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Twerked

On the park bench in the starkness of a city facing darkness,
I was drinking, feeling tipsy, working on some poetry.
Close by me was something lurking; suddenly it started jerking,
and it seemed that it was *twerking!, How could I write poetry?
“Will you stop!” I fairly bellowed, “I am writing poetry!”
But it jerked incessantly.

I was reaching now my limit, but it acted like a dimwit,
covered up by nearby bushes. What it was I had to see!
Though the thing was well in my sight, how I wish I had a flash light,
for it had become a dark night, and this thing was close by me!
Poetry was fleeing from me. This thing was too close by me,
and it twerked incessantly.

I could see the bushes moving. It was like the thing was grooving.
But to what could it be grooving with no beat or melody?
What it heard, I was not hearing; in the shadows I sat peering
wondering if it was leering. How could I write poetry
if that thing was leering at me as I wrote my poetry?
It just jerked incessantly.

Though my heart was filled with such dread, boldly I spoke up and I said,
“You there, like some kind of pervert, just how crazy can you be?
Show yourself. Why are you irking me, like Miley Cyrus twerking
in the bushes where you’re lurking oh so close by me?
But the figure uttered nothing though it was so close by me
twerking on incessantly.

Finally I got much bolder. Getting up, I walked right over
to those bushes where the figure hid. I had to see!
What I saw in New York City in that park was not too pretty!
And for me it was a pity, it destroyed my poetry, 
For I’m finding out now when I want to write more poetry
it flows not incessantly.

In my mind it stays forever. Will it ever leave? No, never.
What I saw still haunts me when I try to write my poetry.
I just see that creature lurking in the bushes ever jerking
with its tiny butt a ‘twerking. What an ugly creepy monkey
Why the heck can’t I forget the sight of that dumb monkey
twerking there incessantly?!

*If you don't know what twerking is (one poet didn't) see About this Poem for the link!
(A parody on The Raven, trying to use the same meter and line length of Poe's poem. My apologies if I veered too far off course in how it inspired me!!)
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Negron Flores Avatar
December 3, 2015 at 6:58 AM
Congratulations on the placement of the contest Andrea.
A. Sharma Avatar
December 3, 2015 at 4:18 AM
Brilliant write Andrea .. congrats on fine win! U hv done justice to Poe!
A  Avatar
December 2, 2015 at 11:41 PM
Andrea, Congratulations on your Poe, Poe WIN! SKAT :)
Tor Avatar
December 2, 2015 at 7:09 PM
Lol nice write Andrea congratulations on your win.
A. Sharma Avatar
October 14, 2014 at 9:05 AM
Andrea its unique, it's different my dear! This is an amazing work here, congrats on big win!
Mehta Avatar
October 13, 2014 at 9:49 PM
I am surprised with quite different approach to Raven, Andrea, congrats
Ryerson Avatar
October 13, 2014 at 7:50 PM
Yes dear lady, you DID veer off course...Straight to my quaking heart thou didst done veer....'Nevermore!' No, that won't do at all, How bout 'Evermore' or 'Forevermore' (?) Is twerking similar to twerping? Well, I certainly am NOT a twerp! (I think)... HUGE congratulations - Tim
Deschler Avatar
October 13, 2014 at 6:31 PM
I love that you used the same rhyming pattern and rhythm as "The Raven". Your more unique and modern take on the theme was great, and it still kept the same bothered tone as Poe had!.... Congratulations on your win, Andrea!
Allison Avatar
October 13, 2014 at 5:54 PM
many congrats on your win Andrea - great to see this again :-) hugs jan xxx
Johnson Avatar
October 5, 2014 at 3:04 PM
Oh yes Andrea. We did try to interpret the contest the same way. You wrote more verses though. I wrote it yesterday before I went to my last granddaughter's wedding. the wedding was so nice. and our little bride so beautiful. Great weather and great fun. Love, Joyce
Sirak Avatar
October 4, 2014 at 8:39 AM
Great fun! How dare the monkey interrupt your flow of words. We always need more of your poetry. Poe would be laughing too, I think.
Austin Avatar
October 2, 2014 at 4:22 PM
In this case, "Quoth the twerky, get in the groove, turkey" Hardy harr, harr. I like it, but what the hell is twerking? Love, daver
Yvonne Avatar
September 30, 2014 at 7:22 PM
You didn't steer off course, the monkey you see had a thick coat of fur, it's color not unusual a dark RAVEN black. Again I'm sorry, please forgive me but I need to FAV this one. A brilliant write, the style is as Poe as it gets. Handling the levity while maintaining the classical music of this particular piece was the challenge you faced and met. A very creative take in order to separate yourself from the crowd. BRAVO!
Mcdaid Avatar
September 30, 2014 at 11:31 AM
smiling andrea delightfully beautifully penned piece dear friend
Walker Avatar
September 30, 2014 at 6:59 AM
I will now call you Edgar Allan, freaky weird that you can switch from one form to another and do it so well.
Bordner Avatar
September 29, 2014 at 8:46 PM
I become vociferous and violent if savages interrupt my focus on poetry Andrea. It takes a real jerk to twerk, monkeys are known to go berserk. Xool social commentary poem. J.A.B.
Smith Avatar
September 29, 2014 at 8:43 PM
lol...love it Andrea...hugs Tim
Johnson Avatar
September 29, 2014 at 6:04 PM
I enjoyed your time sitting on the bench. Leary of that eerie queery little mench. Ever present in the back of your mind. Look if you want, I don't think you will ever find. The herky jerky twerky twit. Forever beguiling us when we sit. Peace. :) Really enjoyed this style from you Andrea.
Allison Avatar
September 29, 2014 at 5:55 PM
you are a great poe et Andrea - I was laughing from start to finish at this brilliant rhyme - hugs Jan xxx
Nance Avatar
September 29, 2014 at 5:47 PM
HAHAAHAHA oh this was funny, I enjoyed this so very much! Haha, well done lady, your good, that is a modern day poe :)
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