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I noticed her two weeks ago. She flew into my physics lab like hell itself was after her and tripped as she sat down. She's always late for classes, stammering her apologies, flustered and myopic, her glasses barely perched upon her nose. Accident-prone, she barreled through the library like Grant attacking Richmond, giggling nervously as she checked out her books. To me she is a treasure, a whirling dervish dressed in black and white, always black and white, like for her it's some particular religion. I asked her to the movies. She acted like I was the first who'd ever taken interest, she was flattered but she flatly and decidedly said no. She had thrown down the gauntlet, so I set out to woo her with my wit and charm, taking every opportunity to bump into her when and where I could. Finally she acquiesced, and when she slowed down enough to smile and chat and laugh and joke with me my heart was hers to keep!

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 3/15/2009 12:01:00 PM
Sweet read. Kind and gentle and full of strong story telling imagery~ GREAT FLOW and ending. Nice wrk my friend. Just Lovely fun writing...story telling magic!
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Date: 3/5/2009 3:57:00 PM
Wow! This is brilliant. Poetry that can touch my heart and tickle it at the same time is really special to me. The raw enlightened innocence you so clearly portray is touching. :D I love this poem. And I'd also like to kindly thank you for your generous words. Ema
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Date: 2/27/2009 9:13:00 AM
Oh, Keith, as a teacher I can relate! Love the image "like Grant attacking Richmond." Wonderfully witty poem! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 2/22/2009 11:17:00 PM
loved the last few stanzas... a very precious treasure!! lovely write! ~ Arany
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Date: 2/22/2009 4:27:00 PM
Thanks for allowing me to smile with this one. Thankfully, there are still people that look beyond the exterior to see the inner soul. Enjoyed this uplifting poem. Karen
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Date: 2/22/2009 2:40:00 PM
Super, I love it, such a happy picture, great stuff, hope to God she passes those physics papers in the summer!
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Date: 2/22/2009 2:13:00 PM
I love this, how you were determined to get her to notice you...and I can just see her running, full speed ahead, forget graceful....love this, always, Christy
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Date: 2/22/2009 12:46:00 PM
She sounds absolutely precious! This was like a scene from a movie flashing before my eyes. Love happy endings. Well done - in many ways! Love, Shar
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Date: 2/22/2009 12:02:00 PM
Yes.! This puts the reader right in the conquest with you. I just love it. BG
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Date: 2/22/2009 11:42:00 AM
This is so sweet Keith.. you painted this so well.. The voice in the piece really lets the reader in and introduce this woman perfectly. Very good piece.
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