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Trying Haiku

Soldiers pray to God For the choices they must make To kill a child bomb Evil has a face Laughing as it destroys friends Who believed in LOVE Written by Trudy Schrader while waiting in the car rider line 01-27-11

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Sharon Ruebel

Date: 1/28/2011 3:33:00 PM

Hello Trudy, I gave you a seven because you have written this with such heart and purpose. It is more like a Senryu however so well done! I look forward to reading more from you my dear. Thank you for sharing your work with us today As Always, Shar

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 1/28/2011 1:29:00 PM

Very meaningful haiku you have worded so well , Trudy

Christine A Kysely

Date: 1/28/2011 10:19:00 AM

Very Nice Trudy!!! Robert had to straighten me out in the beginning as well!!! Enjoyed reading this very much!!! At least you have your syllable count correct!!! Thats where a few people seem to be lacking!!! Christine

Trudy Schrader

Date: 1/28/2011 9:00:00 AM

Dang it! I will learn, thanks for the heads up. I suppose war is unnatural as you can get.

Robert Pettit

Date: 1/28/2011 8:44:00 AM

Good writing, but this work is more of a senryu. Haiku poems deal with things in nature.