Twisted

Twisted words with hidden meanings
Not lies, but still deceiving.
I lie in bed I’m dreaming
Those eyes are all I'm seeing.
You tried to be misleading
I died inside still bleeding.
My mind is fried I’m reeling,
I tried I was mistreated.
Once thrived I’m now depleted
But I’ve never retreated.
I’m seated I’m not defeated,
I’ll beat it and be undefeated…

lost lovelovefree verse

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John Freeman

November 18, 2009 at 5:32 PM

congratulations on your poem being featured this week, Sincerely, Moses

Janette Fisher

November 18, 2009 at 10:43 AM

Congatulations on your poem being feaured this week. Rgds Janette

Iolanda Scripca

November 16, 2009 at 8:59 PM

Congratulations for being featured this week. Love, Iolanda

James Fraser

November 16, 2009 at 10:29 AM

Many congratulations on your poem being featured this week >> James

P Sheart

November 16, 2009 at 9:52 AM

Congrats on your feature poem this week! Love Light Patty

Carol Sunshine Brown

November 16, 2009 at 5:14 AM

Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week Saq. I wish you the best in your writing endeavors. Love, Carol

November 15, 2009 at 7:15 PM

Interesting perspective for a thought provoking poem. Nice use of rhyme. Congratulations on having your poem featured. Wishing you ongoing success with your writing. Karen

Sag Capone

August 28, 2009 at 10:39 PM

Thank you for your incite Deborah, I've fixed the grammatical errors. As far as the name goes, it is not invisible as if I don't exist in the world. It is invisible as in, noone knows that I'm here writing. The poetry is invisible, not the poet :) When I first posted it was posting in my real name.. I didn't want that, as I wish for people I know to not see these things. Thanks for your words... possibly I will change it soon.

Debbie Guzzi

August 28, 2009 at 5:14 PM

I lie...lye is a burning chemical...I died inside...your name..it's a harsh hard thing to call oneself...and self defeating..pick a positive name for you! Light & Love