Kim Rodrigues Poet Rhyme

Trills of Petrichor

The birdie whistled
A wet and wild song;
Damp feathers bristled.

Wild song, rain-scented;
Trills of petrichor,
With flapping, vented.

Petrichor afresh.
A hot steam, released.
Buds unfurl-refresh.

Released melody;
Shines sweet bluebird’s wings
In storm’s brevity.

Bluebird’s wings fluff bright,
As the sun billows,
At the beak’s delight.

Billows, of warm tweet
And zephyr, compete.

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Mystic Rose Rose May 27, 2023 at 7:31 PM this is perfected executed, gl Kim Rodrigues May 27, 2023 at 7:35 PM Thank you, Rose!

Jan Allison May 22, 2023 at 1:20 PM what a wonderful example for the contest Kim, I agree with Eve it is haiku like in its construction:-) hugs Jan xx Kim Rodrigues May 22, 2023 at 4:00 PM Thank you, Jan! I appreciate you! xx

Eve Roper May 15, 2023 at 9:44 AM Lovely almost like a haiku Kim Rodrigues May 15, 2023 at 11:02 AM Thank you, Eve :)

Andrea Dietrich April 28, 2023 at 11:48 PM I think I am confused how to do abab after seeing the example here again. I am confused how to include a middle lines last word into first line of next stanza. Is this word necessary? Can you tell me where sn abab example might be? Kim Rodrigues April 29, 2023 at 5:10 AM No, it is not necessary…just consistency in what you do. Hope that helps! <3

Mystic Rose Rose April 12, 2023 at 2:54 PM You made me almost turn into a bird while I read this, what an active pleasant poem this way Kim, gl in the contest :) Kim Rodrigues April 12, 2023 at 6:17 PM Thanks so much, Rose!

Sotto Poet April 12, 2023 at 2:21 PM This is a fantastic example, Kim. After reading the guidelines, I began to appreciate 'Chanso' for the intricate lyrical form that it is. However, you have simplified things greatly. Beautiful poetry on the smell of fresh rain, the bluebird, and petrichor. Kim Rodrigues April 12, 2023 at 2:54 PM Thank you so much, Lasaad! I hope you write for the contest!

Andrea Dietrich April 12, 2023 at 1:07 PM So beautiful, Kim. I'll have to refer back to this one if I try your contest. Kim Rodrigues April 12, 2023 at 1:54 PM Please do! First decide how many lines you want in each verse and the syllable count. There needs to be a rhyming pattern. Have fun!

Joseph P. DiMino April 12, 2023 at 7:09 AM I had to look up "Petrichor"...it was worth it. Amazing poetry! Another FAV! "Bluebird’s wings fluff bright, As the sun billows, at the beak’s delight." Love it! Kim Rodrigues April 12, 2023 at 8:52 AM Thank you so much, Joe! I appreciate you!

Valsa George April 12, 2023 at 6:55 AM This is a great model, Kim. While going through the rules, I felt 'Chanso' as a complex poetic form. But you have made it sweet and simple here. Lovely poem on the first rain, its petrichor and the blue bird ! Kim Rodrigues April 12, 2023 at 8:51 AM Once you wrap your mind around it. Hope you write one! Thank you! :)

Beata Agustin April 12, 2023 at 2:23 AM Wow! So delightful and delighting as to the content, form, and message evoked. Thanks for this excellent example... Thanks likewise for my placement in your recently-judged contest. God bless you. Kim Rodrigues April 12, 2023 at 5:33 AM It was delightful to have you on the winning list, my friend! Thank you!

Regina Mcintosh April 12, 2023 at 1:08 AM So interesting... believe I'll try it but not so sure I'll do it perfectly. Be patient with me please. God bless you always, Love, Gina Kim Rodrigues April 12, 2023 at 5:34 AM Yay! So glad you will try it! Blessings to you, my friend!

Joanna Daniel April 11, 2023 at 9:31 PM This is cool, Kim:) Kim Rodrigues April 12, 2023 at 5:34 AM Thank you, Joanna! Hugs ~ Kim