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Treading Water

Just treading water
I see no haven in sight
Lead arms lose the fight

Eileen Manassian Ghali

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Mel Merrill

April 30, 2014 at 1:05 AM

Very nice, Eileen. How often have I been tasked with either treading, or succumbing to the icy depths. When the arms grow weary, it can be a difficult choice. Us artists understand Big hugs ;-)

James Kelley

March 13, 2014 at 4:16 AM

I know this feeling...well expressed

Poet Tacito

March 10, 2014 at 10:54 PM

This is why I keep my Spongebob raft handy, just in case!

Richard D Seal

March 9, 2014 at 7:49 PM

I can't tread water, so I have to just look ahead at the next objective and keep going, and I think you're a better swimmer than you let on. Take care, Richard

Nette Onclaud

March 9, 2014 at 12:59 PM

quite sad but beautifully expressed, eileen... time to smile again!.. huggs

Richard Lamoureux

March 8, 2014 at 3:19 PM

I just went to the 300 sequel with my son last night and one of the characters was given lead bracelets and tossed into the sea. This poem made me think of him.

Eileen Manassian

March 9, 2014 at 6:36 AM

:) Thanks for this comment, Richard. So...I was at the movie theater with ya all! :) COOL!

Verlena S. Walker

March 8, 2014 at 10:20 AM

Nicely said well written Eileen... Verlena

Eileen Manassian

March 9, 2014 at 6:36 AM

Thanks, Verlena. Glad to have this visit from you!

Richard Lamoureux

March 8, 2014 at 8:36 AM

Fortunately the water is shallow, just put your feet down and stand up, you will be fine. I'm sorry you are feeling down.

Eileen Manassian

March 9, 2014 at 6:37 AM

Better now, Richard. Better. Thanks for your continual support and care. Bless you!

Demetrios Trifiatis

March 8, 2014 at 5:21 AM

Who is that mysterious lady behind the shades? Certainly a poet must be for such a majestic Senryu has she written! Happy Woman's Day!

Eileen Manassian

March 9, 2014 at 6:40 AM

Thanks, Demetri mou agapimeni...Your comment is simply amazing. As always. I've been...unwell...in many ways. I will visit you soon! Hugs!

Liam Mcdaid

March 7, 2014 at 9:59 PM

amost sounds drowning beautifully penned piece

Eileen Manassian

March 9, 2014 at 6:41 AM

Yes, I almost did drown, Liam. I'm ok now. I'm sorry I didn't post on your poems...believe me, dear. I did read every last one. I was just too depressed to write anything. Will be by your work soon. I can't get enough of romance. Hugs

Ilene Bauer

March 7, 2014 at 6:26 PM

so much said in this short poem - brilliant! keep treading, girl - i think your poetry will save you...

Eileen Manassian

March 9, 2014 at 6:42 AM

Thanks, my sweet Ilene. You know me well. It is therapeutic or me. It is just such a passion of mine...to write. Hope I don't lose the love for writing based on what others think of my work. Thanks for the visit.

Shadow Hamilton

March 7, 2014 at 2:58 PM

a sense of loss and desolation rings from this lovely write Eileen hugs

Eileen Manassian

March 9, 2014 at 6:43 AM

Yes, you are right on the money, my dear. I'm in a better place right now. Thanks for the visit and hugs!

David Williams

March 7, 2014 at 1:24 PM

Eileen I like this it is a good image albeit a sad one, you could have also used 'heavy heart befalls' as your last line...keep your chin up....David

Eileen Manassian

March 9, 2014 at 6:46 AM

Thanks, David...Will try my very best. Thank you for your encouraging words and suggestion. I'm thinking about how it fits. I appreciate you trying to help me on it...Heavy heart befalls...befalls me or others...what about My heavy heart tugs? Just not sure of befalls and how that fits. Thanks for visiting...

Paul Callus

March 7, 2014 at 12:34 PM

No...no...lift yourself above the waves; the fight is not lost; just look ahead...reach out...// paul

Eileen Manassian

March 9, 2014 at 6:47 AM

Thank you for reaching out to me, Paul. It did help...a great deal. I'm so appreciative. I'm sorry it took a while to respond. I was unable....I'm better now. Hugs

Robert Pettit

March 7, 2014 at 11:42 AM

Try to stay afloat until you reach the shore.

Eileen Manassian

March 7, 2014 at 11:45 AM

I don't know......seems pretty hopeless right now.....I'm discouraged about my poetry...and life....in general. There...how is that for moping. Thanks for the visit, Robert.

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