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Trills of Petrichor

The birdie whistled A wet and wild song; Damp feathers bristled. Wild song, rain-scented; Trills of petrichor, With flapping, vented. Petrichor afresh. A hot steam, released. Buds unfurl-refresh. Released melody; Shines sweet bluebird’s wings In storm’s brevity. Bluebird’s wings fluff bright, As the sun billows, At the beak’s delight. Billows, of warm tweet And zephyr, compete.

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Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 5/27/2023 7:31:00 PM

this is perfected executed, gl

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/27/2023 7:35:00 PM

Thank you, Rose!

Jan Allison

Date: 5/22/2023 1:20:00 PM

what a wonderful example for the contest Kim, I agree with Eve it is haiku like in its construction:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/22/2023 4:00:00 PM

Thank you, Jan! I appreciate you! xx

Eve Roper

Date: 5/15/2023 9:44:00 AM

Lovely almost like a haiku

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/15/2023 11:02:00 AM

Thank you, Eve :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/28/2023 11:48:00 PM

I think I am confused how to do abab after seeing the example here again. I am confused how to include a middle lines last word into first line of next stanza. Is this word necessary? Can you tell me where sn abab example might be?

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/29/2023 5:10:00 AM

No, it is not necessary…just consistency in what you do. Hope that helps! <3

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 4/12/2023 2:54:00 PM

You made me almost turn into a bird while I read this, what an active pleasant poem this way Kim, gl in the contest :)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/12/2023 6:17:00 PM

Thanks so much, Rose!

Sotto Poet

Date: 4/12/2023 2:21:00 PM

This is a fantastic example, Kim. After reading the guidelines, I began to appreciate 'Chanso' for the intricate lyrical form that it is. However, you have simplified things greatly. Beautiful poetry on the smell of fresh rain, the bluebird, and petrichor.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/12/2023 2:54:00 PM

Thank you so much, Lasaad! I hope you write for the contest!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/12/2023 1:07:00 PM

So beautiful, Kim. I'll have to refer back to this one if I try your contest.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/12/2023 1:54:00 PM

Please do! First decide how many lines you want in each verse and the syllable count. There needs to be a rhyming pattern. Have fun!

Joe Dimino

Date: 4/12/2023 7:09:00 AM

I had to look up "Petrichor"...it was worth it. Amazing poetry! Another FAV! "Bluebird’s wings fluff bright, As the sun billows, at the beak’s delight." Love it!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/12/2023 8:52:00 AM

Thank you so much, Joe! I appreciate you!

Valsa George

Date: 4/12/2023 6:55:00 AM

This is a great model, Kim. While going through the rules, I felt 'Chanso' as a complex poetic form. But you have made it sweet and simple here. Lovely poem on the first rain, its petrichor and the blue bird !

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/12/2023 8:51:00 AM

Once you wrap your mind around it. Hope you write one! Thank you! :)

Beata Agustin

Date: 4/12/2023 2:23:00 AM

Wow! So delightful and delighting as to the content, form, and message evoked. Thanks for this excellent example... Thanks likewise for my placement in your recently-judged contest. God bless you.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/12/2023 5:33:00 AM

It was delightful to have you on the winning list, my friend! Thank you!

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 4/12/2023 1:08:00 AM

So interesting... believe I'll try it but not so sure I'll do it perfectly. Be patient with me please. God bless you always, Love, Gina

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/12/2023 5:34:00 AM

Yay! So glad you will try it! Blessings to you, my friend!

Joanna Daniel

Date: 4/11/2023 9:31:00 PM

This is cool, Kim:)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/12/2023 5:34:00 AM

Thank you, Joanna! Hugs ~ Kim