Tufty Tifty's, Tough Day On the Farm

Leanne was a farm girl at heart
She loved playing with her special cow
She used to eat her mums freshly made tart
Leanne didn't like her brothers sow

Oliver used to make the oil 
Dan made the juice
Oliver used to oil up Leanne and the cows
Dan bit off her ear!

Leanne danced with the poodle
Leanne danced with the cock(erel) 
Leanne's legs where like noodles
Leanne's ear went like a rock

I miss 'Bao to my bab' but Trish won't allow it 
I'm scarred James will leave me
But Linda is by my side
I love Poetry soups!!!!!

----Dedicated to Linda  (Poetry Destroyer A), and JB, you know who you're ;-) ---

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016



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Date: 4/11/2016 9:00:00 AM
Farm life is a hard life Leanne, but here in the poetry farm you'll never come to any harm ! I enjoyed the read, but not as much as the previous one as the flow isn't as smooth. Verses 1 & 3 are fine, maybe tweaking 2 & 4 would give a smoother flow. Hope that helps Leanne.
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Lenny Gazbowski
Date: 4/12/2016 9:51:00 AM
My pleasure Leanne. I shall read your updated version. I'll also add that if you don't agree/like the advice given then stick with what you have written.
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Leanne Tuftytift
Date: 4/12/2016 8:45:00 AM
Thank you Lenny, I have made a new poem building on your constructive critisism. I hope I have improved and pleased you... many thanks all the best, ciao for now, see you later xoxox Tufty Tift
Date: 4/11/2016 8:12:00 AM
Please give me some feedback, Im not too sure on this one :S I think it shows my bad side xox
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