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Trying To Reach Perfection

You try...and try...then try some more,
     trying to obtain that perfect score.

A perfect spouse...
     a perfect house...
          why you even have the perfect mouse.

You try and wear the perfect clothes.
     You even tried to buy a perfect hose.

The more you try and obtain perfection,
     the more you go in the opposite direction.

To try and be perfect will drive you mad...
     and when you fall short it will make you sad.

So do your best with what you've got...
     and don't worry about being who your not.


                                  P.R.Deremer

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Frank Black Blacharczyk

Date: 10/22/2015 1:04:00 PM

When we try for this perfection we do it at another's expense. Nice imagery of trying so hard to be perfect while the world is crashing around them.

Phatt Matt

Date: 10/22/2015 4:14:00 AM

I couldn't have written it better myself well written and its the truth ~phatt

Pam Deremer
Date: 10/22/2015 12:54:00 PM

Thank you very much!!!!

Boygene Rabura

Date: 10/21/2015 12:03:00 PM

this is what every one should read and know.

Pam Deremer
Date: 10/21/2015 12:46:00 PM

Thank you!

Joan Donnelly Ellis

Date: 10/21/2015 9:07:00 AM

Love it

Pam Deremer
Date: 10/21/2015 11:28:00 AM

Thank you for reading my work.

Edith D Eutsler

Date: 10/21/2015 8:49:00 AM

Very Nice Pam! AS you penned, "do your best with what you've got." Be what you are and stay HAPPY!!! Stop looking in every corner for perfection-for even there it would be a little dusty!

Pam Deremer
Date: 10/21/2015 11:30:00 AM

Thank you for reading my work.

Edwardj Clark

Date: 10/21/2015 6:53:00 AM

Lovely verse, and how true Pam. A nice clear poem, easy to read with great truth and sentiment. Well done, Edward

Pam Deremer
Date: 10/21/2015 11:35:00 AM

Thank you for your very nice comment.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/21/2015 5:51:00 AM

Sad that we can't be what we want to be but we can constantly try to obtain perfection that is as long as it is perfect love, perfect forgiveness, perfect understanding, perfect committment, etc..Enjoyed reading your work..Sara

Pam Deremer
Date: 10/21/2015 11:31:00 AM

Thank you very much.

Punnia Viswan Bhatia

Date: 10/21/2015 4:13:00 AM

nice rhyming and nice lines

Rizwana Bhurani

Date: 10/21/2015 2:01:00 AM

Perfect reminder that no man can be fully perfect.Good one

Jo Saunders

Date: 10/21/2015 1:13:00 AM

Loved it, Pam - advice we only listen to when we've made all the mistakes, alas.

Michael Crabb

Date: 10/20/2015 10:25:00 PM

I like it Pam! It has a great message with a smooth flow...

Debbie Duncan

Date: 10/20/2015 9:34:00 PM

WoW, nice poem :)

Anthony Crisafulli

Date: 10/20/2015 9:22:00 PM

god bless the mind that lifts the lead, for us to read, what need be said.

Edward Ebbs

Date: 10/20/2015 9:17:00 PM

Nicely put, thank you for sharing :)

John Hamilton

Date: 10/19/2015 12:59:00 AM

beautiful poem, thanks for your kind words on my poem heaven sent. You might like my new one, the kindness In your eyes. Thanks

Pam Deremer
Date: 10/21/2015 11:26:00 AM

Thank you!

Maurice Rigoler

Date: 10/16/2015 2:03:00 PM

Last line says it all. Suggestion: make "who" "what" since perfection is not a person. Thank you for reading my poem. Best to you in your writing endeavors. / M

Jo Hayton

Date: 10/2/2015 3:37:00 PM

Oh my Lord, I feel like this every day, so much pressure, love love this poem, glad I'm not alone !!!! Xxxx

Pam Deremer
Date: 10/2/2015 3:49:00 PM

Thank you for your comment and for reading my work.

Cherl Dunn

Date: 9/28/2015 5:36:00 PM

Dear Pam Perfection is the true myth of life, which people are always trying to obtain by whatever means possible, wonderful giving it straight to the point of this matter my friend, you've said it all, I'll read another, cheri

Pam Deremer
Date: 9/28/2015 7:31:00 PM

Thank you!

Keng Chuan Seng

Date: 9/28/2015 4:46:00 PM

Wow... so succintly phrased .... For those who are perpetually in a race.... For perfection obther than by God's grace... When in truth they are perfections in place..!!!

Keng Chuan Seng

Date: 9/28/2015 4:29:00 PM

Wow... so succintly phrased .... For those who are perpetually in a race.... For perfection obther than by God's grace... When in truth they are perfections in place..!!!M

Pat Davis

Date: 9/25/2015 12:28:00 AM

Good advice! : )

Pam Deremer
Date: 9/25/2015 11:17:00 AM

Thank you!

Janice Canerdy

Date: 9/22/2015 7:52:00 PM

You're right, Pam. Try as we might, we cannot be who we are not. Well said Janice

Pam Deremer
Date: 9/23/2015 12:19:00 PM

Thank you very much!