Turning Point

Will tomorrow be smiles and lovely
Will your smile ever be real to me again
I don't know how to change what is 
Time has creeped upon you and I
Grey is our hair and loose is our skin

Those things don't matter
Just the way you speak unkindly
Hurts me to my soul
Bitter blood boils through my veins
Tension causes stress points in my face

My smile has been away for awhile
I miss that smile 
I miss your laughter
What should we do or say?

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 2/24/2011 3:21:00 PM
A very touching write, Doris. Thought provoking with a melancholy sobering effect. No muddy suds here, Doris! :) "Turning Point"s aren't easy, sometimes it takes a while to find one's footing. Wishing you and yours the best! Mikki
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Date: 2/14/2011 7:36:00 AM
your touching my heart. T. S.
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Date: 2/14/2011 5:35:00 AM
i like this. would'nt it be wonderful that he secretly loved you even though your so mean. john
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Date: 2/14/2011 5:07:00 AM
Ah yes Doris but luv is forever and gray hair and loose skin is part of the package .haha.. ka lovely emotional write luv.. Happy Valentine's Day to u too.. my friend..with luv luv luv luv...
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Date: 2/8/2011 7:15:00 PM
Good descriptiveness in this poem. A decent write.
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Date: 2/7/2011 10:05:00 PM
Hi Doris, will try and bring back the smile for you someday, you deserved it. Harry
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Date: 2/6/2011 5:00:00 PM
sayin' one for y'all. Well done write, Doris
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Date: 2/6/2011 4:40:00 PM
Sad ....This happens to couples, family, and friends sometimes.Good topic and good presentation..Thanks for stopping by...Mom
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Date: 2/6/2011 11:58:00 AM
well! i hope this write is only experimental Doris, i find it hard to believe that there are people so insecure that normal life is such a challenge to them. i am looking in on you to say thanks for the support i do believe you were the first to make me feel welcome here at the soup, thank you.
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Date: 2/5/2011 1:21:00 AM
We can't do anything about the loose skin as we get older, Doris, but it would be nice if kind words and gestures remained in a relationship. I can personally relate to this one so it's a new favorite for me. You made your "point" so well! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 2/4/2011 4:34:00 PM
Beautiful expressions, on the turning point in life that more or less everyone faces, Doris
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Date: 2/4/2011 2:09:00 PM
Very sad Doris, but something has to be said for lasting and being together for a long time...hope your well my dear poet freind...love Michael
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Date: 2/4/2011 2:02:00 PM
This one hits close to home for me Doris, thanks for sharing! Steve
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Date: 2/4/2011 11:50:00 AM
Spending a lifetime with someone tends to make us take each other for granted. We simply need to learn to smile. Excellent write.
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Date: 2/4/2011 11:09:00 AM
Okay Doris....You can't write sad stuff anymore....this was too good.....Larry
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