Trapped Between Two Floors

Trapped between two floors, maybe heaven and hell,
were souls that screamed through elevator doors.
Our feet in blood, we asked who was the devil
among us. Strangers died and out of fear

    were souls that screamed through elevator doors.
    I touched them, and they knew not who was the beast
    among us. Strangers died and out of fear
    they closed their eyes. I am the morning star!

I touched them and they knew not who was the beast.
Our feet in blood, we asked who was the devil?
They closed their eyes. I am the morning star...
trapped between two floors, maybe heaven and hell.


{Morning Star a.k.a. Lucifer}
Pantoum
7-10-11

To my beautiful readers
if this poem is confusing...
[ Lucifer in latin means "light-bearer". It was the name 
given to the dawn appearance of the planet Venus, which
 heralds daylight. For this meaning, English generally uses
 the names "Morning Star" or "Day Star", one of the numerous
 titles for the Devil, although, the Roman Rite liturgy's Exultet chant
 in praise of the paschal candle refers to Christ as the "Morning Star". 
This poem was inspired by the movie "Devil", where a group of strangers
 were trapped on an elevator and killed off one by one by the Devil, who was
 in the form of one of the mysterious strangers.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 7/27/2011 4:29:00 PM
Congrats Johnny on your fab fourth place in Pantoum with this fab write luv..
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Date: 7/27/2011 2:19:00 PM
hey Johnny, congrats on your win,David
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Date: 7/27/2011 1:54:00 PM
Enjjoyed reading though it gave me the willies, heebee jeebees etc.
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Date: 7/27/2011 10:55:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Paula Swanson's "Pantoum" contest Johnny. Love, Carol
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Date: 7/14/2011 7:10:00 PM
An interesting write, but isn't Jesus known as the morning star? I like the images, but found morning star out of place and quite confusing. A suggestion: I am ... war... indifference ... terrorism ... even regret or "I am the final ride." That being said, it has that sinister quality of a TV show I watched way back in the eigties and I can't remember the name. The opening sequence featured a twisted carosel with the horses looking like they are screaming. Good luck in contest, Cyndi
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Date: 7/13/2011 5:36:00 AM
Johnny, you make this form look so easy, I have not tried my hand at it.. If this is for Paula's contest, good luck to you with this thought provoking write :) lfde Wilma
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Date: 7/12/2011 11:41:00 AM
Skillfully done, and an interesting write too. If this is for a contest I wish you the best of luck. Regards, Robert.
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Date: 7/12/2011 10:37:00 AM
Compelling poem that evokes many philosophical thoughts about life, Johnny. Very interesting use of the form as well and I'm sure it will do well in the pantoum contest. Wishing you success! You're really a great writer. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 7/11/2011 8:31:00 AM
wow! interesting,..p.d.
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Date: 7/11/2011 8:21:00 AM
Thank you for sharing your excellent poetry with us Johnny. I enjoyed reading it this lovely morning. May you have a wonderful week and enjoy life to the fullest. Love, Carol
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Date: 7/10/2011 7:25:00 PM
wonderful and enlightening words Johnny ..good luck in the contest for Paula.. a stirring sensatiion luv..
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Date: 7/10/2011 7:16:00 PM
well done, good luck in the contest
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