Two Bros Find A Road

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Poetic Form: Dramatic Verse

Inspired: 2024 June 18

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Values persuade a parting of ways, hollow depths pivot the kindred root, a bored dreamer surfing pipeline waves, since bare feet days, mark the start of braves, soften hours held a moon ensue. A cast of walls rounds the befallen words find places amidst of said Grace Prayer Warrior answered the callin', birthright's first claim long ere withholdin'. A mother and her son -- last shared face. Found at World End, a gloaming drifter, a child of light that Heaven cuff hold, a mother's prayer, gifts not wish matter, words made simple, can spell disaster her gift transcends and lessens troubled. CONTRAST: Between Fulfillment and Emptiness There is a piece that is still awry, this kid bro writes to keep them alive ... Aloha my older brothers.

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Anisha Dutta

Date: 6/22/2024 9:01:00 PM

So touched of your deep feelings for the siblings. We are five siblings. Being the oldest I was ready to take care for my younger sisters whenever they needed. Each one leads independent life, but the bond is still strong. Have Good Days

Hilo Poet
Date: 6/22/2024 9:49:00 PM

Namaste, Anisha, you and I are blessed with a good-hearted spirit, although the baby I am to care for them and my parents--I wish they were here. Amen and Aloha my friend, William

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/19/2024 7:47:00 PM

Sorry for your loss. Thanks for this example of your contrast contest

Hilo Poet
Date: 6/20/2024 8:34:00 AM

Mahalo, Andrea, after my sister passed in 2013, I became the last son and sibling moved back here Hilo and tend to their graves. Caretaker of my nieces and nephews besides my own, all grown now and living up there stateside. Aloha from an angel-in-waiting.

Constance La France

Date: 6/19/2024 7:30:00 PM

Hilo, beautiful words, so sorry for your loss. I have lost a sister, and many other family, it is a forever pain. This poem is a wonderful example for your contest, hugs

Hilo Poet
Date: 6/20/2024 8:27:00 AM

Yes, being the last son and sibling all flown back home here in Hilo uphill. When my sister passed in 2013, I moved back to Hilo and tend to their graves. Taking care of my nieces and nephews, besides my own. They're all grown now living up there stateside. Happy angel-in-waiting. Aloha, Constance.

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 6/19/2024 11:42:00 AM

Aloha Hilo Poet, A lovely tribute to your brother. Aloha /Darlene/

Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 6/20/2024 10:18:00 AM

Aloha Hilo Poet, Wow! You are a good caregiver. Yes you are a happy angel. aloha /Darlene/

Hilo Poet
Date: 6/20/2024 8:08:00 AM

Yes, Darlene, I'm the last son & sibling, proud caretaker to my nieces and nephews all, as well as, my own. Their all grown up and on their own up there stateside. I'm in Hilo tending to my family's graves. A happy angel-in-waiting, Aloha Darlene.

Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 6/19/2024 2:48:00 PM

Hello Hilo Poet, Oh, Hilo poet, oh ,i did not know that. They are your angels watching you. Aloha! /Darlene/

Hilo Poet
Date: 6/19/2024 12:15:00 PM

Mahalo, Darlene, both of my brothers are with Mom and the rest of Heaven's Host. Aloha, William