True Balance

to my heart
I say open
open wider than
you believe you can
I tell my soul
be completely free
freer than you dare
my spirit
hears me say
be peaceful but wild
my mind screams,
"What about me?!"
to which I respond,
"Shut up, you ignorant child!"
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Onclaud Avatar
November 12, 2016 at 1:30 PM
cling to what brings piece not noise... a soulful write, christy!..huggs
Trifiatis Avatar
November 12, 2016 at 12:42 PM
Beautifully said my dear, Christy! Excellent writing!
Delaney Avatar
November 12, 2016 at 7:28 AM
So true, Christy: we must quiet our minds to connect to the universe within. Hugs, SuZ
Downing  Avatar
November 12, 2016 at 6:45 AM
OMG... Thank you Christy for sharing this piece. It got me laughing to the moon and back. Makes my morning start out good :)
De Yecouba Avatar
November 12, 2016 at 1:00 AM
Haha, "shut up, you ignorant child!" I even feel it as if I were the one being addressed. Pleasure. Keep it up.
Stover Avatar
November 12, 2016 at 1:39 AM
Oh, I forgot, I have a shorter more to the point version of this poem on my blog www.poeticwritings.com I'd really appreciate it if you'd check it out and tell me which version you think makes the best impact. And if you'd read my other writings and comment on what you think I'd appreciate that too. I need feedback from talented poets.
Stover Avatar
November 12, 2016 at 1:25 AM
Thank you for that kind comment. I actually got that line from my mom. We were having a pleasant discussion and she jokingly said, "Shut up my ignorant child!" lol Then she gave me some advise. she said, "Christy, honey, you think to much with your mind. Start thinking from the spirit God gave you". That's what inspired this poem. I'm happy you liked it. I'm enjoying your poetry too.
Wolf Avatar
November 11, 2016 at 11:27 PM
Love it! But I can't imagine it being much shorter! This is great the way it is Christy.
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