then it turned into a very sweet poem. Loved the way the poem twisted my mind.

Carol Sunshine Brown July 10, 2012 at 12:30 PM Congratulations on your win in Susan's " Big Brother " contest Andrea. Love, Carol

Joyce Johnson July 9, 2012 at 7:47 PM Nothing more benign than a loved dog watching his master. Congratulations on a great post and win. Love, Joyce

Joseph May July 9, 2012 at 3:14 PM congrats on your win Andrea...is that your dog olly...

Lori Lucas Mcclure July 9, 2012 at 2:31 PM cogratulations on your second place win with this wonderful write! Lori

Kash Poet July 9, 2012 at 1:47 PM Congrats!!!!!!!!!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart July 9, 2012 at 12:56 PM congrats Andrea on a super second place with this awesome write on our animal delights and how they make us feel like big bro watching all the time.. such a cute entry luv.. still dealing with my concussion and not supposed to be on computer ..but.. need to catch up .. checking out your new contest too luv.. looks challenging..

Gwendolen Song July 9, 2012 at 12:05 PM Congrats on this winning rhyme, Andrea...u have a special dog that loves u unconditionally...my dog on the other hand, he drives me to the brink of insanity! What an interesting contest with a lot of diverse entries... :) gwendolen

Joann Grisetti July 9, 2012 at 11:23 AM Congratulations on your win. A great poem.

Phyllis Babcock July 8, 2012 at 11:46 AM Love dogs and this made me smile. Our dog used to lay on the floor by the bed and two dark eyes would watch me. Brought back nice memories. Lovely poem. love phyl

Cecilia Macfarlane July 7, 2012 at 4:53 PM A wonderful write Andrea.....best of luck in the contest. Hugs.

Jonas L. Rozario July 5, 2012 at 10:16 AM Great twist in the end Andrea!! Yeah dogs are cool...this poem reminds me of Dracula (remember my German Shepherd I told you about!) Enjoyed & best of luck in the contest. Soupmail sent to ya!!!

Michelle Mac Donald June 29, 2012 at 7:34 PM Love this write Andrea! In the beginning it sounded almost scary. I have a pair of those eyes here...they're closed now, asleep by my chair. Good luck in the contest!!

Daver Austin June 28, 2012 at 10:01 AM Great description of a great pooch - the eyes definitely have it. Luck in the contest. Love, daver

Caryl Muzzey June 24, 2012 at 4:15 PM Andrea, I should have known who you were talking about; I have those same eyes in my house. You have penned a wonderful verse, I enjoyed the read. Good luck in the contest but I already know it is a winner~ Caryl

Robert Johnson June 24, 2012 at 2:44 PM Roof!

Jack Horne June 24, 2012 at 11:14 AM LOL, you really got me there! I was sure it was something sinister - great twist

Vicky Tsiluma June 24, 2012 at 10:34 AM Hey Andrea ...ok, let me just ask ...How do you manage to rhyme so flawlessly?!!!

Keith Bickerstaffe June 24, 2012 at 10:08 AM Soup mail! :)

Gwendolen Song June 24, 2012 at 8:40 AM Andrea, Carolyn and I wrote it as she taught me how to write limericks earlier in my Soup days...glad you liked it...I have written a few poems for her that were about personal situations of hers that we giggled about back-n-forth. Did u write anything for the Medievel contest yet? I chose a topic yesterday and will have something out by tomorrow. What about you?...

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