True Balance

to my heart
I say open
open wider than
you believe you can
I tell my soul
be completely free
freer than you dare
my spirit
hears me say
be peaceful but wild
my mind screams,
"What about me?!"
to which I respond,
"Shut up, you ignorant child!"

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016



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Date: 11/12/2016 1:30:00 PM
cling to what brings piece not noise... a soulful write, christy!..huggs
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Date: 11/12/2016 12:42:00 PM
Beautifully said my dear, Christy! Excellent writing!
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Date: 11/12/2016 7:28:00 AM
So true, Christy: we must quiet our minds to connect to the universe within. Hugs, SuZ
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Date: 11/12/2016 6:45:00 AM
OMG... Thank you Christy for sharing this piece. It got me laughing to the moon and back. Makes my morning start out good :)
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Date: 11/12/2016 1:00:00 AM
Haha, "shut up, you ignorant child!" I even feel it as if I were the one being addressed. Pleasure. Keep it up.
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Christy Stover
Date: 11/12/2016 1:39:00 AM
Oh, I forgot, I have a shorter more to the point version of this poem on my blog www.poeticwritings.com I'd really appreciate it if you'd check it out and tell me which version you think makes the best impact. And if you'd read my other writings and comment on what you think I'd appreciate that too. I need feedback from talented poets.
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Christy Stover
Date: 11/12/2016 1:25:00 AM
Thank you for that kind comment. I actually got that line from my mom. We were having a pleasant discussion and she jokingly said, "Shut up my ignorant child!" lol Then she gave me some advise. she said, "Christy, honey, you think to much with your mind. Start thinking from the spirit God gave you". That's what inspired this poem. I'm happy you liked it. I'm enjoying your poetry too.
Date: 11/11/2016 11:27:00 PM
Love it! But I can't imagine it being much shorter! This is great the way it is Christy.
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