Johnny Sumler Poet Pantoum

Trapped Between Two Floors

Trapped between two floors, maybe heaven and hell,
were souls that screamed through elevator doors.
Our feet in blood, we asked who was the devil
among us. Strangers died and out of fear

    were souls that screamed through elevator doors.
    I touched them, and they knew not who was the beast
    among us. Strangers died and out of fear
    they closed their eyes. I am the morning star!

I touched them and they knew not who was the beast.
Our feet in blood, we asked who was the devil?
They closed their eyes. I am the morning star...
trapped between two floors, maybe heaven and hell.


{Morning Star a.k.a. Lucifer}
Pantoum
7-10-11

To my beautiful readers
if this poem is confusing...
[ Lucifer in latin means "light-bearer". It was the name 
given to the dawn appearance of the planet Venus, which
 heralds daylight. For this meaning, English generally uses
 the names "Morning Star" or "Day Star", one of the numerous
 titles for the Devil, although, the Roman Rite liturgy's Exultet chant
 in praise of the paschal candle refers to Christ as the "Morning Star". 
This poem was inspired by the movie "Devil", where a group of strangers
 were trapped on an elevator and killed off one by one by the Devil, who was
 in the form of one of the mysterious strangers.

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Linda-Marie Sweetheart July 27, 2011 at 4:29 PM Congrats Johnny on your fab fourth place in Pantoum with this fab write luv..

David Williams July 27, 2011 at 2:19 PM hey Johnny, congrats on your win,David

Doris Culverhouse July 27, 2011 at 1:54 PM Enjjoyed reading though it gave me the willies, heebee jeebees etc.

Carol Sunshine Brown July 27, 2011 at 10:55 AM Congratulations on your win in Paula Swanson's "Pantoum" contest Johnny. Love, Carol

Cyndi Macmillan July 14, 2011 at 7:10 PM An interesting write, but isn't Jesus known as the morning star? I like the images, but found morning star out of place and quite confusing. A suggestion: I am ... war... indifference ... terrorism ... even regret or "I am the final ride." That being said, it has that sinister quality of a TV show I watched way back in the eigties and I can't remember the name. The opening sequence featured a twisted carosel with the horses looking like they are screaming. Good luck in contest, Cyndi

Wilma Neels July 13, 2011 at 5:36 AM Johnny, you make this form look so easy, I have not tried my hand at it.. If this is for Paula's contest, good luck to you with this thought provoking write :) lfde Wilma

Zzzzz Zzzzz July 12, 2011 at 11:41 AM Skillfully done, and an interesting write too. If this is for a contest I wish you the best of luck. Regards, Robert.

Carolyn Devonshire July 12, 2011 at 10:37 AM Compelling poem that evokes many philosophical thoughts about life, Johnny. Very interesting use of the form as well and I'm sure it will do well in the pantoum contest. Wishing you success! You're really a great writer. Love, Carolyn

Poet Destroyer A July 11, 2011 at 8:31 AM wow! interesting,..p.d.

Carol Sunshine Brown July 11, 2011 at 8:21 AM Thank you for sharing your excellent poetry with us Johnny. I enjoyed reading it this lovely morning. May you have a wonderful week and enjoy life to the fullest. Love, Carol

Linda-Marie Sweetheart July 10, 2011 at 7:25 PM wonderful and enlightening words Johnny ..good luck in the contest for Paula.. a stirring sensatiion luv..

Francine Roberts July 10, 2011 at 7:16 PM well done, good luck in the contest