Trying Haiku

Soldiers pray to God
For the choices they must make
To kill a child bomb



Evil has a face
Laughing as it destroys friends
Who believed in LOVE

Written by Trudy Schrader while waiting in the car rider line 01-27-11
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Ruebel Avatar
January 28, 2011 at 3:33 PM
Hello Trudy, I gave you a seven because you have written this with such heart and purpose. It is more like a Senryu however so well done! I look forward to reading more from you my dear. Thank you for sharing your work with us today As Always, Shar
Mehta Avatar
January 28, 2011 at 1:29 PM
Very meaningful haiku you have worded so well , Trudy
Kysely Avatar
January 28, 2011 at 10:19 AM
Very Nice Trudy!!! Robert had to straighten me out in the beginning as well!!! Enjoyed reading this very much!!! At least you have your syllable count correct!!! Thats where a few people seem to be lacking!!! Christine
Schrader Avatar
January 28, 2011 at 9:00 AM
Dang it! I will learn, thanks for the heads up. I suppose war is unnatural as you can get.
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January 28, 2011 at 8:44 AM
Good writing, but this work is more of a senryu. Haiku poems deal with things in nature.
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